Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Chock full of feelings with strong descriptive phrasing and a truly well penned entry for this contest. Best of luck in the voting booth.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Hi, so good to talk to you again. I've been away from FS for a few months.
Thank you for your comments and encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Assuming you did not mean sorrow overflowed your heart, would flooded or immersed have been preferable to flowed-over? Not if you think not. Just musing. Excellent free verse.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Hi - I sometimes alter word or just plain make them up. Usually it's for better rhythm or harmonics ... or just something I heard my mother say when I was a kid - she could make up some doosies. Thanks for the comments and encouragement

Relda

Comment from Kelly2

Excellent

Relda,

I love the artwork you chose for this...and the words bring back memories. I like at the end in your author notes when you say, "Yes...there have been times."

The line "that surely, life should have ended." brings to my mind when my father died, and even when he was dying, and all around me I saw people laughing, families playing together, people just going on, unaware that somewhere else, someone's world was shattering.

This was probably not your intention, but for me, it brought those memories back.

Really great work and wonderful poem.

Kelly

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Hi - good to meet you. Your experience is shared. Had a few of those. When I wrote this I had in mind an experience when I'd told a man I loved (a handsome, wonderful scoundrel) that I had to say goodbye as I wanted more than he would give (actually meant it that time. Well, at three o-clock in the morning he was parked on the street in front of my place - I know because I hadn't slept and I recognized the sound of his Corvette. I stood in the dark, hidden by the curtain, praying he'd come in. Fifteen minutes later he drove off. It was hell but it WAS for the best.
Look forward to checking out some of your work.
Relda

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A very sad poem, but a very good contest entry. I was afraid this poem might be autobiographical until I read the contest entry. You show great imagination, and ability to touch others and share what they might be feeling.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Thank you for your encouragement. And ... very nice to meet you. Relda

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Well this is wrought with emotion. A very downbeat piece, but then sometimes that is just life, isn't it. great expression of feeling.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Thanks for the comments and encouragement. It's good to talk to you. Been busy with my Bud. Haven't had much time for FS since May.
Relda

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

And it is during these times that we--we fragile, compassionate, soulful human beings--are at our most vulnerable.
It's also times like these that we should never lean upon our own understanding,
There are forces in the universe and beyond we can reach through meditation and prayer to help see us through, Lighthouse-like beacons in the darkness that, when we will give up the helm, will right our ship and steer it through the rocky perils of life to safety and happiness.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Amen! to that Dean. There were times I say a lighthouse or two as well. - Relda

reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Nov-2016

My pleasure, Relda.

Comment from amada

Excellent

"There have being times..." I like the beginning of your poem because it draws the reader's attention in. We all have being traveling those times. Your lines, large and bold and in the past tense are a declaration of freedom. Great!

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Thanks so much for comments and encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. We all have emotions and feelings. Some good emotions we cannot help to express and the whole world see. There are others deeper and painful feelings that we prefer not to talk about or show our emotions.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Thanks so much for your comments and review. Good to talk to you again.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

But it didn't and presumably you pulled through those depressive times or you wouldn't be able to write about them so objectively. By placing these times in the past tense in your poem shows that you have dealt with them and that is great.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Your comments are very intuitive. Thank heaven there have been times when my heart has sung as well.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Kate Tompkins

Excellent

Thought this was excellent, it flows well and is very expressive. While I would have liked a third stanza providing resolution (I love a happy ending) it actually works better and is more realistic as is. And the line "there have been times" suggests now is not one of them.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016

Kate - thanks for the insight and encourage. Thank heaven there were also times when my heart has sung.
God bless and my best,
Relda
PS - nice to meet you. I'll stop by your site soon and see what you're up to.
Relda