Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "April Wind"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
13 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Paul
Good response to the air challenge, my friend. I really like your satori. It is a good insight into the essence of the first 2 connection lines
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Good response to the air challenge, my friend. I really like your satori. It is a good insight into the essence of the first 2 connection lines
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Douglas, you are very kind :)
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola Guapa, oh I liked this haiku a lot. The satori line is lovely and spot on. It's a true aha moment. Yes the April wind does exactly that. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Hola Guapa, oh I liked this haiku a lot. The satori line is lovely and spot on. It's a true aha moment. Yes the April wind does exactly that. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Gracias guapisima,,,, mua!
Thank you very much, Ulla, you are very kind :)
Gypsy
Comment from sandy montgomery
Looking forward to April breezes. This was a perfectly formed haiku. You are the master of these I've been told. I see nothing to contradict that. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Looking forward to April breezes. This was a perfectly formed haiku. You are the master of these I've been told. I see nothing to contradict that. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
The artwork you chose is perfect for your haiku challenge #4. I'm not sure what to say to define this, but we always see the winds of April here in Ohio makes many plants to bend as the wind blows. This creates a calming, quite peaceful look.
Take care my friend and smack me gently for being unknowledgeable for reviewing my friend,,,,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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The artwork you chose is perfect for your haiku challenge #4. I'm not sure what to say to define this, but we always see the winds of April here in Ohio makes many plants to bend as the wind blows. This creates a calming, quite peaceful look.
Take care my friend and smack me gently for being unknowledgeable for reviewing my friend,,,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
April wind
bends budless roses --
melancholic moves
Even without the picture, your choice of words cleverly paint the picture.
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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April wind
bends budless roses --
melancholic moves
Even without the picture, your choice of words cleverly paint the picture.
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is lovely but very sad, roses are beautiful, purple is my favourite colour. No buds yet :-(
But it is too early in the spring.
Very lovely haiku, "melancholic moves", physically and emotionally.
Very wonderful haiku
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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This is lovely but very sad, roses are beautiful, purple is my favourite colour. No buds yet :-(
But it is too early in the spring.
Very lovely haiku, "melancholic moves", physically and emotionally.
Very wonderful haiku
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Yes, you are right, physical and emotional pain. My favorite roses are blue and there is a story attached to that, someday I will tell you. If you want to hear it. LOL I also have a blue rose tattoo.
Comment from judiverse
The poor roses. They have reason to be melancholy if the wind has attacked them. Excellent alliteration with bends buds and melancholy moves. You are able to create an image of the roses suffering in the wind. Your story really goes with the picture you chose. Have a wonderful, successful new year. judi
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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The poor roses. They have reason to be melancholy if the wind has attacked them. Excellent alliteration with bends buds and melancholy moves. You are able to create an image of the roses suffering in the wind. Your story really goes with the picture you chose. Have a wonderful, successful new year. judi
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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You're every welcome. Much success with your classes. judi
Comment from robyn corum
Your haiku has me thinking, which is always good, Gypsy. *smile* I'm wondering if those budless roses are budless because the buds haven't formed yet, or if it's AFTER they've fallen. In each case, there's a melancholy aspect. Very cool!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Your haiku has me thinking, which is always good, Gypsy. *smile* I'm wondering if those budless roses are budless because the buds haven't formed yet, or if it's AFTER they've fallen. In each case, there's a melancholy aspect. Very cool!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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When I wrote this I was thinking of women who can't have or have lost children.
Comment from robina1978
Great photo that shows the wind and complements your tiny poem perfectly. An excellent Haiku, you used wind for the air. Wrong month though-LOL
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Great photo that shows the wind and complements your tiny poem perfectly. An excellent Haiku, you used wind for the air. Wrong month though-LOL
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
The combination of concrete imagery, clearly defined kigo, and all encompassing observation make this a worthy read. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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The combination of concrete imagery, clearly defined kigo, and all encompassing observation make this a worthy read. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, I am honored for your expert review.
Gypsy Sensei
