His Sleeve
... a dirty job done well ...38 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I liked this metaphor of Jesus rolling up his sleeve to help us out of the mire we got ourselves into. Ready to get dirty to make us clean over and over again.
Keep writing
Happy Thanksgiving.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I liked this metaphor of Jesus rolling up his sleeve to help us out of the mire we got ourselves into. Ready to get dirty to make us clean over and over again.
Keep writing
Happy Thanksgiving.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi, thank you for your insight and encouragement. Like Paul, I was chief among sinners - but, praise God, I'm forgiven ... I'm saved!
God bless and my best,
Relda
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My pleasure. Bless you.
Joan
Comment from rjuselius
this is a delightful piece of spiritual poetry dear relda! i love the concept of rolling up the sleeve, it is a beautiful metaphor! your humble poem offers hope.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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this is a delightful piece of spiritual poetry dear relda! i love the concept of rolling up the sleeve, it is a beautiful metaphor! your humble poem offers hope.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi, good to talk to you again.
Thank you for your encouragement. I appreciate it a lot. It is so good to 'sing' of Jesus. It is so good to share with others.
I'll stop by your site soon to see what you've been up to.
Relda
Comment from Oatmeal
Relda Halbert
The descriptive words created wonderful impressions. Thoughts are expressed and described well. Understandable and thought provoking but especially insightful comments.
These lines do not rhyme. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
Amazing grace! Shout out good news!
God loves me! I know it's true!
Squeezed my hand and washed me clean.
Said, "It's done." Rolled down His sleeve.
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Relda Halbert
The descriptive words created wonderful impressions. Thoughts are expressed and described well. Understandable and thought provoking but especially insightful comments.
These lines do not rhyme. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
Amazing grace! Shout out good news!
God loves me! I know it's true!
Squeezed my hand and washed me clean.
Said, "It's done." Rolled down His sleeve.
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi, so nice to talk to you again.
I appreciate your tips and encouragement. Hope you will critique more - always look for ways to improve.
Relda
Comment from crybry67
Thank you for sharing this piece, it is very beautiful and inspiring. Its a wonderful truth to be shared, and I don't mean just your poem. Your comments after are also beautiful. Happy Thanksgiving, and many blessings... Christy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you for sharing this piece, it is very beautiful and inspiring. Its a wonderful truth to be shared, and I don't mean just your poem. Your comments after are also beautiful. Happy Thanksgiving, and many blessings... Christy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Christy - Hi, I think I replied, before, to the 'stars' message notification. Things have been muddled for me - still dealing with my Bud's accident over the holidays. So, in case I missed doing so, let me thank you again for your lovely comments and encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautiful expression of your faith Relda. Excellent rhyme and pure joy in the last lines. Thank you for sharing your de rooted faith in such a wonderful way.
Blessings and Happy Thanksgiving.
Janet
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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A beautiful expression of your faith Relda. Excellent rhyme and pure joy in the last lines. Thank you for sharing your de rooted faith in such a wonderful way.
Blessings and Happy Thanksgiving.
Janet
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Janet - sorry to take so long to respond - traveled to OK City and back and my Bud had accident (fell, hit his head, no concussion but loss of some memory, some residual problems).
Your comments and encouragement are so welcome.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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I've been away too. Hope Bud is doing ok by now.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from dmt1967
The last line made the poem, in my opinion. 'squeezed my hand and watched me clean, said, "it's done." Rolled down his sleeves. I like the deep blue background as well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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The last line made the poem, in my opinion. 'squeezed my hand and watched me clean, said, "it's done." Rolled down his sleeves. I like the deep blue background as well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi, so good to talk to you again.
This poem was a perfect picture of my experience. Like Paul, I was chief among sinners, but I'm forgiven ... I'm saved!
Thank you for your encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from MissMerri
Relda, I like your style of writing very much. This is a beautiful poem. It has all the ingredients I most enjoy... rhyme and meter, even slant rhyme, makes perfect sense and has the emotional component as well. I found my eyes growing moist as I read your tender and heartfelt words. Thank you for this lovely poem this Thanksgiving morning, and for reminding us we can all be grateful for what the Savior did for us. MM
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Relda, I like your style of writing very much. This is a beautiful poem. It has all the ingredients I most enjoy... rhyme and meter, even slant rhyme, makes perfect sense and has the emotional component as well. I found my eyes growing moist as I read your tender and heartfelt words. Thank you for this lovely poem this Thanksgiving morning, and for reminding us we can all be grateful for what the Savior did for us. MM
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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MM, so good to talk to you again.
Your comments and encouragement are so much appreciated.
He is at the top of my 'thankful' list.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from Pantygynt
This short piece has a great rhythm, and good rhyme in couplets going for it. The meter is unusual being in trochaic tetrameter apart from one line, "Amazing grace! Shout out good news!" This one is an iambic tetrameter having that initial unstressed syllable. trochaic meter is not easily written in English so this a an excellent effort.
"Nailed fast shut the door to hell?" I just want to say "Nailed shut fast the door to hell?" It seems more natural to me.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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This short piece has a great rhythm, and good rhyme in couplets going for it. The meter is unusual being in trochaic tetrameter apart from one line, "Amazing grace! Shout out good news!" This one is an iambic tetrameter having that initial unstressed syllable. trochaic meter is not easily written in English so this a an excellent effort.
"Nailed fast shut the door to hell?" I just want to say "Nailed shut fast the door to hell?" It seems more natural to me.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi, so good to hear from you again. I love to get your reviews because I learn so much from you - the 'meter' was accidental (it seems God inspires with poetic form in mind - when I listen to Him). Your comments and encouragement mean a lot to me.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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If I were you I would have a word to say with God about that one iambic line amongst the trochees. Ask him to do better next time. Lol.
Comment from mbroyles2
Excellent reference.
I can imagine our Lord in heaven rolling up his sleeve and telling his Father. "It's time."
I like the way you mentioned that God could not look upon our sins, but the Son did and with his blood washes us clean.
Michael
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Excellent reference.
I can imagine our Lord in heaven rolling up his sleeve and telling his Father. "It's time."
I like the way you mentioned that God could not look upon our sins, but the Son did and with his blood washes us clean.
Michael
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Michael - so good to talk to you again.
Isn't our God good?!! He's at the top of my 'thankful' list.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from William Ross
I'm sure God rolls his sleeves up for many a dirty or cleaning job, Nicely done, good rhyming with a good meter. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I'm sure God rolls his sleeves up for many a dirty or cleaning job, Nicely done, good rhyming with a good meter. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 24-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hi! He's at the top of my 'thankful' list.
Thanks for the encouragement.
Relda
