There have been times
the darkest night57 total reviews
Comment from AnnaLinda
Relda,
This is a strong free verse feeling poem!
You have very powerful wording and I
like your analogy/example of "things"
being stuck in your throat. Sorrow so
deep and intense...yes, I get it.
Well done,
Linda
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
Relda,
This is a strong free verse feeling poem!
You have very powerful wording and I
like your analogy/example of "things"
being stuck in your throat. Sorrow so
deep and intense...yes, I get it.
Well done,
Linda
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Linda - thanks for your comments and encouragement. Haven't met a person who was willing to admit it who hadn't been there themselves. (Wait is that phrasing circular reasoning or just self-serving? My Bud tells me I'll do anything to prove a point!)
So good to talk to you again.
Relda
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That's true and sounds like the beginning of a new poem.
Comment from RGstar
Yet, no matter what, find the emotion to lift, for life is never worth ending, for it will end of its own accord and this written is on its way, for anybody reading or otherwise, to have hope, for it beckons a turning point.
My best wishes, Relda.
Have a good day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
Yet, no matter what, find the emotion to lift, for life is never worth ending, for it will end of its own accord and this written is on its way, for anybody reading or otherwise, to have hope, for it beckons a turning point.
My best wishes, Relda.
Have a good day.
RGstar
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your comments, insight and encouragement. That heaven there were also times when my heart has sung.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on the feeling prompt, and yes I have and sometimes still do have these feelings. Great job and good luck on this. have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
Nicely done on the feeling prompt, and yes I have and sometimes still do have these feelings. Great job and good luck on this. have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and encouragement. It IS a wonderful day! - Relda
Comment from mvbrooks
In two short stanzas you've captured the struggle between wanting life to stop and somehow choosing to go on. I was especially impressed with the line: "when words, food, and tears stuck in my throat."
The idea of "words" getting stuck in our throats is rather familiar. Changing the familiar with the addition of "...food and tears" made this line visual and visceral.
And the title captures the poem well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
In two short stanzas you've captured the struggle between wanting life to stop and somehow choosing to go on. I was especially impressed with the line: "when words, food, and tears stuck in my throat."
The idea of "words" getting stuck in our throats is rather familiar. Changing the familiar with the addition of "...food and tears" made this line visual and visceral.
And the title captures the poem well.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for the review and encouragement. Been 'there' a couple of times. Thank heaven just passing through.
Relda
Comment from barleygirl
I really love the raw gritty-ness of your message. You describe this in a physical way & depression can be very much in the body as much as the mind. The title/opening phrase (repeated for each stanza) is well crafted to show the reader this happens regularly, but not to the point where the curse sounds overwhelmingly dramatic.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
I really love the raw gritty-ness of your message. You describe this in a physical way & depression can be very much in the body as much as the mind. The title/opening phrase (repeated for each stanza) is well crafted to show the reader this happens regularly, but not to the point where the curse sounds overwhelmingly dramatic.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Hi! - Nice to meet you.
Thank you for the encourage review. Thank heavens there haven't been many of 'those times.'
God bless and my best.
Relda
Comment from sanejane
This poem perfectly describes despair. Not one single word is wasted, and nothing is missing.
The second stanza cut deep into my heart:
There have been times
when hurt was so deep,
so intense, so undeserved
that, surely,
life should have ended.
There are those times, but we pick ourselves up, and survive.
Thank you for sharing this great rhyme, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
This poem perfectly describes despair. Not one single word is wasted, and nothing is missing.
The second stanza cut deep into my heart:
There have been times
when hurt was so deep,
so intense, so undeserved
that, surely,
life should have ended.
There are those times, but we pick ourselves up, and survive.
Thank you for sharing this great rhyme, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the encouragement. I had a wonderful boss (lady) who once told me, "Relda, you're as serious as a heart-attach. Lighten up! Have some fun!" No kidding - what a great lady. Anyway, most of the time I take her advice, but then, there are times ....
God bless and my best,
Relda
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Haha; you're as serious as a heart-attack - that's a great saying.
All the best to you,
Jane
Comment from jusylee72
Wonderfully poem stated very well. It flowed and kept my interest. Undeserved pain is the hardest to understand and we have a very hard time of accepting it. Very thoughtful poetry.
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
Wonderfully poem stated very well. It flowed and kept my interest. Undeserved pain is the hardest to understand and we have a very hard time of accepting it. Very thoughtful poetry.
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Judy - thank you so much for your encouragement. This was hard - rather steer clear of those memories. But, they say it's good to get it out.
Good luck and God bless.
Relda