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Comment from Kingsrookviii
I think this is great, Bill! LOL It's funny and the 'Wife" bird has THAT expression as she's scolding the poor boy who is diving right into that martini. He's probably just trying to get the olive she wanted and as it so often goes ( In my unfortunate experiences) - She just simply cannot be please or refrain from the old 'Bitch Biting." He may as well get loaded. Great job. Bruce. By the way, you're a U.S Marine, I see. Thanks.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016
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I think this is great, Bill! LOL It's funny and the 'Wife" bird has THAT expression as she's scolding the poor boy who is diving right into that martini. He's probably just trying to get the olive she wanted and as it so often goes ( In my unfortunate experiences) - She just simply cannot be please or refrain from the old 'Bitch Biting." He may as well get loaded. Great job. Bruce. By the way, you're a U.S Marine, I see. Thanks.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016
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Thank you, KR, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
I love it. This reminds me of something I heard someone say not too long ago, "A pig with lipstick is still a pig and in no way sexy or appealing to someone with taste and discernment." Good write.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2016
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I love it. This reminds me of something I heard someone say not too long ago, "A pig with lipstick is still a pig and in no way sexy or appealing to someone with taste and discernment." Good write.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2016
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Thank you, nomi, for the fun review. Bill
Comment from mkflood
lol..cute poem. just wanted to thank you for selecting my work. it does work well with yours. its honor to have it included. great job and thanks again..mkflood
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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lol..cute poem. just wanted to thank you for selecting my work. it does work well with yours. its honor to have it included. great job and thanks again..mkflood
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thank you, MK, for the kind review and thanks again for letting me use your work. Happy day. Bill
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I make about 800 illustrations with a large range of topics available to you writers here on Fanstory. thanks again
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this is another witty and great wee poem of yours. I see what a bad and undeserved review you've received. A person without a sense of humour of which you thankfully have got plenty of. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Hi Bill, this is another witty and great wee poem of yours. I see what a bad and undeserved review you've received. A person without a sense of humour of which you thankfully have got plenty of. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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nk you, Ulla, for the very nice review. Bill
Comment from robina1978
I could not believe my eyes when I saw the low rating. I think the picture is very funny and complements your 5-7-5 very well. This hopefully will lift you up. I have had a few low ratings, but not like this.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I could not believe my eyes when I saw the low rating. I think the picture is very funny and complements your 5-7-5 very well. This hopefully will lift you up. I have had a few low ratings, but not like this.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Ine, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Looks like you've been a victim of the same egotistical cretin that I have had the displeasure of being reviewed by, Bill.
I'm sorry to see this has happened to you but if it is any consolation, he gave a one-star for my recent post, FanStoria too. In fact, he's given everyone he's reviewed a one-star rating.
I found this to be delightfully witty.
~Dean
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Looks like you've been a victim of the same egotistical cretin that I have had the displeasure of being reviewed by, Bill.
I'm sorry to see this has happened to you but if it is any consolation, he gave a one-star for my recent post, FanStoria too. In fact, he's given everyone he's reviewed a one-star rating.
I found this to be delightfully witty.
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I see what you mean. I actually have two reviewers who 'oned' me. I wonder if they're working in tandem of I just suck that bad. Bill
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No, you don't "suck" at all, Bill.
It's some sort of game they're playing.
I simply muted them, and they are the only members I have muted.
I wouldn't put too much stock in what they've said.
Take care. Hopefully your reviews are much better today.
~Dean
Comment from bertranclan
I guess I just don't see how this is a poem. I know I don't have much of a sense of humor, and you will probably attack me for that, but this is more of just a statement than a poem. Do you see it from my view?
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I guess I just don't see how this is a poem. I know I don't have much of a sense of humor, and you will probably attack me for that, but this is more of just a statement than a poem. Do you see it from my view?
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I guess you don't. Fortunately I've received enough sucky reviews over the years to consider it as a compliment that you even bothered to review it. Guess you need the bongo bucks. Happy day. Bill
Comment from Joseph Pedulla
I like the sentiments, but this is not really poetry. There is nothing transformational about it. The thoughts are, though cute, left untransformed and therefore come out as direct thoughts rather than thoughts "changed" by the poet's perception. The poet must combine his perception of an experience with the experience itself and come up with a third reality that is neither his perception alone or the experience alone. The whole things, passes, as it were, through a prism. Once through this prism, it comes out the other side a transformed reality which we all a poem. In Robert Frost's "After Apple Picking," for example, the poet's perceptions of life's being like a harvest of apples accomplished over an entire lifetime is combined with the apples themselves. The whole is put through the prism and comes out the other side not as his direct articulation of such a life, but as a transformed statement in which apple picking becomes a metaphor for one's life's labors unfinished and, perhaps, unfulfilled. The poem is a third reality proceeding from the combination of perception and experience. It is a "prismed" perception. That's the best I can say about this subject, and unless a poet--or someone claiming to be one--understands this, no poetry will be written. However, once understood and practiced, wonderful things can come forth--like charms from a fairy's wand.
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I like the sentiments, but this is not really poetry. There is nothing transformational about it. The thoughts are, though cute, left untransformed and therefore come out as direct thoughts rather than thoughts "changed" by the poet's perception. The poet must combine his perception of an experience with the experience itself and come up with a third reality that is neither his perception alone or the experience alone. The whole things, passes, as it were, through a prism. Once through this prism, it comes out the other side a transformed reality which we all a poem. In Robert Frost's "After Apple Picking," for example, the poet's perceptions of life's being like a harvest of apples accomplished over an entire lifetime is combined with the apples themselves. The whole is put through the prism and comes out the other side not as his direct articulation of such a life, but as a transformed statement in which apple picking becomes a metaphor for one's life's labors unfinished and, perhaps, unfulfilled. The poem is a third reality proceeding from the combination of perception and experience. It is a "prismed" perception. That's the best I can say about this subject, and unless a poet--or someone claiming to be one--understands this, no poetry will be written. However, once understood and practiced, wonderful things can come forth--like charms from a fairy's wand.
- 05-Dec-2016
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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These are fine words seemingly forged in a recent poetry class where you convinced yourself that I needed this lecture. I write quick ditties as a hobby. If I wanted to write something meaningful, I'd read your stuff and tear you a new one. I am used to freshman reviewers coming in guns blazing. Thanks for your opinion.
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There are many many more poets than yourself who "need this lecture." Our culture is not shot through with people purporting to know what poetry is. It is one of the sloppiest movements I have ever witnessed, and it needs a brisk and unflinching correction. Sorry. Why don't you try to refute what I said on its own merits instead of striking out at me? Is everything poetry? Is the phone book poetry? Is a stop sign poetry? We are reaching the point at which most people would answer yes! If I am unpleasant, I will take that burden out of respect for an art form that should not be abused.
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Here: tear me a new one:
Dirt (title)
I think I'll make
A novel thing
I'll make it after me,
Design it with a difference
And for eternity.
Not that I have need of it
Or cannot do without
Perhaps to give the best of them
A thing to figure out.
Or fiddle with fecundity--
Creating on and on.
I mean to make them think they're meant--
The only sine qua non.
How desperately they'll fight the fight
For bread and love and fame.
And I the while will delight
To watch the endless game.
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Brilliant!!
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hehehe nice response Bill
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Yes, Bill. I'm right there with you. You're just more diplomatic than I am.
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A Confederacy of Dunces.
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I am the boy who flung
a rock at the hornet's nest, I guess. You guys can gang up, but you can't tell me that the stuff on this site is poetry. I will take all the invective you can heave. Ah, the allegory of the cave!
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You got that right.
