Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Thanks for sharing.
Nature sure is a bountful provider of topic choices.
Two very interesting formats have been combined
effectively but still have a unique touch.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016

Thank you Shirley. It is what I find the most inspiration. Happy to see you back.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Tom,

This was a fun pair of very different poems -- to me, anyway. *smile* The first one was like a galloping pony that carried me away, and the second one was more like a big sassy cat sitting in a windowsill that I was allowed to watch for a bit. *smile* I'll understand if that didn't make sense to you. Not everything I say makes sense to ME, either! hahahaha

But I enjoyed!

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016

Thank you Robyn. It made perfect sense to me metaphorically. Loved the review. Thanks for making me smile.

reply by robyn corum on 29-Sep-2016

HUZZAH!

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

You've mastered some more poetic styles that I must learn about. I appreciate the notes. Wonderful flow of rhythm and rhymes. It is a focused poem and completely conveying a story. The visual imagery is nice. I like the alliteration throughout the poem and twist at the ending.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016

Thank you Alicia. Certain not givrpe one a try,

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Nice picture Tom. Thank you for telling us about the Pelican and his habitat. Talk about taking the food out of your mouth. Darn Seagulls have they no manners. Thanks for the nature talk. Nancy

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thank you Nancy. Yeah, those seagulls can be a nuisance.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nicely done on this about the pelican, I have never heard or seen this form or style before. I like how it's done. very well done I would say. Thanks for the share and have a wonderful day

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thank you William. Always glad to entertain and enlighten.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I did notice the difference between the two forms, Tom. A very distinct difference.
The Alouette reads almost like a limerick but without the bawdiness that often accompanies them. While the Katauta is more concise and to the point--a lot like a haiku--an observation of a specific point and time. Splendid alliteration in yours as well.
Very nice work...
~Dean

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016

Thank you Dean for such a fine review and style assessment,

reply by Dean Kuch on 27-Sep-2016

My pleasure, Tom.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your authors notes almost as much as your poem, the artwork that you chose enhances your poem. Very well written.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016

Thank you DonandVicki, I am pleased that you not only the poem, but the notes, as well as the photograph, as I like to give some background, and consider myself a photographer as well as a poet.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very clever combination of the Alouette and the Katauta to produce this wonderful poem about the Pelicans. It seems you enjoy your adventures and missions finding something to photograph. Excellent photo.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016

Thank you Sandra. Yes, I really do.

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Exceptional

Treischel: your poetry is always so amazing to go with your photos. I like the research comments and your style of poem so we can try one. This looks simple. I think you are like the Master of chopsticks helping a youth. "You smile, it's easy, try this." You smile at us with a wink!

I grew up in Fargo, North Dakota. We went to Detroit Lakes and Pelican Rapids. We loved the lakes and the birds. They scoop up fish and the water drains out. God makes amazing birds!

The debates will be good tonight. I liked walking on Lake of the Isles and watching the sun set and the loons swim. Enjoy the autumn season shooting photos! God bless! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016

Thank you for that great review, and, of course those stars so special. My daughter is up at Detroit lakes living now.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

It is interesting how different, despite the similarity of line lenghth the two styles are yet they compliment each other very well. Better luck with the cranes next time by the sound of it. Thanks also for the excellent note on the pelican's feeding habits. I had no idea that the pouch was used as a colander.

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 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016

Thank you Pantygynt, yes, they can't swallow all that water.