The Evap Trap
An evaporation device for the dessert19 total reviews
Comment from William Ross
very good, nicely done, good rhyme and rhythm has good meter reads and flows well, I have heard of this devise, thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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very good, nicely done, good rhyme and rhythm has good meter reads and flows well, I have heard of this devise, thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the review
Comment from RoostyNester
How precious water is to those that have to struggle to get it. Your poem was very informative and well written in style and verse. I loved the rhymes with the even flow of your words. Very well done.
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How precious water is to those that have to struggle to get it. Your poem was very informative and well written in style and verse. I loved the rhymes with the even flow of your words. Very well done.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks this is an actual device!
Comment from joannakruk
A lovely descriptive piece that highlights the functionality and benefits of this amazing device. By including the reaction of the boy who benefits from this device, you humanise the life giving contraption. Top rhyme.
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A lovely descriptive piece that highlights the functionality and benefits of this amazing device. By including the reaction of the boy who benefits from this device, you humanise the life giving contraption. Top rhyme.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the review
Comment from winnona
a well written poem. Your words flow line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. your background color completed the piece well.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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a well written poem. Your words flow line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. your background color completed the piece well.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the kind words
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This is a poem fit for an engineer, Yvon. What a novel idea! Hopefully, you'll find a place in your next novel for this simple process. Your aabb quatrains are well written with no break in rhythm. Very well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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This is a poem fit for an engineer, Yvon. What a novel idea! Hopefully, you'll find a place in your next novel for this simple process. Your aabb quatrains are well written with no break in rhythm. Very well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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This is actually a device already produced. Supposedly it can amass up to 37 liters of water a day.
Thanks. I saw this device but couldn't remember where to get the picture
Comment from Stacia Ann
Hi, Yvon. Thanks for sharing this!
This sounds like a pretty amazing device that could perhaps save entire desert communities.
I think you have written about it very well, in iambic meter, in a sound meter and rhyme scheme. I love the ending image of the child's delight at something most of us in developed countries take for granted--water.
Something to consider for revision:
this image
"the reapers sow"
This, to me, is almost a death image in this poem about life due to the strong association of "reapers" to "grim reaper," although I know it means something else here.
Nice work! Thank you again for sharing:)
Stacia
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Hi, Yvon. Thanks for sharing this!
This sounds like a pretty amazing device that could perhaps save entire desert communities.
I think you have written about it very well, in iambic meter, in a sound meter and rhyme scheme. I love the ending image of the child's delight at something most of us in developed countries take for granted--water.
Something to consider for revision:
this image
"the reapers sow"
This, to me, is almost a death image in this poem about life due to the strong association of "reapers" to "grim reaper," although I know it means something else here.
Nice work! Thank you again for sharing:)
Stacia
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Reap what you sow as in farming etc
Comment from country ranch writer
THEY ARE GOING TO USE LIGHTS BEAMS TO ACTIVATE THE CLOUDS AND MAKE IT RAIN WOULD BE NICE FOR THE DESERT COUNTRY TO GET RAIN AND PUT OUT ALL THE FIRES THEY CAN'T CONTROL
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THEY ARE GOING TO USE LIGHTS BEAMS TO ACTIVATE THE CLOUDS AND MAKE IT RAIN WOULD BE NICE FOR THE DESERT COUNTRY TO GET RAIN AND PUT OUT ALL THE FIRES THEY CAN'T CONTROL
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
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Nice thought
Comment from lyenochka
Clever! yes, we need lots of those "evaporation traps." In the poem, are you the inventor? Wish we could somehow send the flood waters to the parched lands. Great invention description in perfect rhyme scheme
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Clever! yes, we need lots of those "evaporation traps." In the poem, are you the inventor? Wish we could somehow send the flood waters to the parched lands. Great invention description in perfect rhyme scheme
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
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I saw this device on line but couldn't remember where to post a picture.
Comment from Marykelly
The message of this poem is the fact that parts of the world enjoy plenty of rainfall but other parts are almost devoid of water. To solve this problem the speaker describes a device that could distribute water to arid areas. The concept is innovative and it makes me wonder if it has been tried, and if so was it successful.
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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The message of this poem is the fact that parts of the world enjoy plenty of rainfall but other parts are almost devoid of water. To solve this problem the speaker describes a device that could distribute water to arid areas. The concept is innovative and it makes me wonder if it has been tried, and if so was it successful.
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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It is an actual device that supposedly produces 37 liters of water per day. A fan draws air six feet into the Earth where it cools and condenses than drips to the bottom of the container.
