skittering leaves flee (haiku)
Run as fast as you can. Winter's coming.96 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, creative and thought provoking.
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem all
together. The artwork is unique and compliments the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, creative and thought provoking.
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem all
together. The artwork is unique and compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, harmony13, for your generous review. I am glad you found this to be an "excellent poem."
Comment from winnona
well-written contest entry. I think you have completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader
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well-written contest entry. I think you have completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Winnona, for your generous review of my "well-written contest entry." I appreciate it.
Comment from barleygirl
This is one of the best haiku I've read, plus it's one of the best autumn poems I've read (and there are hundreds!) I love the awesome word play on the sound "eeee" in the first line, which emphasizes the meaning therein. I love the personification of leaves & seasons. I love that you follow the rules of haiku (& not just 5-7-5) by making this about nature & the last line being a departure or concluding statement. I don't want to be the poetry police, but I can't help but appreciate when an artist is aware of the form & following it well.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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This is one of the best haiku I've read, plus it's one of the best autumn poems I've read (and there are hundreds!) I love the awesome word play on the sound "eeee" in the first line, which emphasizes the meaning therein. I love the personification of leaves & seasons. I love that you follow the rules of haiku (& not just 5-7-5) by making this about nature & the last line being a departure or concluding statement. I don't want to be the poetry police, but I can't help but appreciate when an artist is aware of the form & following it well.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, barleygirl, most haiku on autumn focus in the colors of the leaves or on the action of leaves falling. I, instead, created a horror movie as "winter stalks autumn" while "skittering leaves flee." I am humbled that you appreciate the artistry of my haiku. Thank you for your review.
Comment from nomi338
This evokes stark memories of what life in the Midwest was like, not so much for here in sunny Southern California. I felt that sense of foreboding that comes with the very visible warning signs that bitterly cold weather is on the horizon. Cold days and night, accompanied by knee deep snow drifts. Brrr.
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This evokes stark memories of what life in the Midwest was like, not so much for here in sunny Southern California. I felt that sense of foreboding that comes with the very visible warning signs that bitterly cold weather is on the horizon. Cold days and night, accompanied by knee deep snow drifts. Brrr.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, nomi338, my haiku "evokes stark memories" and the foreboding. Thank you for your review and for sharing your memories.
Comment from frierajac
I really like the art and haiku together. The expression is lovely, reminding me when there were open doors with the autumn leaves across the threshold of bygone days
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I really like the art and haiku together. The expression is lovely, reminding me when there were open doors with the autumn leaves across the threshold of bygone days
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, it scares me to hear skittering leaves scratch at my door to come in. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from Janet Foor
Each line is filled with vivid imagery. My favorite is "skittering leaves flee". But each line is amazing. Wonderful haiku my friend.
Well done..
Blessings
Janet
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Each line is filled with vivid imagery. My favorite is "skittering leaves flee". But each line is amazing. Wonderful haiku my friend.
Well done..
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Janet, for your generous, six star review of my "vivid" haiku. Yes, I love the line "skittering leaves flee." I built the rest of my poem on that. Thanks again.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a wonderful word ... skittering! That's just what the leaves do, and I think the image of them at the door scratching to get in, is fabulous. Well done, its a really good contest entry, you have described the scene so well. Good luck. Sandra xx
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What a wonderful word ... skittering! That's just what the leaves do, and I think the image of them at the door scratching to get in, is fabulous. Well done, its a really good contest entry, you have described the scene so well. Good luck. Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Sandra, I nearly cried when I read your heartfelt review. Those skittering leaves have stalked me all fall and scratched at my door. They whispered, "Write a haiku about us." I wrote several but this is the best one. Thank you for your review.
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Aww, I really loved it. I hope you win. :) xx
Comment from Daniel Silverhawk
Nice picture of leaves fleeing the onset of winter. Wishing to come in and escape the inevitable winter cold. Good luck in the contest.
Follows a good format of 5-7-5.
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Nice picture of leaves fleeing the onset of winter. Wishing to come in and escape the inevitable winter cold. Good luck in the contest.
Follows a good format of 5-7-5.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Daniel, for your review and for wishing me contest success. I appreciate them.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a fine piece of poetry dear sis kat! it is original and clever and the satori is great. this should do well in the contest. kudos to you.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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this is a fine piece of poetry dear sis kat! it is original and clever and the satori is great. this should do well in the contest. kudos to you.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Rebekka, for your review of my "fine piece of poetry" and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Writer51
Very nice. It is right to the point, but so true, and your use of strong words is very effective. It leaves the feeling of a very bad winter to come. I hope that 's not a sign of things to come.
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Very nice. It is right to the point, but so true, and your use of strong words is very effective. It leaves the feeling of a very bad winter to come. I hope that 's not a sign of things to come.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, Writer51, I use strong words in my haiku to convey pictures, action, and moods. Thank you for your review.
