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Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "The Storm"poems from Picture This Challenge
37 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I so enjoy reading these challenges. I can't join because I make even horrible poets look good. LOL I do enjoy reading them. Thank you for joining the group and sharing your talent with us.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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I so enjoy reading these challenges. I can't join because I make even horrible poets look good. LOL I do enjoy reading them. Thank you for joining the group and sharing your talent with us.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Yes, I enjoy the challenges, some of the pictures chosen have been a real challenge! Good to get the brain going, lol. Thank you so much, Barbara for reading my take on this one. I really appreciate it. And I'm sure your poetry isn't that bad!! LOL! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellent flowing piece that does tribute to the picture this challenge.
Absolutely a message to always remember, He is always there through any storm
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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An excellent flowing piece that does tribute to the picture this challenge.
Absolutely a message to always remember, He is always there through any storm
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Barb, I'm really happy you liked my take. Have you written yours? I'll take a look, your poetry is always superb, thanks again my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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Yes mine is on the site. Thank you dear friend
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good poem. A friend gave me a painting of a large sailing ship going off the edge of the earth. There was a bronze plaque at the bottom of the painting that said, "I told you so."
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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A very good poem. A friend gave me a painting of a large sailing ship going off the edge of the earth. There was a bronze plaque at the bottom of the painting that said, "I told you so."
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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LOL! I would have loved to have seen that! Thank you, Tom, for your fun review. I'm glad you liked it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from winnona
A well-written picture this challenge photo. The words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. This was a beautiful picture to work with. Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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A well-written picture this challenge photo. The words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. This was a beautiful picture to work with. Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much, Winnona, for your kind review. I enjoyed this one, the challenges are such fun. I'm glad you liked my take on the picture! :) xx Sandra
Comment from frogbook
Ah very nice story of a raging storm with sweet rescue at the end. Very nice thought and excellent writing and rhyming for this challenge.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Ah very nice story of a raging storm with sweet rescue at the end. Very nice thought and excellent writing and rhyming for this challenge.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked my take of the picture. It was a nice picture which we could do a lot with. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Dean Kuch
"The bow was lifted up which put the keelin under duress..."... I believe the word "in" sneaked it's way in on you here, Sandra. This reads much more smoothly aloud without it...
Other than that tiny, minor "nit", I felt this was a wonderfully well-written poem with a powerful and spiritually uplifting message to convey.
You rose to the potlatch challenge well, dear Poet!
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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"The bow was lifted up which put the keel
Other than that tiny, minor "nit", I felt this was a wonderfully well-written poem with a powerful and spiritually uplifting message to convey.
You rose to the potlatch challenge well, dear Poet!
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much, Dean, I have now removed that sneaky 'in'! I love that little cartoon! LOL. Thank you for the lovely review, my friend, and the help. Bless you. Sandra xxx
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Hahaha, it's always my pleasure, Sandra.
Have a wonderful Thanksgiving.
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And you! Have a good one. :) xx
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You bet; will do! :}
Comment from Pantygynt
A n excellent interpretation of the picture that then goes on to become a declaration of faith. Rhyming couplets in three quatrains of Iambic heptameter and a finsal couplet of the same to close. All that is necessary is to complete the correction you began to make here.
"The bow was lifted up which put the keel (in) under duress" The "in" here makes no sense and ruins the meter. I am sure you meant to get rid of it.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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A n excellent interpretation of the picture that then goes on to become a declaration of faith. Rhyming couplets in three quatrains of Iambic heptameter and a finsal couplet of the same to close. All that is necessary is to complete the correction you began to make here.
"The bow was lifted up which put the keel (in) under duress" The "in" here makes no sense and ruins the meter. I am sure you meant to get rid of it.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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No one else noticed that, including me, and I'd read it out to my husband prior to posting it! My brain must be slowing down! Thank you so much, I've removed it now, you were right, it wasn't meant to be there. And thank you for the lovely review, Jim, another of my heptameter's! I only realise it when I see your name. Thanks again, for telling me about the nit! :) Sandra xxx
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I see your name and think. I bet this is in heptameters. I had something silly like that picked up the other day on the third day of posting. These things are so easy to escape our notice. We see what we want to see.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, it's a lovely interpretation of the picture and you have written a wonderful poem. Being a sailor my self I'm very taken with it. The only thing I would suggest is that you keep to past tense. You started in past tense and so it should be kept in my humble opinion. The last two lines are fine in present tense as it is a conclusion. A wonderful poem. I love it. Love. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi Sandra, it's a lovely interpretation of the picture and you have written a wonderful poem. Being a sailor my self I'm very taken with it. The only thing I would suggest is that you keep to past tense. You started in past tense and so it should be kept in my humble opinion. The last two lines are fine in present tense as it is a conclusion. A wonderful poem. I love it. Love. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much, my friend, always so helpful. You see what I miss! LOL. Big hugs xx Sandra
Comment from Lu Saluna
Very well presented. Ship in a storm making it's way back to shore led by the Lord.
A very promising sign. It is well known that sailors especially during the times of pirates and privateers were very superstitious. They would have seen the sea-gulls as messengers of God and followed them home.
Really well written
Best wishes, Lu
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Very well presented. Ship in a storm making it's way back to shore led by the Lord.
A very promising sign. It is well known that sailors especially during the times of pirates and privateers were very superstitious. They would have seen the sea-gulls as messengers of God and followed them home.
Really well written
Best wishes, Lu
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Lu, I'm glad you enjoyed my take on the picture. It was a lovely picture too. I have lived by the sea all my life. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Sandra,
You did a great job with your challenge poem. Your well chosen words put readers right in the thick of the storm. What a great sight to see the seagulls. Good job on the rhyme, flow, alliteration, & message. I imagine many sailors feel/felt as you described. I believe the sea would be a lonely, scary place to deal with a as sailor.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Sandra,
You did a great job with your challenge poem. Your well chosen words put readers right in the thick of the storm. What a great sight to see the seagulls. Good job on the rhyme, flow, alliteration, & message. I imagine many sailors feel/felt as you described. I believe the sea would be a lonely, scary place to deal with a as sailor.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much, Jan. I just went to find yours, but you haven't posted yet. I'll keep an eye out. I'm really pleased you enjoyed mine, thanks, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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Sandra,
Mine is up. I have several reviews--'Into The Night' Jan
