A Haunting Tale
A late Picture Challenge22 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I really enjoyed your fun Halloween story/poem.
vivid imagery, great rhyming, fast pace, clever dialogue kept me
reading to the twist at the end.
Great picture for a wonderful presentation.
Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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I really enjoyed your fun Halloween story/poem.
vivid imagery, great rhyming, fast pace, clever dialogue kept me
reading to the twist at the end.
Great picture for a wonderful presentation.
Nancy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Hi Nancy Thanks for reading my poem for the picture challenge and I suppose it does also fit in with halloween so two birds with one stone LOL. Glad I kept you until the end I had fun writing this Many Cheers have a lovely day Christine😃
Comment from foxangie123
I think I found my fave in the competition Jax is having. This is different than the others and so neat to use the haunted side during Halloween time. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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I think I found my fave in the competition Jax is having. This is different than the others and so neat to use the haunted side during Halloween time. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Hi Foxangie123. What a marvelous comment for my picture challenge. I wanted to engage the reader in a mystery and it has seemed to also fit in with the Halloween time as well. So pleased you came through my door Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. I am glad it end up being just a dream. Somethings are not always what it seems.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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A very well-written poem and interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. I am glad it end up being just a dream. Somethings are not always what it seems.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Hi Sandra, I had fun with this one and so pleased you stopped by to read and review. I will try to be more on time with the next one They come around quickly Many Cheers Christine😄
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Hi Sandra, I had fun with this one and so pleased you stopped by to read and review. I will try to be more on time with the next one They come around quickly Many Cheers Christine😄
Comment from Heather Knight
What a great story! I had a lot of fun reading it. You put a lot of work into it.
I just spotted a small typo: check the spelling of divine.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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What a great story! I had a lot of fun reading it. You put a lot of work into it.
I just spotted a small typo: check the spelling of divine.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi MJ Thank you so very much for your fabulous reviewcand six stars I am so pleased thought it worthy and yes I did put a fair effort into this to ensure the rhyme and meter was right and had fun creating this tale. Yes I had spelt divine with and e so have corrected this now so Thanks for picking this up .I am thrilled with such a lovely rating Cheers my friend Christine 😃😀😄
Comment from pharp
Christine,
My dear you really nailed this challenge. You had me on edge from beginning to ending with this all telling, exciting and beautifully poem you have penned. Your are indeed a poet and an excellent story teller. Thanks for sharing my friend. Blessings........Portia
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Christine,
My dear you really nailed this challenge. You had me on edge from beginning to ending with this all telling, exciting and beautifully poem you have penned. Your are indeed a poet and an excellent story teller. Thanks for sharing my friend. Blessings........Portia
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi Portia, Thank you dear friend for having a read and I had fun with this one although a little long but I think it worked well and your review is worth the effort . It is amazing what comes up once you begin to write and that is the amazing element in poetry so I think that is what it is all about and what great poems many people post .Have a lovely day Portia Cheers Christine😃
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You have a wonderful day as well. Lots of love
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this!!! Reminds me of that strange movie, 'The Others'....I like how they all seemed so charming, then she became one with them. Just a dream....perhaps....you may have touched on some Halloween truth here, ha ha. Blessings....
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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I love this!!! Reminds me of that strange movie, 'The Others'....I like how they all seemed so charming, then she became one with them. Just a dream....perhaps....you may have touched on some Halloween truth here, ha ha. Blessings....
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi Irish Rain .Thanks for your review and great rating for my poem I didn't know what would transpire from my pen until I started writing this and it was fun to create this story. I must have a look at this movie you quote. Cheers again to you Christine😃
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Good movie....creepy!!! Nicole Kidman stars in it...
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I'll get it out, plus a blankie to hide under LOL Cheers C
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You'll like it!! Popcorn!!!!
Comment from Dean Kuch
"The(n) she said "sit, this is your place" A smile appeared upon her face." ... I believe your "n" went AWOL here, Chrissy, lol. Luckily I found it for you ...
I loved the bouncy rhythm of the following line:
"A piece of cake upon the plate, to be polite I quickly ate." ... Excellent rhyming and flow here. Nice melodic sounds of "p" abound!
This is exceptional, Chrissy. I loved everything about it, from the story of the mysterious ghostly "undead" family living inside that decrepit old house, to the story behind it.
Just had to give you a six for this amazing effort...
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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"The(n) she said "sit, this is your place" A smile appeared upon her face." ... I believe your "n" went AWOL here, Chrissy, lol. Luckily I found it for you ...
I loved the bouncy rhythm of the following line:
"A piece of cake upon the plate, to be polite I quickly ate." ... Excellent rhyming and flow here. Nice melodic sounds of "p" abound!
This is exceptional, Chrissy. I loved everything about it, from the story of the mysterious ghostly "undead" family living inside that decrepit old house, to the story behind it.
Just had to give you a six for this amazing effort...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi Dean, I am stoked with your praise for this and 6 Stars. Have fixed the n so thanks for that . I enjoyed this challenge and that it could bring the dark side of me out. LOL. By the way you are always welcome to my house for a cuppa but may have to bring your own tea bags though Ha Ha. You have made my day with your great review. Cheers my friend Christine😃👍😃
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I'm a coffee drinker, Chrissy, so I'll bring my Starbuck's.
You're more than welcome.
~Dean ;)
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Ha Ha So I am I but will occasionally have an English Breakfast tea.
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Coffee...that's the only hot drink for me, lol... :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Well thank heavens for that. Only a dream after all. This was a fine story well told in faultless iambic octameters with internal rhyme in each line and no end rhyme whatsoever. This has the ffect of keeping the overall presentation pleasantly compact.
Unfortunately there were several errors probably typos. I hope you will correct these to justify the five stars it otherwise deserves.
Typo here an "N" is missing:
"The[n] she said "sit, this is your place" .
Typo here the superfluous "to" needs removing:
"cannot go (to) back to life before"
The direct speech continues beyond this stanza into the next so the speech marks, like those at the end of a prose paragraph, should not be closed but should be opened at the beginning of the next stanza. Then closed at the end of the speech.
We are alive; seen with your eyes, do not believe those silly lies(")
["]Now drink your tea we've made for you, for visitors a special brew[."]
I sipped, the flavour was devine, sent tingles up and down my spine
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Well thank heavens for that. Only a dream after all. This was a fine story well told in faultless iambic octameters with internal rhyme in each line and no end rhyme whatsoever. This has the ffect of keeping the overall presentation pleasantly compact.
Unfortunately there were several errors probably typos. I hope you will correct these to justify the five stars it otherwise deserves.
Typo here an "N" is missing:
"The[n] she said "sit, this is your place" .
Typo here the superfluous "to" needs removing:
"cannot go (to) back to life before"
The direct speech continues beyond this stanza into the next so the speech marks, like those at the end of a prose paragraph, should not be closed but should be opened at the beginning of the next stanza. Then closed at the end of the speech.
We are alive; seen with your eyes, do not believe those silly lies(")
["]Now drink your tea we've made for you, for visitors a special brew[."]
I sipped, the flavour was devine, sent tingles up and down my spine
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi Pantygynt, Have made all correction I hope as your guideance. Thank you very much for your eagle eyes cast again over my work. sometimes one cant see these small errors despite reading ones work several times so it is great to have someone pick these up. And yes I should not have closed the talking marks off either hopefully the correction are all correct now. Thank you for your 5 star rating though I am pleased you thought it so despite my errors. I had fun with this one. Many Cheers Christine😃
Comment from aryr
This was very very entertaining. You provided great descriptive details that held the level of suspense to the very last line. It was a good twist and play on words, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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This was very very entertaining. You provided great descriptive details that held the level of suspense to the very last line. It was a good twist and play on words, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Hi Ary. Thanks for reading this poem and I am so pleased I entertained you and held you till the end. Yes I liked the end too Ha Ha. Well it had to be a happy one didn't it LOL. Cheers Christine😃
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You are very welcome Christine.
Comment from William Ross
Very good lots of great rhyme with good rhythm and great meter. reads and flows well a surprise ending on just being a dream. wonderfully done. have a great day.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Very good lots of great rhyme with good rhythm and great meter. reads and flows well a surprise ending on just being a dream. wonderfully done. have a great day.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Thanks William, it was a fun write glad you liked the ending You too have a great day Cheers Christine😃
