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Dreams of Ben

A tale of young love.

21 total reviews 
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem of very young and innocent love. A time when it still means a lot for a girl when he carries her books from school. It is not about how he looks or how fat he is. You just like him and enjoy good times together.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
    Thank you Sandra for reaading and reviewing. Best regards Linda.
Comment from crybry67
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Very nicely done! Your poem flows easily. I liked your use of rhyme, it had great rhythm as well. My favorite part is ' but I tell them all quite smugly that I like him just like that'.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
    Thank you for reading. Best regards Linda.
Comment from rjuselius
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Haha lol. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear linda! I like the down to earth feel to it . And the question in the end is up to the gods.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
    Thank you Rebekka for your kind kind review. Best wishes Linda.
Comment from nancyjam
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Ahh, young love. This is a sweet story
of first love or infatuation.
Great rhyming and strong
meter.
I enjoyed the stanza about writing his name in homework
books - didn't we all do this? Brought back memories.
Mine was "Tommy"
Nancy

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
    Thankr you for your kind review. Mine was Tony, but he liked someone else. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Nika2016
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Cute poem ... and girls
are like this...his name
all over everything..
Location... location...location limits
choices ..some settle ..
Nice work

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
    Yes girls are exactly like this, thanks for reading. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Kooky Clown
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I thought that this was delightful and charming and I just love it what a beautiful poem or rhyme I am going to read it again as i so enjoyed it the first time I read it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
    Thanks Kooky Clown for you lovely comments. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Pantygynt
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Oh dear! That rules me out. I am in my second childhood and have started inserting a decimal point between the two figures. So at 7.6 its a case of "Hands off me cradle snatcher!"

Seriously though I think you have transmogrified yourself back a few years and got nicely into the part of a ten year old. Or should that be nine?

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
    I remember being in love at ten. Unfortunately he didn't feel the same. Boys are so unromantic at that age. Thanks for reading. Best regards Linda.
reply by Pantygynt on 25-Sep-2016
    No, you are right we are slow developers I was at least 14 before i felt drawn to those strange creatures called girls.
Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Linda, What a delightful poem amd I thnk it will for many bring back some memories of those school day crushes. this reads nicely but I just had 2 lines that I felt just was a little out of rhythm and maybe consider the following 'Asked me out last night ' Could read
' Just asked me out last night'
and He has done all this week could be He's done so all this week' Just my suggestions but feel free to ignore them I liked it anyway Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
    Thanks Christine for your helpful comments. glad you enjoyed my poem. Best regards Linda.
Comment from Irish Rain
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This is sweet. 'I like him like that,' my favorite line, among many. So refreshing to come upon something like this every now and then, just wonderful, blessings...

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
    Thank you for your lovely comments. I enjoyed writing this poem. Best regards Linda.
Comment from BeasPeas
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Very nice rhyming in this tale of young love. It doesn't matter
what anyone else thinks when we fall for someone special. These opening lines are so true of the excitement of potential love:
"Seven o'clock Saturday morning
And I've been conscious since first light
Cos the boy I've been adoring
Asked me out last night."
Marilyn

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
    Thank you for Marilyn for this kind review. Best regards Linda.