To Last Forever
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23 total reviews
Comment from frierajac
"florescent believes" needs a careless comma, or something? I like the way the
sea fret sounds with the sentiment in the words. Thank you for sharing as these seem to be written for this immediate time and place.
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"florescent believes" needs a careless comma, or something? I like the way the
sea fret sounds with the sentiment in the words. Thank you for sharing as these seem to be written for this immediate time and place.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from amada
Wonderful words for the drowsy days following Thanksgiving, how nice. Did you enjoyed the day with family and friends? My fave line is this one "a pilgrim's anthem is held breath..." Keep the good job on writing, please!
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Wonderful words for the drowsy days following Thanksgiving, how nice. Did you enjoyed the day with family and friends? My fave line is this one "a pilgrim's anthem is held breath..." Keep the good job on writing, please!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from Liberty Justice
Six Stars. Such a mystical photo of exquisite taste bringing a since of mystical being and awe into existence. Uses moon as a symbol for, perhaps, reaching one's dreams and climbing to the top of the world. WELL DONE! liberty justice
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Six Stars. Such a mystical photo of exquisite taste bringing a since of mystical being and awe into existence. Uses moon as a symbol for, perhaps, reaching one's dreams and climbing to the top of the world. WELL DONE! liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from MelB
Very strong imagery and description. I like the phrase we swing the moon. Great use of alliteration with first foot falls. I enjoyed the song/video too!
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Very strong imagery and description. I like the phrase we swing the moon. Great use of alliteration with first foot falls. I enjoyed the song/video too!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This poem does sound like somebody's maiden voyage. Every poem can be a voyage into a sacred harbour. Thanks for writing this one.
Bill
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This poem does sound like somebody's maiden voyage. Every poem can be a voyage into a sacred harbour. Thanks for writing this one.
Bill
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your play on "maiden" voyage and the reinforcing artwork you selected. The imagery in your poem is very vivid and engaging. Here's to the days following Thanksgiving with many an "anthem"! Big hugs- Joan
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I liked your play on "maiden" voyage and the reinforcing artwork you selected. The imagery in your poem is very vivid and engaging. Here's to the days following Thanksgiving with many an "anthem"! Big hugs- Joan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from BlueTiger
Nice work. This poem has a strange, dreamlike feel that is very relaxing. The imagery (swinging the moon from one hand) is good, and there is a nice rhythm to it. Good job!
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Nice work. This poem has a strange, dreamlike feel that is very relaxing. The imagery (swinging the moon from one hand) is good, and there is a nice rhythm to it. Good job!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from royowen
We visited Plymouth in Massachusetts, in 2014, the weather was very kind to us, and seeing the Maylower replica and the rock was amazing. We also visited Newport R.I. Seeing all the great mansions of the Vanderbilts etc. half the settlers died in the first year, still they instituted thanksgiving, methinks things have changed a little since then. Wonderful poem, Michael,it would be good to see the US embrace those halcyon days when ideals still lived. And a return to the foundation the US was founded on! Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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We visited Plymouth in Massachusetts, in 2014, the weather was very kind to us, and seeing the Maylower replica and the rock was amazing. We also visited Newport R.I. Seeing all the great mansions of the Vanderbilts etc. half the settlers died in the first year, still they instituted thanksgiving, methinks things have changed a little since then. Wonderful poem, Michael,it would be good to see the US embrace those halcyon days when ideals still lived. And a return to the foundation the US was founded on! Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Amen Bro...-smile-
thank you Sir. just tired of hearing We cant...when we have and certainly could again lead the world toward whats right, and just and honorable.
and I know that we have had leaders and men of influence, corrupt our main frame design...but the ideal made reality is as pure as it ever will be. so long as WE remember who we are and quit denying God is most rightful position as our cornerstone.
who in their right mind can or could object to Christian basic facts, values and core principal that counts all men equal...as well as responsible. anyway...thanks. love Michael
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Amen brother
Comment from mbroyles2
A very vivideo image is given.
The flow and pace was a little choppy but maybe you wanted it to be that way.
"Faith leads more than follows."
I truly liked this.
Michael
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A very vivideo image is given.
The flow and pace was a little choppy but maybe you wanted it to be that way.
"Faith leads more than follows."
I truly liked this.
Michael
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from MizKat
Hi Reconciled,
I'm getting more and more forget with my old age. Sorry I can never remember your name. You always write the nicest poems that I always love to read. Thanks so much for sharing them.
MumKat
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Hi Reconciled,
I'm getting more and more forget with my old age. Sorry I can never remember your name. You always write the nicest poems that I always love to read. Thanks so much for sharing them.
MumKat
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
