To Last Forever
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Comment from Jasmine Salters
...I'm confused. I couldn't understand part of the poem. And it's not like I'd like anyone to explain it. It's just that when you put together a bunch of incoherent words, especially without grammar, it's hard to understand what they mean. Some of it I understood (3rd and 4th stanza), but the rest, I just felt totally lost. I'm just not sure what you're talking about or what the message is. I know that as the author, you want to express yourself in the way that feels best to you, but if it doesn't translate to something the reader can understand, then "writing a poem" and "being able to help people understand how you feel" become two separate things.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016
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...I'm confused. I couldn't understand part of the poem. And it's not like I'd like anyone to explain it. It's just that when you put together a bunch of incoherent words, especially without grammar, it's hard to understand what they mean. Some of it I understood (3rd and 4th stanza), but the rest, I just felt totally lost. I'm just not sure what you're talking about or what the message is. I know that as the author, you want to express yourself in the way that feels best to you, but if it doesn't translate to something the reader can understand, then "writing a poem" and "being able to help people understand how you feel" become two separate things.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016
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It's quite simple....I don't care. Whether you personally get my drift or don't......I write for me mostly. So you aren't even considered in the process. Therefore if you chose to partake in my ambrosia do be awAre you do so as guest of the honored. Alright chow baby
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I love your words, but I don't understand one of them in the contest. Do everybody tell you they understand everything? Well if that is the case I'll never write another word in English. I speak it every day my husband is Scottish after all. Please don't take offence. None intended. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016
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Hi there, I love your words, but I don't understand one of them in the contest. Do everybody tell you they understand everything? Well if that is the case I'll never write another word in English. I speak it every day my husband is Scottish after all. Please don't take offence. None intended. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016
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Well I'm real glad you love my words Ulla....though you understand. None of them. Why would I take offense.... I don't even know you and am not trying to find food on Japan....ah so...love Michael
Comment from DR DIP
Love this song He has a great voice and great lyrics
Your poems to me are always quite cryptic in content
You are the thinking man's poet. Well done
dip
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Love this song He has a great voice and great lyrics
Your poems to me are always quite cryptic in content
You are the thinking man's poet. Well done
dip
Comment Written 10-Nov-2016
Comment from sanejane
I was sent a list of the 10 best poets on Fan Story this morning, and your name was on it (she generously included mine, too). I'm embarrassed to admit that I can't remember the name of the poet who gave me that list, but I know her face and her poetry.
Your poem is electrifying. It flashes images in front of my face, but I can't clearly see what they are. It's intriguing. The clues are onscure and tantalising.
Man does live. Bread. Man does not live by bread alone.
Beethoven moment = deafness
I give up. I love the poem and adore the third and fourth stanza. what else matters?
All the best,
Jane
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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I was sent a list of the 10 best poets on Fan Story this morning, and your name was on it (she generously included mine, too). I'm embarrassed to admit that I can't remember the name of the poet who gave me that list, but I know her face and her poetry.
Your poem is electrifying. It flashes images in front of my face, but I can't clearly see what they are. It's intriguing. The clues are onscure and tantalising.
Man does live. Bread. Man does not live by bread alone.
Beethoven moment = deafness
I give up. I love the poem and adore the third and fourth stanza. what else matters?
All the best,
Jane
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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yes me too...-smile-
well "the best" is a relative....that visits many here, including her.
yes I read one of yours recently...and was very much impressed. you'll like Leinco also...and Miss Merri. thank you Jane very nice to meet you. love Michael
Comment from robyn corum
Michael,
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING????
It's like you speak a foreign language, or something. I don't get it. You're American, I'm American. We both speak English as our native tongue, but I don't understand a word you write. HELP!!!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Michael,
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING????
It's like you speak a foreign language, or something. I don't get it. You're American, I'm American. We both speak English as our native tongue, but I don't understand a word you write. HELP!!!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Listen closely.....love michael
Comment from robina1978
I liked the photo that complements your free verse poem perfectly. I liked the subject that you wrote about: bread, women and a lot more. Well done Michael.
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I liked the photo that complements your free verse poem perfectly. I liked the subject that you wrote about: bread, women and a lot more. Well done Michael.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
Comment from MissMerri
To read your poetry is like going on a solo adventure into a place never before explored. I always read it several times because each time through brings another obscure part into focus, a richer understanding of what you are expressing, and a deeper appreciation of your wordplay and your amazing ability to bring your emotional depth out onto the page. Always you manage to create a mood or feeling that surrounds the poem and draws the reader in. This poem expresses in such a unique way the universal love of men for womankind, from the beginning of creation...approaching reverence... as well as a deep personal respect for one honored and desired above all others. I'm sure there is more... Much more behind the words, but I so much enjoyed this poem.. I will need to read it many more times to glean all you have placed here. I find your work inspiring as well as challenging. ~M
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To read your poetry is like going on a solo adventure into a place never before explored. I always read it several times because each time through brings another obscure part into focus, a richer understanding of what you are expressing, and a deeper appreciation of your wordplay and your amazing ability to bring your emotional depth out onto the page. Always you manage to create a mood or feeling that surrounds the poem and draws the reader in. This poem expresses in such a unique way the universal love of men for womankind, from the beginning of creation...approaching reverence... as well as a deep personal respect for one honored and desired above all others. I'm sure there is more... Much more behind the words, but I so much enjoyed this poem.. I will need to read it many more times to glean all you have placed here. I find your work inspiring as well as challenging. ~M
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
Your work is unique and I think I have mentioned that before. Your mind digs deeper down than probably mine. I find your poetry captivating even though it is written in a different way. Keep up this great work.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Your work is unique and I think I have mentioned that before. Your mind digs deeper down than probably mine. I find your poetry captivating even though it is written in a different way. Keep up this great work.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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why thank you very much Susan...-smile-
you are the point on the exclamation, the conformation of the poets prowess and the promise come to bare....please please come yourself to home sweet home...-smile-...love Michael
Comment from AnnaLinda
Hi Mike,
You have the most unique style of poetry of
anyone...I don't know what you mean or what
you said here...but I give you credit...just be
you and you know what you mean.
Linda
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi Mike,
You have the most unique style of poetry of
anyone...I don't know what you mean or what
you said here...but I give you credit...just be
you and you know what you mean.
Linda
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Ha....aha...-headtilt-...Linda
you want to have some fun or what...alright here we go
lets break her down bare naked mineral....line one...aha..."since soul elated food"...since the creation of woman....line two...Beethoven moment fornicated"....from that moment awesome made love to....line three..."hunger for elevated tower"....desire to possess her kiss takes precedent. shall I go to line four...can you handle the truth Linda...ha...line four...open the door..."Babylon past all things"...woo thats way way far, all the way past earthbound...."spirit born eternal around" ....means watch her walk...-wink-....okay I'm bored now...but I think I feel a breeze at least....love Michael
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Been through the door and you confuse me...I don't mean to insult you...but, I'm pretty sure you insulted me. I'm pretty basic...but still deep. We missed the line that meets.
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Let's keep it that way genius
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are you...?
well if what you read in my explanation offensive, you insult easier than me. and like you...I'm truly sorry for that. and the Witchata lineman is still on the liiiiiiiine...-smile-
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Comment from Dean Kuch
The wily ways of one woman named Eve and a serpent are what brought mankind to the very brink of destruction before it barely began.
Subsequently, human beings were cast out of the paradise known as The Garden of Eden.
Have you ever asked yourself what would have happened if the roles had been reversed; if it was Adam, not Eve, that had been beguiled by the surreptitiously sly serpent to eat from the Tree of Knowledge?
Food for thought...just as this intriguing poem is by you as well, Michael.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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The wily ways of one woman named Eve and a serpent are what brought mankind to the very brink of destruction before it barely began.
Subsequently, human beings were cast out of the paradise known as The Garden of Eden.
Have you ever asked yourself what would have happened if the roles had been reversed; if it was Adam, not Eve, that had been beguiled by the surreptitiously sly serpent to eat from the Tree of Knowledge?
Food for thought...just as this intriguing poem is by you as well, Michael.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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it was never a surprise Dean.
He planned it that way...He had to have known the temptation too great...He knew it would happen before it did. It was necessary....without its happening....the choice of His Love would only be dumb not knowing anything other.
its like crucifixion of Christ...if there were another way...it would have been accessed. it was necessary.
there are some who believe it was not fruit Eve bite into but flesh. the serpent only a symbol. it is were "some" believe the giants...the half human half fallen angel blood line was born. culminating in the flood of Noah. it was not surprise....He created us as such...He knows us well. the answer to your question which was mine many years ago....if God being all knowing...why would He place a tree in a garden forbidden to eat from....knowing the temptation would be too great....and set of a domino effect that cursed all mankind. the answer....is because He needed to...to know for sure and much more important that each of us would...His Love supreme...chosen over all things. so if not Eve...then Adam for sure...but in truth they are one in the same...she being created by God from him. love Michael
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Yes, I guess you're right, Michael. He needed to be sure how mankind would react and if we would remain obedient to Him.
I get that.
Also, I believe you're right in saying that if it hadn't been Eve, then Adam would have surely been made the "fall guy", for sure.
Anyhow, I very much enjoyed your poem and the pondering it caused me to do on the subject.
Best regards, my friend.
~Dean
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He knew we wouldn't be obedient...until we tested all things. it is our God given nature to do so....and then acknowledge Who and What reigns. love-
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Well, He was definitely right, as He always is :)
