Comment from misscookie

Excellent

This is my first read this morning
And it captured my attention from the start.
You choose a perfect picture for your poem
I could vision the cool breeze as he flies free with no strings.
Cookie

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Cookie. I am glad I was the first morning read LOL and yes he probably had a cool breeze as he was soaring around the blue sky. A kite with no strings (we have a bird in Australia called a KIte so double meaning also ) Cheers Christine xx

reply by misscookie on 13-Jan-2017

You're very welcome. Have a nice week end
Cookie

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Chrissy!

You have done an excellent job with this haiku. Your satori line, "no strings attached" is perfect. I like the image conjured by your words. The picture you've chosen for illustration is a nice touch.

Great work!

Kim

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Kim Thanks for your great review I am pleased you could see the image without the image but I wanted to include a visual as well I enjoyed this one Cheers Christine

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

hi chrissy,
I love your haiku this is an exceptional poem with an amazing image to go with it. The satori line is just perfect.

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Mary, i am pleasedcyou thought this well done I had fun thinking it up and have just been waiting for an opportunity to use it so Thanks for reading and sending me a review A big Cheers comes your way Christine😃

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

G'day mate, :)

Kite soars high above 5 Silhouette against the blue 7
No strings attached 4

16 syllables in three lines ... well done!
a well-connected phrase and satori
the kigo is summer
the satori made me smile... it's so clever and insightful... Great job! You made me proud.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017

Hi Gypsy, I hope I had all the right components and yes Summers blue skies fittend in well as the kigo and The Satori just wrote itself LOL. Glad you liked it and Your lessons have been very helpful. Catch you tomorrow Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written and very beautifully presented you have done well using 16 syllables if I am correct well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Jill, Thanks for reading and reviewing my first Haiku entry into the challenge Yes it is 16 syllables which is acceptable in Haiku and I didn't want to say anything else just let the words speak for themselves Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Jill, Thanks for reading and reviewing my first Haiku entry into the challenge Yes it is 16 syllables which is acceptable in Haiku and I didn't want to say anything else just let the words speak for themselves Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Oh, I love this! So very clever, the Kite and strings. So obvious, a wonder no one ever thought of it! Brilliant! A wonderful haiku, blessings..

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi karyn, Thanks so much I am pleased you thought this clever I am having fun with the Haiku's and also having lessons from Gypsy so maybe I am learning but I loved the bird in the blue sky I have seen a few and they always remind me of kites with out strings so I put it all toghether. Many Cheers for you great support and kindness Christine😃

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I just love the satori Christine, "no strings attached" what a marvellous ambiguous line, I like the fact you chose an Aussie native to frame your haiku, go get 'em, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Roy, Yes well what else wechave they beautiful birds and I saw a big bird flying one day against the blue sky and it just reminded me of a stringless kite and I thought it would be good to use in a Haiku . so pleased to have your review Cheers Christine Ps Hope you are enjoying your 'quiet time' 😃

reply by royowen on 11-Jan-2017

Things are taking shape for me, I'll still review, until developments, I'll do one or two posts anyway

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Hi, Chrissy. I really like this haiku.

The satori line is what makes it special - not only in clinching the wordplay on kite, but also in the suggestion of the freedom enjoyed by the bird (as opposed to the toy)

I'm wondering if 'against' might be a slightly better word choice that 'amongst'.

Cheers.

Steve

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Steve, Thanks for reading my Bird Haiku and my inspiration came from watching a large bird like a kite flying around in the blue sky a beautiful site. Thanks for your suggestion but to me the kite stood out against the blue rather than with it but I appreciate your suggestion. Your support is always admired Cheers Christine😃

reply by kiwisteveh on 11-Jan-2017

Now you've confused me. In your reply you use the word that I suggested!

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Steve. please forgive me yes it is a better word against so thank for that I have changed it to against as that is what I wanted to say. so forgive my confused brain I have had a bit going on with my dog and trying to answer all the lovely reviews and writing heaps I get a little confused at times and thought I had written against when I had written amongst ( could still wotk but against is better Have I confused your further I hope not LOL) As always appreciate help and that word is better
So have a great day I am about to lay out and sunbake under the glorious blue sky today bit wanted to send this before I stretched out
Cheers Christine😃🌞

reply by kiwisteveh on 11-Jan-2017

We have the glorious blue sky too. trying to hide away from the heat indoors! And hoping the predicted rain tomorrow actually arrives. We're burning up here.

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Steve Where are you?

reply by kiwisteveh on 11-Jan-2017

Pointy bit of NZ

The irony is that most of the rest of the country has had rain aplenty over the last couple of weeks and even a sprinkling of fresh snow on the mountains down south. We are gasping.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

This is AMAZING. One to read and read again. Modern, beautiful image of the soaring bird and the beauty of flight- poetry in motion. A stunning Haiku which is also rich in meaning with 'no strings attached' such a great turn of phrase, absolutely exceptional.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi Meia, Thanks so much for your support and lovely words . I am so pleased you liked this so much and to see the bird just soaring above reminded me of a stringless kite. And we do have such a bird here in Australia. Your support for my work is always appreciated Cheers my friend Christine😃😃

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

First my apologies for being short of the sixth star this work clearly deserves! I love the artwork and the immediate grip it brought to this work. The dialog is delightful and very interesting (having lived in Australia for ten years, I'm sorry to never have experienced this unique wildlife) Thanks for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Hi HIS GREYNESS, Thanks very much for this great comment for my Haiku and Yes I have seen several kitessoaring around in the blue so it made me assocaite them with a stringed kite and this was created. Your sixth star thought was appreciated and your 5 is also. I am pleased your so highly of it Cheers Christine😃😃