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2017 JAPANESE POETRY

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Broken People"
A collection of Japanese poetry

17 total reviews 
Comment from Lu Saluna
Exceptional
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This is an amazing haiku suite. Your first haiku, "late winter snow" alluding to late years of life and where we all dread to be when we reach that age. "her white roots show" literally and figuratively
Your second haiku is indicative of truly fragile we are at that age but really, the experience and wisdom make the elderly worth their weight in gold. So beautiful
Your third haiku, "cloudy blue sky reflects on sad eyes-" so many elderly left to die alone and lonely. "dusty empty-nest" says it all really, lonely and alone at the end.
Very beautiful, descriptive and invokes a great deal of emotion in me.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017

    Hello, Lura, we missed you at the meeting. Your soothing voice, gentle spirit, and brave heart was missed. Douglas told us your computer is not working properly. We got a lot done but it was all business and no fun. :/

    I am so happy that my words connected with you at a deep level and you understand it completely.

    I am grateful for your six stars, I don't get a lot of those and they are very special. I feel like a kid that just got a happy face from the teacher. :) xoxoxo

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reply by Lu Saluna on 10-Jan-2017
    I missed t meeting too. I am on my iPhone right now but will only be able to do this for so long. They have kept my computer and I am really hoping I get it back Thursday afternoon.
    BTW your haiku was so touching and moving, it was worth more than 6, a badger 9!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    LoL I like those badger 9
Comment from Sasha
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This is a superb haiku suite. I love each one separately but together you paint a powerful picture. Marvelous work with this one and I a so sorry but I am already out of 6's and this one most definitely deserves one.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, sweetie pie, I appreciate your valuable review. It's very helpful to me.

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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is a beautifully executed haiku suite. The rules of form are followed to the letter. The content is both moving and inspiring. Each of these stands on its own wonderfully, but together create a powerful package. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, sweetie pie, I appreciate your valuable review. It's very helpful to me.

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Comment from brenda bickers
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Hi GBR,
this is a nice suite of haiku reflecting on the how nature can effect the human form. I suppose that there is a damaging side to nature and it's elements that we don't think about. It is hard to see through all the beauty.
Love the pictures.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, sweetie pie, I appreciate your valuable review. It's very helpful to me.

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Comment from robina1978
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Excellent general layout with the pictures and tiny poems. They are a series of Haiku's about nature and how it affects people.

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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Very well done, my friend. I like all three of these very much. They are very well written in proper haiku form. Interesting choice of artwork~Debbie

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 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, my friend, you are very kind and thoughtful. Your review means a lot to me and it is very helpful.

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Comment from Dean Kuch
Exceptional
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Wow!
I knew I was saving back my final six of the week for something special, Sensei Gypsy.
This stunning haiku suite certainly fits the bill.
It really isn't necessary for me to break each of three down for you. You're already obviously well aware of what makes a haiku a great spiritual and enlightening experience.
Suffice it to say that I feel this is surely one of your very best, both in poetry and presentation, and let's leave it at that.
Awesome...
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 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, sweetie pie, your kind words mean a lot to me. I am grateful for the six stars. :)
    You are very kind and thoughtful. Your review means a lot to me and it made my night.

    Gypsy Sensei

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reply by Dean Kuch on 10-Jan-2017
    You're more than welcome, Sensei.
    See you tomorrow in club (or "hear" you as the case were) LOL...
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    I love your dragon... wow! your signatures keep getting better and better. :)

    gypsy sensei
reply by Dean Kuch on 10-Jan-2017
    I keep workin' on 'em, LOL.
    Thanks! ;)