Comment from angel123

Excellent

Good alliteration of words, misty morning in your first stanza. I like your winter story within your poem. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Happy Holidays and good luck in the contest.

angel 123

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016

Thank you

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very nice description of a cold winter day.It seems like you have chosen your words very well and kept up a nice even rhythm at the same time. Great presentartion and great job~

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great poem for winter so it might have fit two contests! I like the image of "icy knives etching pictures on the pane." I like how it seems we're inside looking out and then outside with passing walkers, and then return inside with the "creatures huddling in winter's den."

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks for your kind review!

Comment from Wabigoon

Excellent

Minus Zero--
Picture not appropriate really.

Why not reverse this so it has more impact: Frosties spread like icy knives

To something like "icy knives spread across the window, etching pain in the view."

How about a "wrapped up something hurries by." If you are talking abut real cold then you aren't going to know stranger from friend they will be so wrapped up.

Nice effort. Good luck on the contest

Best
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

thanks for your input but i prefer my version.