My Childish Views
Modified Rondeau Redouble28 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS! Take a bow Master Poet. You really threw yourself in a deep zone when you wrote this profound piece that flows fast pace speaking of worldly situations and changes needed. Filkedvwith lovely allusions and vivid images. Deep imaginative creations. lol liberty justice
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SIX STARS! Take a bow Master Poet. You really threw yourself in a deep zone when you wrote this profound piece that flows fast pace speaking of worldly situations and changes needed. Filkedvwith lovely allusions and vivid images. Deep imaginative creations. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from pattipac
Mikey, your poignant poem questioning if it is too late to conquer our fears that demons of greed, and profiteers will ultimately rule the earth gives the reviewer food for thought. Hopefully, the innocent child within, who symbolizes all that is sacred, will be set free to redeem us all!
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Mikey, your poignant poem questioning if it is too late to conquer our fears that demons of greed, and profiteers will ultimately rule the earth gives the reviewer food for thought. Hopefully, the innocent child within, who symbolizes all that is sacred, will be set free to redeem us all!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the picture reading you pen dear friend when the mountain crumbles bowing down to grace behind the curtains excellent pen pal very beautifully painted
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from the picture reading you pen dear friend when the mountain crumbles bowing down to grace behind the curtains excellent pen pal very beautifully painted
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from robyn corum
for mountains are just sand that time awaits.
Relentless seas cause beaches to appear;
the ocean understands a mountains fate ...
why can't we?
Wow. What wisdom in such a tiny (rather) poem. If only the people in power could hear or care. This was really amazing, Mikey... Loved it.
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for mountains are just sand that time awaits.
Relentless seas cause beaches to appear;
the ocean understands a mountains fate ...
why can't we?
Wow. What wisdom in such a tiny (rather) poem. If only the people in power could hear or care. This was really amazing, Mikey... Loved it.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a stunning poem in every way, Mav. Your rhymes and meter written to perfection and even more importantly you've written of the importance of keeping child like innocence in the face of abject greed and passive aggressive behaviour that seems to dominate Western thinking. It's almost impossible to not become jaded.
You've also added an additional layer of complexity to the Rondeau Redouble form creating what I would call the Rondeau Redouble Villanelle.
This is a masterpiece in both poetic architecture and beauty and spot on social commentary.
In short your poem is truly exceptional.
Ange
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This is a stunning poem in every way, Mav. Your rhymes and meter written to perfection and even more importantly you've written of the importance of keeping child like innocence in the face of abject greed and passive aggressive behaviour that seems to dominate Western thinking. It's almost impossible to not become jaded.
You've also added an additional layer of complexity to the Rondeau Redouble form creating what I would call the Rondeau Redouble Villanelle.
This is a masterpiece in both poetic architecture and beauty and spot on social commentary.
In short your poem is truly exceptional.
Ange
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent Rondeau Redouble. It does seem that mankind is reverting back to a more primitive state when it comes to
caring about things not pertaining to ourselves. Greed and selfish behavior seems to rule the day anymore. This is one of your best poems Michael. Unless we learn to think like a child we will not enter the gates of heaven. Well done. Nancy
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Excellent Rondeau Redouble. It does seem that mankind is reverting back to a more primitive state when it comes to
caring about things not pertaining to ourselves. Greed and selfish behavior seems to rule the day anymore. This is one of your best poems Michael. Unless we learn to think like a child we will not enter the gates of heaven. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from Ric Myworld
These few words of poem say more than a few mouth's full, maybe opening a lazy eye or two to the things we all should be paying more attention to. At the beach this summer I sat on a towel and cried, and I'm not the crying type. I spent three to four hours every day picking up beer tops and trash scattered and buried, while people cluttered faster than me and my crew of six could clean up. I guess humans are the only animals on the face of God's green earth who will shit in their own place. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
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These few words of poem say more than a few mouth's full, maybe opening a lazy eye or two to the things we all should be paying more attention to. At the beach this summer I sat on a towel and cried, and I'm not the crying type. I spent three to four hours every day picking up beer tops and trash scattered and buried, while people cluttered faster than me and my crew of six could clean up. I guess humans are the only animals on the face of God's green earth who will shit in their own place. Thanks for another fine poem. :-)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm delighted to see a poetry form I can sink my teeth into - big smiles!
I didn't even notice your meter and rhymes until I went back to check. Your story captured my attention that everything else just blended in real smooooothly. Well done.
I have questions about this poetry form that keep popping up each time I see somebody write a rondeau redouble. I see you have four line stanzas and then you add the repeated line. I always wondered about the last stanza doing that, but now you have done it with every stanza. I like your way a lot.
The last repeating phrase line is perfect. I LOVE what you did here. I always stress over that repeating phrase when I work in this form. Probably the main reason I don't write in this form much anymore. If not done well, it can wreck the whole poem. I'm great at being a poem-wrecker.
Nicely done!
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I'm delighted to see a poetry form I can sink my teeth into - big smiles!
I didn't even notice your meter and rhymes until I went back to check. Your story captured my attention that everything else just blended in real smooooothly. Well done.
I have questions about this poetry form that keep popping up each time I see somebody write a rondeau redouble. I see you have four line stanzas and then you add the repeated line. I always wondered about the last stanza doing that, but now you have done it with every stanza. I like your way a lot.
The last repeating phrase line is perfect. I LOVE what you did here. I always stress over that repeating phrase when I work in this form. Probably the main reason I don't write in this form much anymore. If not done well, it can wreck the whole poem. I'm great at being a poem-wrecker.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from robina1978
Lovely art5work that complements your poem perfectly. Thanks for explaining the traditional one and your altered one. Yours is so good, especially nowadays. Things really need to change.
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Lovely art5work that complements your poem perfectly. Thanks for explaining the traditional one and your altered one. Yours is so good, especially nowadays. Things really need to change.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What a deep and different side of you dear friend.
Very profound, very telling, very passionate.
Questions unanswered, unbelieved. There is an unused and misunderstood strength in all of us.
Excellent rhyme and flow
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What a deep and different side of you dear friend.
Very profound, very telling, very passionate.
Questions unanswered, unbelieved. There is an unused and misunderstood strength in all of us.
Excellent rhyme and flow
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
