Comment from smerryman3

Excellent

I found this to be a very entertaining read! Plenty of detail, pathos and humor. I loved the racoons and the girl scout story, the "be prepared" ending was inspired!
A few suggestions include varying your sentence length a littlemore at the beggining of the story. You tend to rely on short sentences.

Also some typod
"Whole in the middle" should be "hole."

"Troop leader had anther idea"

"What used to (be) the Wal-Mart"

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017

Great suggestions. I will go check on them right now.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

So that was original-getting kicked out of the girlscouts-haha. I know I did some sewing back then and my sewing was certainly ridiculous-LOL. Great chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Unfortunately, the girl scout story is true. lol. Isn't that funny. I am on the girl scout black list for all to know.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I don't think I'd like to come up against any cornered wild animal. At least the tension brought out the laughter once they were free and you knew they wouldn't come after you. You don't realise what experiences would come in handy one day when you are young. I often wonder how people would get on in such an environment these days. Excellent part! :) Sandra

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

It was funny when we actually had a real lockdown at my school because one of the Racoons excaped from our ceiling . That is a true story.

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Looks like I missed this chapter. Everyone is posting a lot right now, myself included, as we try to get our required "6" out of the way. Anyway, I just read it, and loved the story about the raccoons. Too cute.

Once more, you show an optimistic approach to a terrible event that could happen to any of us. You have fun as you face your obstacles.

Love it,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

thanks Rhonda, Isn't funny too that we actually faced that exact prob;em at my school.

Comment from Jackreese

Excellent

This is the first time I came across this story and from what I've read so far I have enjoyed. You're descriptions are very vivid allowing the reader to really feel like they are right in the middle of the story.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

thank you. The concept came to me as a teacher. We have about one hundred teachers in our school. Math , Science, history, home ec, counselors atheletes., speech debate, economics and so much more if they were isolated and had to survive they have an amazing amount of eclectic knowledge. Where would they do to survive together? Sadly, so many of them are family people, there is communication with the outside world. How do they find their families. If you have any ideas about how you would use your strengths in this situation i would love to know.

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I continue to enjoy this story. A good set of events in this chapter that shed just a little more light on their situation. I will look forward to reading more

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

thank you Douglas. I think this is a good rough draft of a novel. I would love suggestions about what your skills would be in a crisis like this. Your encouragement means the world to me.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Another well-written part of your story. Your realistic details bring the story to life as it goes along. Your girl scout troop sounded as bad as mine. I hated doing cooking and sewing. I wanted to learn more important things .

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Yeah a partner in not sewing, lol. It is a funny story . Can you imagine Mrs. Irvine telling those kids that I was on the girl scout black list lol.