Comment from RodG

Excellent

Your haiku has captured the essence of the artwork. Easy to visualize this bird soaring "high above." Love the play on words with "kite" and that great last line. Nicely done.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi RodG, Thanks for your lovely comments and Itried to make it an easy visualization with the words. And then searched for the ideal image and found this kite bird so used it . Many Cheers for your support Christine😃

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

This is a very creative haiku, I love the imagery. The bird shape kite.
Soaring in the blue skies, alluding to a summer kigo with a clever play on words for a satori
Well done

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Lu, I am pleased with the lovely response for this Haiku I think taking the class has helped and I am more mindful of the rules now Cheers so much for your support and chat tomorrow Christine😃

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Chrissie - a good haiku. I love the satori - good double meaning. Lines one and two which are almost interconnecting - 'silhouetted' would make a complete sentence, but of course you would loose your 7 syllable count. Does a haiku have to be a 5/7/5? Whatever, it is a very good addition to the book. Warm regards Dorothy

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Dorothy, Thanks for your review and no Haiku doesn't have to be 5-7-5 it can have less Syllables and therecare many ways they can be constructed but they usually have to have a reference or kiko a season ( blue sky = Summer, ) a reference to nature i.e bird and have a Satori ( ah ha moment)usually in the last line . They can be less than 17 syllables but usually short -long -short in three lines. I am learning all about Haiku in a class with Gypsy Blue Rose. So I am trying my prowess LOL As always your support is welcomed Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a marvelous haiku and so true to the traditional format. Your imagery is simply beautiful and connects seamlessly. The satori is a powerful observation of the scene. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Monica. What a lovely review and I enjoyed doing this one. the bird challenge was a good one and I have seen several birds soar in the blue sky including the Aussie Kite bird A bit like and eagle. Glad you thought the Satori was powerful Cheers Christine 😃😃

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Monica. What a lovely review and I enjoyed doing this one. the bird challenge was a good one and I have seen several birds soar in the blue sky including the Aussie Kite bird A bit like and eagle. Glad you thought the Satori was powerful Cheers Christine 😃😃

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Ah, so...very nice, Christine.
Yours is a well composed and constructed haiku, featuring a 5/7/4 syllable count, concrete imagery, and is written as a moment in nature captured in time.
Blue skies to me indicate Spring or Simmer (perhaps Autumn as well), and I really liked the play on words in your satori.
Well done!
~Dean :)

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Dean Thanks perhaps the classes are working LOL, I actually thought of this ages ago when watching a bird circle in the blue sky and waited for an opportunity to write it and this seemed the perfect chance. I hope it has met all rules LOL Cheers and chat tomorrow in class Christine😃🙋🏼

reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Jan-2017

It appeared just fine to me, Christine.
Very well done.
I look forward to speaking with you tomorrow in class.
~Dean

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Magnificent birds fills the air, flying aimlessly about. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi c lucas. Thanks fo stopping by to read my Bird Haiku and fore sending me a reviewcand great rating. Oh to be as free Cheers Christine😃

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Excellent photo of an Australian Square tailed kite that complements your Haiku perfectly. Nice title, and general layout. Well done for the challenge.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi robina1978 Thanks for having a read and sending me a review for my bird Haiku and I am pleased your like this Cheers Christine😃