To Last Forever
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
Beautifully inspirational free verse poem. A couple of apostrophes omitted in possessives: Father(')s and footprint(')s.
Well done. :) Nancy
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Beautifully inspirational free verse poem. A couple of apostrophes omitted in possessives: Father(')s and footprint(')s.
Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
Comment from ronnie k
Another interesting poem, I love the, what seems like stage are growth love takes, the many roles are so beautifully presented in word, love is not only one man too one women but to give to life's encounters, thank you.
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Another interesting poem, I love the, what seems like stage are growth love takes, the many roles are so beautifully presented in word, love is not only one man too one women but to give to life's encounters, thank you.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
Comment from misscookie
I have no more stars to give
I found your poem to be a very interesting read.
You captured my attention from the start.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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I have no more stars to give
I found your poem to be a very interesting read.
You captured my attention from the start.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from Neonewman
brilliantly crafted piece you have delivered here young man! I especially love all of the play on words you have turned. I also love this song of George Michael.
God bless and thank you for sharing.
Steve
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brilliantly crafted piece you have delivered here young man! I especially love all of the play on words you have turned. I also love this song of George Michael.
God bless and thank you for sharing.
Steve
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from royowen
I enjoyed the March of contrasts in your work, the sadness and coldness of things that never seem to change, and the wistfulness of dawning hope that only lands on few shores, beautifully written Michael, well done, blessings, Roy
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I enjoyed the March of contrasts in your work, the sadness and coldness of things that never seem to change, and the wistfulness of dawning hope that only lands on few shores, beautifully written Michael, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from ScarBundy
This was an enjoyable read. I particularly enjoyed the bit about "once frostbitten, twice shy," - a clever twist on the cliché phrase. Nicely done overall.
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This was an enjoyable read. I particularly enjoyed the bit about "once frostbitten, twice shy," - a clever twist on the cliché phrase. Nicely done overall.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Michael,
You just a little bit of SPAG (apostrophes on the words Father's, Soul's, and Love's in the last line.) At least, that is how I read those words, disregard if it isn't how you intended them to read.
You've borrow a few of my favorite song lyrics, "cold as ice" by Foreigner and "once bitten, twice shy" by Great White. I wonder if anyone else noticed?
It was an interesting read. Thanks for sharing.
Kim
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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Hi Michael,
You just a little bit of SPAG (apostrophes on the words Father's, Soul's, and Love's in the last line.) At least, that is how I read those words, disregard if it isn't how you intended them to read.
You've borrow a few of my favorite song lyrics, "cold as ice" by Foreigner and "once bitten, twice shy" by Great White. I wonder if anyone else noticed?
It was an interesting read. Thanks for sharing.
Kim
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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Hi Kim...-smile-...well ...I wonder if ice was cold before the foreignness came...and when I think of "once bitten" its Warren Zebon twice shy...-smile-....I dont need to borrow words...i'm very good at making new noises...thank you . love Michael
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Those happen to be songs I've always really enjoyed, that's why the pairings caught my attention :) I didn't mean any offense, Michael.
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sorry Kim...I misunderstood...please forgive me....love-
Comment from MizKat
Hi Michael,
Your poem is beautiful and wonderful to read. I loved every word of it.
I hope that you will keep writing more of your great poetry for all of your
friends to read.
Kat
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Hi Michael,
Your poem is beautiful and wonderful to read. I loved every word of it.
I hope that you will keep writing more of your great poetry for all of your
friends to read.
Kat
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016
Comment from foxangie123
The entire presentation is very nicely done indeed. It is perfect if you don't mind me saying. Bravo and a standing ovation from me. More please.
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The entire presentation is very nicely done indeed. It is perfect if you don't mind me saying. Bravo and a standing ovation from me. More please.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016
Comment from RGstar
Once again, you improve and give your all. Your sense of ownership to a language and style...making it your own shall pay dividends, for this battle between coldness of an entity, battling through acceptance and hope for tomorrow as well as a spiritual high, is the these through your writes, and how you do it well.
We walk together, my friend, and with us the presence of our Maureen. so you tell me what place can we not venture?
''tending her Fathers gardens
and the resurrection of dead flowers
gentle as forgiveness smiles ''
The above is the gentleness of a heart...its all yours, my friend.
My best wishes.
RG
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Once again, you improve and give your all. Your sense of ownership to a language and style...making it your own shall pay dividends, for this battle between coldness of an entity, battling through acceptance and hope for tomorrow as well as a spiritual high, is the these through your writes, and how you do it well.
We walk together, my friend, and with us the presence of our Maureen. so you tell me what place can we not venture?
''tending her Fathers gardens
and the resurrection of dead flowers
gentle as forgiveness smiles ''
The above is the gentleness of a heart...its all yours, my friend.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016
