Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

death's invitation5
oft turns up in one's in- box7
deletion denied5

death's invitation oft turns up in one's in- box deletion denied

Your syllabic count is correct. The syntax is rough, it took me a couple of minutes to figure out what you were talking about.

I guess it's true, if death was an email and it showed up in our inbox (weird) we would not be able to erase the email.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I am not a fan of the horror and thriller genre, but this poem was thought provoking. Your alliteration of "d's" and the succinct 5-7-5 form add to its impact. Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017

Thanks, Joan.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written death 5-7-5 poem. One appointment that we cannot cancel or deny, our time to die have no escape.

Prosperous New Year to you and your family.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016

Thanks

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Och! Lassie, 'tis a dark one for sure! My inbox better be full of pleasantries (LOL). This is so clever I don't know where to begin, but then, I would expect no less from your pen. Deletion denied - yikes!

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thanks, Dawn. Appreciate the kind words.

reply by Dawn Munro on 31-Dec-2016

My pleasure!

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

This is a thought provoking piece. I had to read it a few times.
Excellent 5/7/5 poem with a perfect picture to compliment it.

Well done

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from robyn corum

Good

I am not a fan of this poem. Sorry! I think you're close to something clever, but aren't quite there yet.

For example, your poem seems to contradict itself:

1.) 'Death's invitation
Oft turns up in one's in-box'
--> repeated emails and texts to
me

2.) 'Deletion denied'
--> can't delete the invite. I'm dead

3.) refer to number one:
Why are the emails OFT turning up? It should be over now.

See what I mean? Thanks! Good luck!

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

See what you mean. Intent is that is how it is oft delivered. Not comes up often.

thanks for the input

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A very good poem. We all have an appointment we must keep. There is no cheating death. It will come for rich and poor alike.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I like the philosophical feel of your Death poem. It reminds us that, although we don't know when or how we will die, we do know that time draws closer every moment.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Brilliant, concise, intriguing write in the 5-7-5 style.Very well written and an excellent piece of work to be proud of.Well done!This is a great piece of work.

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016

Thank you for the awesome review.