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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku (clouds bubble)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
23 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
What a lovely image ... :) I remember watching clouds when I was a little girl. It was great fun to imagine what they were.
You did an awesome job with your air challenge haiku. Thank you for participating.
Good job!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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What a lovely image ... :) I remember watching clouds when I was a little girl. It was great fun to imagine what they were.
You did an awesome job with your air challenge haiku. Thank you for participating.
Good job!
Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you Gypsy:)
Comment from Douglas Paul
Thank you for participating in the challenge. This is a good one. Clear and strong imagery in the first 2 connecting line. A good satori with a strong aha moment
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for participating in the challenge. This is a good one. Clear and strong imagery in the first 2 connecting line. A good satori with a strong aha moment
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much Doug. Sorry, I haven't been keeping up with reviewing. I good intentions. I'll be on vacation next week then hopefully will get back into more.
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No problem - enjoy your vacation
Comment from Janet Foor
Avery nice haiku Teresa. Excellent word choices to paint a picture of a storm brewing. I love to watch the clouds (clouds bubble - nice visual) firm and change and move as the storm progresses.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Avery nice haiku Teresa. Excellent word choices to paint a picture of a storm brewing. I love to watch the clouds (clouds bubble - nice visual) firm and change and move as the storm progresses.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you Janet:)
Comment from c_lucas
As we watch the lightning show, a storm is brewing, the rain comes and the day become cooler. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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As we watch the lightning show, a storm is brewing, the rain comes and the day become cooler. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you Charlie:)
Comment from Lu Saluna
there is very good imagery of the clouds gathering quickly into a storm and changing colour as the come together. The wind churning them, the darking.
Your satori, "storm brewing" is very vivid and creative.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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there is very good imagery of the clouds gathering quickly into a storm and changing colour as the come together. The wind churning them, the darking.
Your satori, "storm brewing" is very vivid and creative.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thanks Lu:)
Comment from Joan E.
I really liked your unusual use of "bubble" and the image it created in my mind. Your use of abundant alliteration added to the intensity of this scene. I am glad you were inspired by the Haiku Club. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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I really liked your unusual use of "bubble" and the image it created in my mind. Your use of abundant alliteration added to the intensity of this scene. I am glad you were inspired by the Haiku Club. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thanks Joan:)
Comment from Leineco
I loved the use of brew as a noun, rather than the expected/anticipated verb
form here :-)
Great opening imagery. . .wonderful satori closing!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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I loved the use of brew as a noun, rather than the expected/anticipated verb
form here :-)
Great opening imagery. . .wonderful satori closing!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thanks Loraine:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The first signs of a storm brewing is usually visible in the clouds darkrning, gathering and approaching quickly.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The first signs of a storm brewing is usually visible in the clouds darkrning, gathering and approaching quickly.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you Sandra:)
Comment from closetpoetjester
Nice description and clever play on words with the brewing and ever looming storm.
Very well put in such a short form. Not sure I want to taste what this weather event is dishing out LOL
Cheers P
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Nice description and clever play on words with the brewing and ever looming storm.
Very well put in such a short form. Not sure I want to taste what this weather event is dishing out LOL
Cheers P
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you:)
Comment from Gloria ....
Very good haiku, teresa. You've got your two concrete images and the grammatically connected two sentences and a fine satori with the storm brew.
An excellent addition to the book.
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Very good haiku, teresa. You've got your two concrete images and the grammatically connected two sentences and a fine satori with the storm brew.
An excellent addition to the book.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thanks Gloria:)
