Haunt Me Sweetly
When you're born into the wrong family27 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
This is an adorable story! I didn't find any errors, and your choice of font was very easy for the eyes. Haunted houses have feelings, too! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
This is an adorable story! I didn't find any errors, and your choice of font was very easy for the eyes. Haunted houses have feelings, too! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you liked it. I voted for your story, I thought it was excellent.
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Hey, thank you! :) I just put on haunted house music and that helped put me in the mood. Also, found a picture of a house in my hometown, built with brownstone bricks--very creepy looking but charming. :P
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Good idea to get inspired.
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Yeah. :)
Comment from country ranch writer
good deed indeed for all to share and be happy the children are having a place to meet and play and keeps the off the streets
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
good deed indeed for all to share and be happy the children are having a place to meet and play and keeps the off the streets
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from gene roush
This is very cute -- the type of story that might make a nice children's book.
The writing is easy to read and proceeds linearly.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
This is very cute -- the type of story that might make a nice children's book.
The writing is easy to read and proceeds linearly.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Gene.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, María. I see you've written a little terror tale for us all to sink our teeth into. Sorry to be so late to the party...
Everybody in the village knew the house at the end of Dikler Drive was haunted. ... Good opening to draw your readers into the story and make them want to learn more, María. Also, a very good description of the old Dikler house follows.
Nice...
Well, apparently they haven't. You'd better think of a solution and don't call me till you have. I hope your poor father doesn't find out. It would break his already delicate heart.' ... If Matilda's mother was an elegant old mansion by the sea, then what was her father, the boathouse? Heh-heh-heh...
Matilda's father was a stone castle on the edge of a cliff and erosion wasn't a kind friend. Oops...I stand corrected. You see, I read & review as I go.
I feel I can give a much more accurate review that way...
Well...I'll be. A haunted house story with a happy ending.
Who'd'a thunk it?
Good writing, María. This is an excellent story for children.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
Hello, María. I see you've written a little terror tale for us all to sink our teeth into. Sorry to be so late to the party...
Everybody in the village knew the house at the end of Dikler Drive was haunted. ... Good opening to draw your readers into the story and make them want to learn more, María. Also, a very good description of the old Dikler house follows.
Nice...
Well, apparently they haven't. You'd better think of a solution and don't call me till you have. I hope your poor father doesn't find out. It would break his already delicate heart.' ... If Matilda's mother was an elegant old mansion by the sea, then what was her father, the boathouse? Heh-heh-heh...
Matilda's father was a stone castle on the edge of a cliff and erosion wasn't a kind friend. Oops...I stand corrected. You see, I read & review as I go.
I feel I can give a much more accurate review that way...
Well...I'll be. A haunted house story with a happy ending.
Who'd'a thunk it?
Good writing, María. This is an excellent story for children.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Dean.
I also review as I go, using the little bubble thingy on the left.
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Yes, that's how I do it as well.
You're very welcome, my
~Dean :}
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Fiend indeed! ;)
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How cute! In an evil sort of way.
Comment from Nika2016
Well ..you had to go and get the adults involved? Could it not be the kids'special place? Smile.
I liked the story...and I can see the renovation...
Matilda shi es!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
Well ..you had to go and get the adults involved? Could it not be the kids'special place? Smile.
I liked the story...and I can see the renovation...
Matilda shi es!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading! ;)
Comment from frogbook
What an interesting turn this took. A very original and unique idea with a happy ending for a once haunted place. Great idea for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
What an interesting turn this took. A very original and unique idea with a happy ending for a once haunted place. Great idea for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Heidi M
This is a delightful story told from the unique perspective of the house that didn't fit in with its (her) family. Snooty mother, ailing father, and know-it-all sister were probably not as happy as Matilda now is.
Nicely written entry for the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
This is a delightful story told from the unique perspective of the house that didn't fit in with its (her) family. Snooty mother, ailing father, and know-it-all sister were probably not as happy as Matilda now is.
Nicely written entry for the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your kind review, Heidi.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Maria
= I love this story! The twist on her not wanting to be a haunted house and keep up family tradition was a great idea.
= Nicely told.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
Hi, Maria
= I love this story! The twist on her not wanting to be a haunted house and keep up family tradition was a great idea.
= Nicely told.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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I'm glad you enjoyed my story, Jax. Thanks so much for the six stars.
Comment from ScarBundy
This is a warm your heart, feel good kind of story. I kept waiting for the ghost to appear, but I love that you gave the house a personality of its own. In that way, it is different from any other haunted house story I've ever read. Such a clever idea!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
This is a warm your heart, feel good kind of story. I kept waiting for the ghost to appear, but I love that you gave the house a personality of its own. In that way, it is different from any other haunted house story I've ever read. Such a clever idea!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from misscookie
I have no more stars to give. This is the cutest story I have read in a long time.
I love how the children began to love the house which made the ghostly girl be come a happy child again.
Cookie
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
I have no more stars to give. This is the cutest story I have read in a long time.
I love how the children began to love the house which made the ghostly girl be come a happy child again.
Cookie
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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I'm glad you liked it, Cookie. That's more important than the stars. Have a nice day.