A Haunting Tale
A late Picture Challenge22 total reviews
Comment from damommy
An exceptionally good poem with a great story. You should have saved it for a contest.
I love your internal rhymes. I know that's hard to do, especially with long sentences. You did a good job with that.
The ending took me totally by surprise. It was just a dream after all. 8-)
[lots] of small talk
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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An exceptionally good poem with a great story. You should have saved it for a contest.
I love your internal rhymes. I know that's hard to do, especially with long sentences. You did a good job with that.
The ending took me totally by surprise. It was just a dream after all. 8-)
[lots] of small talk
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Hi damommy. Thanks for reading my poem for this challenge and for the spag pick up (lots has been corrected ) so thanks again. I never thought about the contest perhaps I may have to write another one for that LOL Glad you like this and Cheers so much for your review Christine
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Write another one this good and put it back for later. 8-)
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I will the challenge is on LOL Cheers Christine
Comment from royowen
Phew! I'm glad it was just a dream, one never knows when we venture bravely into places we're not supposed to visit. Excellent and vivid imagination Christine, difficult to write with lots of syllables in each line, but you've done admirably well, and quite a lengthy tale, should have saved it for a story in a poem contest, it would've done well! Cleverly written with internal rhyme. Excellent espones to the tha challenge, well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Phew! I'm glad it was just a dream, one never knows when we venture bravely into places we're not supposed to visit. Excellent and vivid imagination Christine, difficult to write with lots of syllables in each line, but you've done admirably well, and quite a lengthy tale, should have saved it for a story in a poem contest, it would've done well! Cleverly written with internal rhyme. Excellent espones to the tha challenge, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Thank you Roy I am glad to have your feedback. I am a tad late getting this out and now trying to catch the others, but have a day off so can' spend' a little time on here. I had fun with the internal rhymes and hoped it would work. As always appreciate your feedback have a great day ( Weather here in Victoria still wet and windy cnat wait for some good Spring Brrr) Cheers Christine. PS I never think about a story in a poem but will keep it in mind
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Most welcome
