Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 " Sowin' Love "A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
36 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
I think the word "relentless" adds power and depth to your haiku, Gypsy, and adds deeper meaning to the satori. Lovely haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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I think the word "relentless" adds power and depth to your haiku, Gypsy, and adds deeper meaning to the satori. Lovely haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
Comment from Grasshopper2
Sensei,
Your presentation of the photo and font (I especially like the color) are dramatic. Your syllable count demonstrates excellent balance and adheres to the traditional short/long/short format that haiku is most noted. It is well within the limits of seventeen syllables, or less, that is required of the haiku form and the challenge rules.
Your first two lines display a clear grammatical connection and demonstrate detailed imagery. You write your haiku in present tense as a current observation of a moment in time captured in nature while utilizing exceptional wording. Your satori is a brief but brilliant summarization of the phrase which comes in the two previous lines before it. An exceptionally well-written haiku in my humble opinion.
Grasshopper
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Sensei,
Your presentation of the photo and font (I especially like the color) are dramatic. Your syllable count demonstrates excellent balance and adheres to the traditional short/long/short format that haiku is most noted. It is well within the limits of seventeen syllables, or less, that is required of the haiku form and the challenge rules.
Your first two lines display a clear grammatical connection and demonstrate detailed imagery. You write your haiku in present tense as a current observation of a moment in time captured in nature while utilizing exceptional wording. Your satori is a brief but brilliant summarization of the phrase which comes in the two previous lines before it. An exceptionally well-written haiku in my humble opinion.
Grasshopper
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Damn! I will print this review and frame it. It's the most beautiful haiku review I ever got. Can I use it? LoL You explained everything so well and your haiku analysis is perfect. I am so proud of you!!!!! Well done, my young apprentice grasshopper.
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Sensei-Haikuist, grasshopper say yes, you may use.
Comment from Marykelly
The word father in this poem is significant. You don't say farmer, you say father and that makes me think that not only does this person harvest crops relentlessly, but also is the father whose children receive his relentless attention.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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The word father in this poem is significant. You don't say farmer, you say father and that makes me think that not only does this person harvest crops relentlessly, but also is the father whose children receive his relentless attention.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2016
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You are so right... good job, Mary! Thank you very much for the lovely review, my friend. Happy New Year!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from Irish Rain
Isn't it though? Everything homegrown, that has the sweat and love tilled into it, is indeed a harvest of the heart. Lovely haiku. Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Isn't it though? Everything homegrown, that has the sweat and love tilled into it, is indeed a harvest of the heart. Lovely haiku. Happy New Year!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you, sweetie pie. I am grateful to you for reading and reviewing my post. You are very kind.
2017 is going to be an awesome year for all of us!
Comment from Ella25
Persistent love is never ending love, we spread the seed and plant it in the hearts so deep. Then we harvest, what we engrained. What father does, the son will do. In such short words and captivated with the image you captured it all. Beautiful work, my friend. Blessings, Ella
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Persistent love is never ending love, we spread the seed and plant it in the hearts so deep. Then we harvest, what we engrained. What father does, the son will do. In such short words and captivated with the image you captured it all. Beautiful work, my friend. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you, sweetie pie. I am grateful to you for reading and reviewing my post. You are very kind.
2017 is going to be an awesome year for all of us!
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You are more than welcome, love. It is always a pleasure. You are very sweet, Blue Rose. I am looking forward to 2017 and so optimistic. Blessings, Ella
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi GBR,
your haiku tells us how much a farmer must love working the land for so long and so hard to provide for his family. A job that I think is so underestimated but for the farmer the most rewarding.
All the best for 2017.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Hi GBR,
your haiku tells us how much a farmer must love working the land for so long and so hard to provide for his family. A job that I think is so underestimated but for the farmer the most rewarding.
All the best for 2017.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you, sweetie pie. I am grateful to you for reading and reviewing my post. You are very kind.
2017 is going to be an awesome year for all of us!
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is beautiful, truly. Farming really is a labour of love.
The first two lines really delve into to the work required to plant in spring
Your satori "harvest of the heart", demonstrates the love required to bring your crop to fruition.
Reminds me of my childhood when we farmed with my grandfather. I really enjoyed that time of my life.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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This is beautiful, truly. Farming really is a labour of love.
The first two lines really delve into to the work required to plant in spring
Your satori "harvest of the heart", demonstrates the love required to bring your crop to fruition.
Reminds me of my childhood when we farmed with my grandfather. I really enjoyed that time of my life.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Lu :) You are most kind and I am deeply thankful.
Gypsy
Comment from Unspoken94
Again, an excellent haiku and in this case
you call the reader to their emotion. A man
who gives this much sacrifice to the land can
only know how much he loves this gift to be
able to bring in a harvest. -Bill
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Again, an excellent haiku and in this case
you call the reader to their emotion. A man
who gives this much sacrifice to the land can
only know how much he loves this gift to be
able to bring in a harvest. -Bill
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much, Bill, you are so kind to me and I really appreciate it. I am grateful for your excellent review.
Gypsy hugs
Happy New Year
Comment from krys123
Happy New Year's to you, MariVal;
-what a very down to earth haiku that especially expresses and describes the hard work that farmers do and when they do it it comes from their Special relationship of the land and their soul. You've expressed this love of land and described it very well in the first two lines of the imagery of your haiku.
-The satoi offers an aha moment that his relatives and summarizes the conceptual theme of this haiku. This revelation of an aha moment makes the reader understand the writer's conceptual theme with excitement of knowing what thee writer was trying to produce.
-Thank you for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and have a good onne throughout the next.
Now
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Happy New Year's to you, MariVal;
-what a very down to earth haiku that especially expresses and describes the hard work that farmers do and when they do it it comes from their Special relationship of the land and their soul. You've expressed this love of land and described it very well in the first two lines of the imagery of your haiku.
-The satoi offers an aha moment that his relatives and summarizes the conceptual theme of this haiku. This revelation of an aha moment makes the reader understand the writer's conceptual theme with excitement of knowing what thee writer was trying to produce.
-Thank you for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and have a good onne throughout the next.
Now
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much, Alex, you are so kind to me and I really appreciate it. I am grateful for your excellent review.
Gypsy hugs
Happy New Year
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you're very welcome Gypsy, and have a very happy new year.
Alex
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Thank you very much. I value your opinion and your review means a lot to me. :)
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I love your artwork, gypsy, it's definitely you and you have a happy new year also my dearest of friends.
Alex
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Oh you are so welcome, Gypsy, and uses well is most important to me with your knowledge of these types of poetry overwhelms me.
Alex
Comment from Susanjohn
certainly is a harvest from the heart with all the hard work!!! i enjoyed reading this little poem of yours! great picture too! :-)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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certainly is a harvest from the heart with all the hard work!!! i enjoyed reading this little poem of yours! great picture too! :-)
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much, Susan :)
Gypsy hugs
Happy New Year
