Scorched.. and Scorned
When embers of love die7 total reviews
Comment from mvbrooks
Interesting twist from "his eyes" to "her soul." I read a poem once that included the advice "don't fall until you see the white of their lies." Your poem reminded me of this with the fire causing a charred landscape. Very visual.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Interesting twist from "his eyes" to "her soul." I read a poem once that included the advice "don't fall until you see the white of their lies." Your poem reminded me of this with the fire causing a charred landscape. Very visual.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the encouraging feedback.
Comment from Ogden
Transcends short-form poetry! These few words describe so well the remains of a marriage or love affair. It easily won my vote in the cotest.
Don
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Transcends short-form poetry! These few words describe so well the remains of a marriage or love affair. It easily won my vote in the cotest.
Don
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your generous rating!
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your strong powerful words combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your strong powerful words combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your positive feedback.
Comment from schatzling
The words of your 5-7-5 FIRE poem is top notch. Very well done indeed.
I personally wanted to thank you for selecting my drawing to accompany it.
They do fit so very well together. All the best at the voting booth. I am sure you will be in the top 3.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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The words of your 5-7-5 FIRE poem is top notch. Very well done indeed.
I personally wanted to thank you for selecting my drawing to accompany it.
They do fit so very well together. All the best at the voting booth. I am sure you will be in the top 3.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from frierajac
I liked the way in which the charred remains of landscape is the face in woodcut design, and the internal assonance of died/ behind not quite rhyme.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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I liked the way in which the charred remains of landscape is the face in woodcut design, and the internal assonance of died/ behind not quite rhyme.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from William Ross
This is good on the fire prompt, the fire the love the passion died, Great job, should do good, best of luck and have a good day.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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This is good on the fire prompt, the fire the love the passion died, Great job, should do good, best of luck and have a good day.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thank you!
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
Because creativity is encourage I think this may be accepted
by the committee even though it's not specifically about fire
The initial fire of passion gone, the relationship is dead,
left in ruins like the remains of fire
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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This is a fine entry for the contest
Because creativity is encourage I think this may be accepted
by the committee even though it's not specifically about fire
The initial fire of passion gone, the relationship is dead,
left in ruins like the remains of fire
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the positive feedback. Decided to try something different. We'll see if it works!
