Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Well, I must say that this Christmas story puts the holiday cheer online to break a record this year. The misfits in toy land will need more than hammers and saws to fix all these ravaged members. Thanks for the fun read and good luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2016

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Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

A great Hohoho story. Thanks for the holiday cheer and keep up the good work my friend. Wishing you all the best. Hope your Christmas is as warm and sweet as a cup of hot cocoa.
Bill

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2016

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Comment from Brabazon

Excellent

Yes, Santa has always been the man next-door, with cravings like anyone else.

Thanks for the forewarning: the unrestricted choice of words was staggering, no holds barred.

The rhymes were brilliant and flowed with spontaneity.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2016

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Comment from trumby

Excellent

This is very naughty indeed. He's a very bad Santa.
"I spiked the whisky INCASE the men needed dopin' "
This one has a few examples of forced rhyme in it in places, but its such a great story that I'm going to let them slide.
I hope that you had a very merry Christmas, mate.
After this one, I expect that the fat guy probably brought you a bag of coal.

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2016

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Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. the words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

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Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Well, anyone who denies this is a fresh approach is a liar.

While parts of the poem didn't exactly roll off the tongue, as, um, other things did, the story was well told and got a jolly laugh or four from this Ms. Santa.

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

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Comment from Javed05

Excellent

This is a timely poem. Like the look and theme of this poem. Author has chosen words well, and having fitted them into this form they work well. It flows smoothly. good rhyming as well. Thank you

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

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Comment from CEO2020

Exceptional

I love this poem! I like the pictures too! Every sonnet was outstanding, but I found this to be the first of equals -

"Sheena pulled down his fly and out sprang a mighty dick
Santa's eyes filled with tears, when Sheena gave it a lick
St. Nick started sobbin' when Sheena started bobbin'
I knew Santa had lost when his prick started throbbin'

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I was hoping Santa had a little more self-control than this. Oh wait, this is fiction. Whew! I was thinking that Santa might have to skew his perspective if he was on his own naughty list.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2016

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Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Not in the least offended. You did right to stick a warning triangle on this one. The only criticism of it that I would make is that I felt it was a pity you were unable to maintain the meter of the original. It would have been so much more amusing and clever had you done so.

Now off you go. Have a happy Xmas and enjoy your stuffing.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2016

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