Once upon the heart..
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38 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear susan! the imagery is breathtaking and the wording ingenious! i love the repetition, it adds to the poem. very well presented!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
virtual six!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear susan! the imagery is breathtaking and the wording ingenious! i love the repetition, it adds to the poem. very well presented!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
virtual six!
rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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AWE thanks Dear!!... great review!!! i'm smiling
Comment from tfawcus
How well your repeating lines come together at the end! There is a light whimsicality in this dreamy poem of love and yearning. Quite delightful, in fact.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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How well your repeating lines come together at the end! There is a light whimsicality in this dreamy poem of love and yearning. Quite delightful, in fact.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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awe thanks for reading and the great review!!! much appreciated!!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Well written poem with excellent imagery
and an other worldly sense to it:
"Enchant my visions duly, every night"
-It also shows a strong love that existed between two people.
-I like your repeating lines, especially at the end.
FYI: I read Pantygynt's poem "Where is Love" and read where you asked him
where the romance or love was in his poem. He wrote a good poem, and I asked him if you liked it, and he indicated you did. I told him I was glad you asked him to do that! I told him I liked the images of the oak and the fall colors best!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Well written poem with excellent imagery
and an other worldly sense to it:
"Enchant my visions duly, every night"
-It also shows a strong love that existed between two people.
-I like your repeating lines, especially at the end.
FYI: I read Pantygynt's poem "Where is Love" and read where you asked him
where the romance or love was in his poem. He wrote a good poem, and I asked him if you liked it, and he indicated you did. I told him I was glad you asked him to do that! I told him I liked the images of the oak and the fall colors best!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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:-) He was worried i might not...but really, he has such a way with his poetry..and the loving tones do come through...BUT more importantly...is that he took the time to write it for me!!!!!!! truly speaks to a wonderful person. Made me smile!!!... so there's the love!!!......thanks Dear for reading and the great review!!!
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Thanks for sharing about the poem; you do have a good point that he took the time to do it, and that was the love. It was an impressive poem. You are welcome for the review and stars for your poem, too. I enjoyed it.
Comment from rspoet
The heart of romance dwells within your words
and your own heart, I suspect, as well
A beautifully written love poem
A few poetic notes:
Perhaps "while" starting stanza two, rather than "with"
would connect a little better to the next line.
The iambic meter strays a bit in stanza three.
But overall a wonderful poem with matching art work
Well done
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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The heart of romance dwells within your words
and your own heart, I suspect, as well
A beautifully written love poem
A few poetic notes:
Perhaps "while" starting stanza two, rather than "with"
would connect a little better to the next line.
The iambic meter strays a bit in stanza three.
But overall a wonderful poem with matching art work
Well done
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016
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Thank you!!!! i'll look at that again...appreciate the help!! thanks for reading and the great review!!!
Comment from Mastery
Susan, you write some fabulous poetry. I saw that in your last post and here we are again. You have the talent for sure. I liked this stanza in particular:
"With life's design now keeping us apart
Has left me dangling with a bleeding heart
Your nightly visits welcomed in my sight
Beg, wake me never ~ from my midnight flight."
Brilliant and beautiful. Be sure to start entering some of the contests on here. You will do well. Blessings. Bob. (ps. I have a new postring up myslef) wink.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Susan, you write some fabulous poetry. I saw that in your last post and here we are again. You have the talent for sure. I liked this stanza in particular:
"With life's design now keeping us apart
Has left me dangling with a bleeding heart
Your nightly visits welcomed in my sight
Beg, wake me never ~ from my midnight flight."
Brilliant and beautiful. Be sure to start entering some of the contests on here. You will do well. Blessings. Bob. (ps. I have a new postring up myslef) wink.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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okey dokey hokey pokey..ill check it out soon...thanks for the great review!
Comment from l.raven
HI Susan, WOW!!! I love...love poems...this is so romantic...passionate...and I love the line....Beg, wake me never, from my midnight flight...hoping the sun will never wake up...love your poem...and the picture...perrrrrfect...very well written...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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HI Susan, WOW!!! I love...love poems...this is so romantic...passionate...and I love the line....Beg, wake me never, from my midnight flight...hoping the sun will never wake up...love your poem...and the picture...perrrrrfect...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Oh you are so sweet!!...this one i special to me...thanks for reading dear and the great review!!!
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I can see why it would be...has a special feeling to it...you are so very welcome...xxoo Love Linda
Comment from Matthew Franklin
I love this poem!! The picture goes along perfectly with the idea of midnight flight. Each of the three stanzas all have different flavors of emotion to them. Blissfully, Bleeding, and Fantasy really stand out to me from each stanza respectively. The repetition of your last line gives the entire poem a very whimsical, ethereal feel that makes it impossible not to love! Very, very well done!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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I love this poem!! The picture goes along perfectly with the idea of midnight flight. Each of the three stanzas all have different flavors of emotion to them. Blissfully, Bleeding, and Fantasy really stand out to me from each stanza respectively. The repetition of your last line gives the entire poem a very whimsical, ethereal feel that makes it impossible not to love! Very, very well done!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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You are so sweet!!! thank you for this wonderful review!!! I'm smiling!!
Comment from Janet Foor
A gorgeous picture and presentation to accompany this love poem "Midnight Flight".
Lovely repeating lines and beautiful rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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A gorgeous picture and presentation to accompany this love poem "Midnight Flight".
Lovely repeating lines and beautiful rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thank you Janet for the wonderful review!!!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh so magnificienty stated and such a wonderful piece on love.
Do not wake me and let me feel the love surround me.
Love is there even if in my dreams.
Nice one
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Oh so magnificienty stated and such a wonderful piece on love.
Do not wake me and let me feel the love surround me.
Love is there even if in my dreams.
Nice one
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Barb!!! thank you for reading and for another wonderful review!!
Comment from LIJ Red
I reviewed another work with similar meter and lines and refrains that was labelled a Kyrielle Sonnet. So, once again, as then, I opine, excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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I reviewed another work with similar meter and lines and refrains that was labelled a Kyrielle Sonnet. So, once again, as then, I opine, excellent.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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awe your sweet!!! but....it's not a kryielle sonnet...i messed up, it should have 8 syllables..and my stresses are off too! :-(...soooo I'll just call it a LOVE POEM!!!! heheheh
