My grandpa
memories contest5 total reviews
Comment from pharp
This great poem is top notch and it touched my heart. Grandparents are special and very wise. You did an exceptional job in the penning of this beautiful poem. Excellent rhyming and rhythm and a very smooth flow allowing for a most enjoyable read. Outstanding ...the very beat to you in the contest and I will be voting. Blessings...................Portia
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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This great poem is top notch and it touched my heart. Grandparents are special and very wise. You did an exceptional job in the penning of this beautiful poem. Excellent rhyming and rhythm and a very smooth flow allowing for a most enjoyable read. Outstanding ...the very beat to you in the contest and I will be voting. Blessings...................Portia
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much.
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My pleasure! Blessings
Comment from winnona
A nicely written contest entry. Your words flow well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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A nicely written contest entry. Your words flow well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from country ranch writer
many memories being made right there for many years to come. One wishes we could turn back to the good times in our lives more than once. to things that weren't so hectic in ones life
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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many memories being made right there for many years to come. One wishes we could turn back to the good times in our lives more than once. to things that weren't so hectic in ones life
Comment Written 08-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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Thank you very much
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Comment from kiwisteveh
Ah, Grandpas are wise, and I should know!
This is a sweet little poem in rhyming couplets portraying some of the things you remember best about your Grandpa - love, lofe lessons and a little necessary firmness.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Ah, Grandpas are wise, and I should know!
This is a sweet little poem in rhyming couplets portraying some of the things you remember best about your Grandpa - love, lofe lessons and a little necessary firmness.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 08-Dec-2016
Comment from elloramen
It is obvious that your grandpa had a profound impact on your life. I like that you can convey that message without making the poem too long or even too extravagant with your word choice. It does have a clear rhythm that struggles in a couple of places simply because the syllable count is off between the two lines in the couplet. For example, in the fourth stanza, second line, you can easily remove the word both. No meaning is taken away and it improves the rhythm. It is a beautiful tribute to your grandpa.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016
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It is obvious that your grandpa had a profound impact on your life. I like that you can convey that message without making the poem too long or even too extravagant with your word choice. It does have a clear rhythm that struggles in a couple of places simply because the syllable count is off between the two lines in the couplet. For example, in the fourth stanza, second line, you can easily remove the word both. No meaning is taken away and it improves the rhythm. It is a beautiful tribute to your grandpa.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016
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Thank you. You are right. I will fix it
