The Road to Utopia
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Comment from Bill Schott
This information is so dense and mind-expanding that one finds it difficult to impossible to review it as a peer. I can only admit that the deep and concentrated efforts to simply understand things glimpse that burns.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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This information is so dense and mind-expanding that one finds it difficult to impossible to review it as a peer. I can only admit that the deep and concentrated efforts to simply understand things glimpse that burns.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Thank you
Comment from trumby
It's no wonder that you write so eloquently, proficiently and with such a tremendous depth of understanding and knowledge.
You've got an INCREDIBLE level of training, and world experience.
It's actually an honor even to be "sharing the stage" with you.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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It's no wonder that you write so eloquently, proficiently and with such a tremendous depth of understanding and knowledge.
You've got an INCREDIBLE level of training, and world experience.
It's actually an honor even to be "sharing the stage" with you.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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You make me blush. Thanks for the kind words...John
Comment from Sis Cat
An engaging and thoughtful essay about the power and the necessity of communicating. You provided vivid examples to support your argument, and you shared interesting facts, such as, "Being human is a fantastic gift. There is no other creature we know of that has the range of capabilities and potential we have (maybe dolphins.)"
I love your new word "Plutarchy." I also appreciate your warning, "We need to know who is gaining entry to our mind and why. At least I do."
So true.
You showed yourself to be a deep thinker and a clear communicator.
Thank you for sharing your essay.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2016
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An engaging and thoughtful essay about the power and the necessity of communicating. You provided vivid examples to support your argument, and you shared interesting facts, such as, "Being human is a fantastic gift. There is no other creature we know of that has the range of capabilities and potential we have (maybe dolphins.)"
I love your new word "Plutarchy." I also appreciate your warning, "We need to know who is gaining entry to our mind and why. At least I do."
So true.
You showed yourself to be a deep thinker and a clear communicator.
Thank you for sharing your essay.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2016
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Thanks
Comment from Halfree
Read this article with interest. Did a couple of rereads. Do not know much about Rosircrucians, have heard them mentioned and have seen advertisements, never read anything about them. In your article, you mentioned Larry Wilson; name did not ring a bell. He was just dropped in. Also the statement, nothing works. Impossible concept...perhaps "not anything ."
Thought this article interesting but long and drawn-out and just a bit rambly.
Statement, "New leadership for the masses....Think I have heard that from the revolutions in Russia and China.
Anyway, read the article with interest...if was a plodding read. Needs some editing, lots of ideas and thoughtful observations expressed in this article. Needs a rewrite for clarity.
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2016
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Read this article with interest. Did a couple of rereads. Do not know much about Rosircrucians, have heard them mentioned and have seen advertisements, never read anything about them. In your article, you mentioned Larry Wilson; name did not ring a bell. He was just dropped in. Also the statement, nothing works. Impossible concept...perhaps "not anything ."
Thought this article interesting but long and drawn-out and just a bit rambly.
Statement, "New leadership for the masses....Think I have heard that from the revolutions in Russia and China.
Anyway, read the article with interest...if was a plodding read. Needs some editing, lots of ideas and thoughtful observations expressed in this article. Needs a rewrite for clarity.
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2016
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Thanks
Comment from bhogg
Your communication skills as a writer are very good, dispite your admission at the end. I enjoyed the read, and perhaps the only comment I would have is to substitute some concrete examples that would help us see and not just hear.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Your communication skills as a writer are very good, dispite your admission at the end. I enjoyed the read, and perhaps the only comment I would have is to substitute some concrete examples that would help us see and not just hear.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Thanks. This is only the prologue...John
Comment from dweigt
This is well written, and I see nothing that requires changing.
As a prologue, this sets up expectations for the rest of the work. You leave the reader eager to learn more about your epiphany and the lessons you have learned from it, which I trust will be included in the sections to follow.
You make interesting statements about ego serving as either driver or navigator. I hope you will provide examples that compare and contrast the two cases, so we can understand better. The section about what we need as opposed to want struck me as almost Buddhist; suffering is caused by desire and ignorance.
Looking forward to more. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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This is well written, and I see nothing that requires changing.
As a prologue, this sets up expectations for the rest of the work. You leave the reader eager to learn more about your epiphany and the lessons you have learned from it, which I trust will be included in the sections to follow.
You make interesting statements about ego serving as either driver or navigator. I hope you will provide examples that compare and contrast the two cases, so we can understand better. The section about what we need as opposed to want struck me as almost Buddhist; suffering is caused by desire and ignorance.
Looking forward to more. Keep writing.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Many thanks...John
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was quite a road you've journeyed, and still journeying. The ego has a terrible habit of popping up all the time, and wanting more titillation, it is so much better to put it aside and concentrate on the meaningful things we should aspire to. I enjoyed reading this, you are a very intelligent person, and it shows. I hope you do find your epiphany, I think you are still searching for it, it will be so worth it in the end. Excellent! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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That was quite a road you've journeyed, and still journeying. The ego has a terrible habit of popping up all the time, and wanting more titillation, it is so much better to put it aside and concentrate on the meaningful things we should aspire to. I enjoyed reading this, you are a very intelligent person, and it shows. I hope you do find your epiphany, I think you are still searching for it, it will be so worth it in the end. Excellent! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much,,,
...John
Comment from Heidi M
Your writing is clear and concise as you explain your journey. I liked your analogy of the stream.
ego(t)istic tendencies -in third paragraph
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Your writing is clear and concise as you explain your journey. I liked your analogy of the stream.
ego(t)istic tendencies -in third paragraph
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Thank you...John
Comment from rama devi
You're a gifted communicator, John. I found this to be articulate, intelligent, perceptive, interesting, intense and absorbing. Enjoyed the read. Looking forward to reading more (when time allows). This is well paced too.
Some notes and minor notes:
*I felt as though I fell(had fallen) into a river of understanding and didn't know how to swim.
* suggest removing the caps (optional):
It is my Reason for Being.
* I thought about that day in February that (had) created my epiphany.
*I presented my case(,) and he stopped me much before I reached the conclusion
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My first attempt at understanding was aimed at D(d)uality.
*What I know is founded in truth(,) and what I don't know, I research until I can incorporate it into my base of understanding.
Totally agree:
"...we do not need oil -- we need clean water and clean air; we need love and compassion, not atomic weapons; we need to share this planet, not assign ownership of pieces of it to the chosen few. It seems that the chosen few are leading this world into oblivion. We need new leadership for the masses unwilling or incapable of seeing this greater view."
*Suggest not using those caps:
I am a Being in the Process of Becoming a greater Being through understanding.
* English is my second language,(;) computer languages follow.
Very interesting concept and voiced lucidly:
The communication systems in place today can be the salvation of the species, if used properly.
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He created software that he called "Slice and Dice"(,) and his presentation of the capabilities of this software could not possibly be understood by the average person.
* It means thinker(,) and that is what the software does.
Leans to a six but I have none left...
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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You're a gifted communicator, John. I found this to be articulate, intelligent, perceptive, interesting, intense and absorbing. Enjoyed the read. Looking forward to reading more (when time allows). This is well paced too.
Some notes and minor notes:
*I felt as though I fell(had fallen) into a river of understanding and didn't know how to swim.
* suggest removing the caps (optional):
It is my Reason for Being.
* I thought about that day in February that (had) created my epiphany.
*I presented my case(,) and he stopped me much before I reached the conclusion
*
My first attempt at understanding was aimed at D(d)uality.
*What I know is founded in truth(,) and what I don't know, I research until I can incorporate it into my base of understanding.
Totally agree:
"...we do not need oil -- we need clean water and clean air; we need love and compassion, not atomic weapons; we need to share this planet, not assign ownership of pieces of it to the chosen few. It seems that the chosen few are leading this world into oblivion. We need new leadership for the masses unwilling or incapable of seeing this greater view."
*Suggest not using those caps:
I am a Being in the Process of Becoming a greater Being through understanding.
* English is my second language,(;) computer languages follow.
Very interesting concept and voiced lucidly:
The communication systems in place today can be the salvation of the species, if used properly.
*
He created software that he called "Slice and Dice"(,) and his presentation of the capabilities of this software could not possibly be understood by the average person.
* It means thinker(,) and that is what the software does.
Leans to a six but I have none left...
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Many thanks. Changes have been made. If you want to follow the creation of this book, I know it will be good. Love...John
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Will be active on FS intermittently, my friend. Love, rd
Comment from Kingsland
Only the good die young, but what good is a dead one. We are all invisible in this plane of existence waiting to be seen by others. The first task we must obtain is how to be seen. We are all the emperor without any clothes. Don't look now because something is gaining on you and you don't know what it is. Understanding is the key to opening the mind to the universal thought process of what is and what is not. We are all just babe in arms waiting to be shown the way. It doesn't work like that. You must release from the nonsense that was taught to you as a child and find your true inner self. This is a well-written piece that I enjoyed reading and finding out more about myself as we must do every day we live and breathe...
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Only the good die young, but what good is a dead one. We are all invisible in this plane of existence waiting to be seen by others. The first task we must obtain is how to be seen. We are all the emperor without any clothes. Don't look now because something is gaining on you and you don't know what it is. Understanding is the key to opening the mind to the universal thought process of what is and what is not. We are all just babe in arms waiting to be shown the way. It doesn't work like that. You must release from the nonsense that was taught to you as a child and find your true inner self. This is a well-written piece that I enjoyed reading and finding out more about myself as we must do every day we live and breathe...
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Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Thank you much for the kind words...John
