Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

There was a peat fire that burned for years underground in a parish near New Orleans. The atmosphere of poor old Earth is in trouble...I don't think about Haikus very often. This one looks fine to me.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016

Thank you very much for reading my haiku and for your kind review :)

Gypsy

Comment from Grasshopper2

Excellent

Sensei She Who (or is it Whom?) Must Be Obeyed,
When something proceeds in a gradual, subtle way, with harmful effects it is said to be
'insidious' [you nailed it]

When an underground coal deposit catches fire, it can continue to smolder after surface fires are extinguished, sometimes for many years, before flaring up and restarting forest and brush fires nearby. They are called a
'coal seam fire,' [you nailed it]

When they ignite, the fire and flames often are deadly as in
'lethal flames' [you nailed it]

This is an excellent haiku [very upbeat if one is an arsonist], lines one and two are connected grammatically and paint a frightening image. Your use of the comma in the second line is ideally placed for pause before your satori. Excellent haiku challenge haiku about fire.

AreWays Bressins,
grasshopper

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016

Wow! You continue to amaze me with your awesome sense of humor and good taste. LoL I like to be called - sensei, the one who should be ovaid ... hahaha I wish my three kids would believe that.

Awesome review and your detailed analysis of haiku made me super proud of you, my young and wise grasshopper.

Gypsy Sensei She Who Must Be Obeyed

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Gypsy,

I always look forward to reading your poems.
You sure do a great job in writing them for us to read.

Kat

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

thank you

reply by MizKat on 16-Dec-2016

You're very welcome. Kat

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Excellent and descriptive haiku as always Gypsy.

I love the one-word first line of four syllables.

I can almost hear the crackle of fire.

teresa

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

Thank you very much I a appreciate your review and the time to read it.

Buddha Blessings

Gypsy

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Interesting little haiku that reveals the fire in coal seams...The presentation is beautiful in sleek black...
with fiery eyes..
I may offer one...
Great work..

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

I would like to read your haiku club challenge entry :)

Thank you very much I a appreciate your review and the time to read it.

Buddha Blessings

Gypsy

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku. Coal are used to make fire as well and will keep the fire burning and hot for a very long time. Interesting to learn that lightening can cause a fire sealed inside coal.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

Thank you very much I a appreciate your review and the time to read it.

Buddha Blessings

Gypsy

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

What a clever way to advertise your class, by writing one for the advert. Well done. That is what I call clever salesmanship. I also like the other haiku you wrote, that is more like your writing, a bit of horror there. lol, :) Well done. :) Sandra.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

LOL I don't have a kind of haiku, I write many different kinds. :) but I know what you mean.
Thank you very much I a appreciate your review and the time to read it.

Buddha Blessings

Gypsy

Comment from EricBrady

Excellent

First and second lines definitely work together. Your kigo (fire) does imply winter. Our definitions for insidious are different words but synonyms. I was thinking treachery and crafty. Regardless, it definitely works well with your satori (lethal flames). I can definitely see the gradual burn and treacherous destruction as the fire creeps through forest leaving nothing but coals and ash in its wake. Thanks for the definition of coal seam fire.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

Hello, Eric, treacherous and insidious mean the same. I didn't want to write too many. Insidious is one of those words that have many different meanings. :)

Synonyms for insidious by http://www.thesaurus.com/browse/insidious?s=t

sneaky, tricky, dangerous
subtle artful
astute corrupt
crafty
crooked
cunning
deceitful
deceptive
deep
designing
dishonest
disingenuous
duplicitous
ensnaring
false
foxy
arguable
intriguing
like a snake in the grass
Machiavellian
perfidious
perilous
secret
slick
sly
smooth
snaky
sneaking
stealthy
surreptitious
treacherous
wily
worm like

Comment from brenda bickers

Good

Hi GBR,
Excuse the pun but this haiku is seamless as all your haiku's are.
I don't know where you get your ideas from but you never fail to deliver.

Thank you for allowing me to join your Haiku club.

Brenda:))x

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 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

Thank you :)
gypsy

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Gypsy,
I love your haiku, the image is just fab, the coal seam fire is a great image of a stratum of coal,

Well done
Nary

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016

Hello, Mary,

How are you? I am grateful for your lovely review and for you taking the time to read my haiku. :) Thank you!
Gypsy