Comment from lancellot

Good

100 word stories are not easy. It is hard to add context, content and purpose to a story with only a limited amount of words.

notes:


'We pulled it off Mags, against the odds', Mike droned on.

- the reader can't picture or believe Mike droning on, if this is only the second and last thing he said.

- who is Mike and what purpose did he serve?

Maggie resented his upbeat tone.

- we don't know why


Reaching her apartment, she collapsed on the couch and as usual, zapped {the} tv channels.

- perhaps: zapped 'through' TV channels

Within minutes, she was in sync with the man on the tv.

- what man?

Maggie's ennui began to fade.

- Her what? The reader needs some context.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016

Critique very much appreciated - thank you zanya

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

It sounds like Maggie is a prisoner to her job. What she views negatively, Mike sees as a challenge and is enthusiastic about it. At least she has found a way to escape the boredom.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading and the critique zanya