Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your reflections about "words" and value plus your use of the sapphonic form and its rhymes. Your definition of "Hope" is memorable. Cheers- Joan

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016

The words triad is meant to shock, a return to the preachers of old, and the hope to be somewhat humorous, and coke of course is Coca Cola. I should have put notes, I think. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

reply by Joan E. on 04-Dec-2016

Thanks for the added context. Have a pleasant Sunday- Joan

Comment from damommy

Excellent

You're really perking with your poetry lately. What a good job using all three quotes.

I can't decide which part I like best, so I'll leave that alone and just they are all well done. 8-)

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I see I should have copied the prompt into the notes...

Comment from Badger_29

Excellent

Outstanding. I loved that you made the cost proportional, and I somehow connected that to the drug. Intentional? A wonderful flow. Very nice with the spaces and appropriately used italics. The one that really caught my eye, "Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul" This created a nice image in my mind. There is a great deal of appeal in the simplicity of this; well versed, simple, and style. Loved it, keep righting ~

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016

Hey, coke mentioned here is Coca Cola.The quotes were from the BeeGees, Emily Dickinson, and Thoreau, in that order. All part of the prompt. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

reply by Badger_29 on 03-Dec-2016

Thanks for your reply.

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Ya know, you've quietly become quite the poet as time's gone by. This is as smooth as glass rhyme and meter wise and it has your signature wit and insight as well. Great takes on each quote and I think you did a perfect job of tying them together. I'm a big fan of endings and they're neglected here. You nailed yours. Exceptional. mikey

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I'm a fan of all the quotees. The Sapphonic triad isn't a bad form, either.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a new form for me. You should maybe explain it notes.

This poem starts to hopefully but ends to negatively. It seems the first 2/3 shows the beginning and the end of a relationship. The end just says love is the same as it has always been. But love isn't always bad and costly as this poem asserts.

Keep writng

dragonpoet

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016

I guess I didn't expect reviews except from the Challenged crowd. I will add this to my notes:
These three Sapphonic Triads begin with quotes from the BeeGees, Emily Dickinson, and Thoreau in that order. A triad is a famous quote, a sixteen syllable quatrain discussing the quote, and an 8/4/6 conclusion, which hopefully should have an
Aha, or satori inflection. The selected quotes were part of the prompt. Any notable quote of sixteen syllables or less is acceptable.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.

reply by dragonpoet on 03-Dec-2016

Thanks for the definition. I might try one.

You're welcome.

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