Comment from royowen

Excellent

From my meagre knowledge of Rondeau redoubles' Christine I think you've rather well. I think this is a skilled poem, nice and even flow, great rhyming, and choice of great language and a great theme, well done, my friend, you are a good scribe/writer, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016

Hi Roy, you are so nice to me and Make me feel like I am doing Ok on this site, I love a challenge and I am glad this worked, as you know I love and even meter and rhyme and this took a while to get it right but ( all day not much else got done LOL cheers my friend Christine😀

reply by royowen on 05-Oct-2016

I know the feeling, you're patience won out, well done, Christine

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

This is a lovely image and a lovely, challenging poem to go along with it. *smile* Sounds like you have faced your share of problems in the past and are tired of being put down. Now you're in charge! Go get 'em!

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Robyn, Actually quite the opposite I am very lucky to have such a good life And really no worries to be concerned about. But I just thought I would write from another perspective and this is what came out. ( A bit different from gardening in the rain LOL
thats more like me ) I am glad you like it though and Thank you for reading and your feedback ( A first try at a Rondeau double?) Cheers Christine 😃

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Great writing. I can identify with it. A year ago I had a heart attack. I was diagnosed with Congestive Heart Failure. I asked the doctor how long I had. He said, "You could drop dead at any time." Every day is a gift.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Thomas, Thank for your review for my poem and yes every day is a gift so one needs to focus on that and not on what might happen. keep well and keep weiting and reading Many Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Thomas, Thank for your review for my poem and yes every day is a gift so one needs to focus on that and not on what might happen. keep well and keep weiting and reading Many Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Thomas, Thank for your review for my poem and yes every day is a gift so one needs to focus on that and not on what might happen. keep well and keep weiting and reading Many Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I cannot give you feedback on the form of your poem as I know nothing about poetry, but I love the subject matter.
I also like how you repeat the line Today I'm really glad to be alive throughout the poem.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi MJ . I am very pleased you stopped by for a read anyway. This was a new style for me and I thought I would give it a go. I am also just learning about all the different types of poetry and the language and rules required ao I gice myself a challenge to do one I have never done before .So I appreciate your time and comments Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi MJ . I am very pleased you stopped by for a read anyway. This was a new style for me and I thought I would give it a go. I am also just learning about all the different types of poetry and the language and rules required ao I gice myself a challenge to do one I have never done before .So I appreciate your time and comments Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi MJ . I am very pleased you stopped by for a read anyway. This was a new style for me and I thought I would give it a go. I am also just learning about all the different types of poetry and the language and rules required ao I gice myself a challenge to do one I have never done before .So I appreciate your time and comments Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Rondeau Redouble to my limited knowledge. Whatever our circumstances, we also have to stay positive to keep going each day.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Sandra, Thanks for your feedback I hope this met requirements and yes one must keep going and take each day as it is given Cheers To you and have a lovely day Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Sandra, Thanks for your feedback I hope this met requirements and yes one must keep going and take each day as it is given Cheers To you and have a lovely day Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This rondeau redouble fills all the requirements of the form and you are permitted minor alteration to the repeated lines though I am not clear why you felt you needed these. For example "Today I am so glad..." would have been a perfect start to the poem, arguably better than the more colloquial "Today I'm really glad..." If it were me I would change both the first line and its repeat in S2 to be a carbon copy of the repeated poertion. Also "against the odds again I will survive" is poetically a better line than do survive and the future tense is perfectly apposite on both occasions.

I feel that the freedom to alter a repeat should only be used where it is absolutely necessary. But that is only an opinion. It is no big deal really.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Pantygynt. Once again I Thank you for your critique and suggestions to improve this and I have taken them up and changed the lines. I must admit I probably did not edit this as well as I should have before posting hence the errors were easy to spot when you highlighted them. This is my first try at this style and your 5 stars are much appreciated. Perhaps it's not so bad after all LOL. Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Pantygynt. Once again I Thank you for your critique and suggestions to improve this and I have taken them up and changed the lines. I must admit I probably did not edit this as well as I should have before posting hence the errors were easy to spot when you highlighted them. This is my first try at this style and your 5 stars are much appreciated. Perhaps it's not so bad after all LOL. Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Christine

= Such a well written Rondeau entry.
= Oft times most of us tend to forget to be thankful for the simplest things in life, which we take for granted.
= My folks used to day, "Well, I woke up this morning, it's a good day."
= Good luck in the contest, my friend.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Jackie. Thanks for casting your eyes over my rondeau. a first for me but I alway love a good challenge and I am learning so much from being here and I do so enjoy hearing from you so never a frown from me my friend always a smile Cheers for a good day Christine😊

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

I Liked your poem.
Nice imagery and flow, and the rhythm is great too. Thanks for sharing, best of luck with the competition and have a great day

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi oliver818. I am glad you liked my poem and Thanks for the lovely feedback and best of luck wishes. You too have a great day Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I think you have a fine contest entry in this rondeau redouble :)

- your meter sings along nicely
- fine rhymes
- nice opening stanza
- repeat lines mix well each time re-introduced

- I notice you slightly changed line 3 when re-using it in stanza 4:

"Against the odds, again I do survive"

"Against the odds, again I will survive" - I prefer this line. My personal pet peeve is the use of the word, "do". Some poets use it in a way that doesn't sound natural to me.

Best wishes in this contest!

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Joy, I do so thank you for your review and I have changed this line as suggested .I should have edited more closely and hope it reads well now. A new style for me to try and I am pleased you thought the meter and rhymes were OK. Thanks for your best wishes It is grwat to hear from you Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Joy, I do so thank you for your review and I have changed this line as suggested .I should have edited more closely and hope it reads well now. A new style for me to try and I am pleased you thought the meter and rhymes were OK. Thanks for your best wishes It is grwat to hear from you Cheers Christine😃

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was well done and from what I know about rondeau redoubles (which is not a whole lot) it does fit the format, it was an interesting topic. Readers should feel renewed in life after enjoying this. Great job, thanks Christine.

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Ayr. I thank you again for reading my work and for your feedback .I am still learning how to write the many styles of poetry and I hope this renews the readers thoughts on life Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016

Hi Ayr. I thank you again for reading my work and for your feedback .I am still learning how to write the many styles of poetry and I hope this renews the readers thoughts on life Cheers Christine😃

reply by aryr on 04-Oct-2016

You are very welcome Christine.