Nature's Angst
Cinquain19 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, how true is this? We just keep dumping it into the rivers and oceans, sending it up through smokestacks. As though the Earth itself is disposable. Great entry, blessings....
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Well, how true is this? We just keep dumping it into the rivers and oceans, sending it up through smokestacks. As though the Earth itself is disposable. Great entry, blessings....
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from sandy montgomery
The art work was well chosen. I like your poem though I'm not in love with your first line but it just caught me off guard. Once I read it the line of course is perfectly acceptable. Good imagery.. I like the earthy tone of this work. Nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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The art work was well chosen. I like your poem though I'm not in love with your first line but it just caught me off guard. Once I read it the line of course is perfectly acceptable. Good imagery.. I like the earthy tone of this work. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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great review zanya
Comment from Pantygynt
Having lived for two years in the shadow of BP Refinery's flame in Little Aden back in the nineteen sixties I have never understood why this gaseous material has to be burnt off to no good purpose. I could surely be harnessed to creat some form of needed energy but no, they'd rather do it this way. Congratulations on highlighting this in your excellent cinquain.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Having lived for two years in the shadow of BP Refinery's flame in Little Aden back in the nineteen sixties I have never understood why this gaseous material has to be burnt off to no good purpose. I could surely be harnessed to creat some form of needed energy but no, they'd rather do it this way. Congratulations on highlighting this in your excellent cinquain.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thanks for a great review -zanya
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written cinquain poem. I started coughing when I see this picture, how must mother nature struggle to breathe in this circustances?
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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A very well-written cinquain poem. I started coughing when I see this picture, how must mother nature struggle to breathe in this circustances?
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Alex Rosel
A nice entry for the Cinquain on Nature contest. And, of course, it's very topical. I know poetry often plays fast and loose with grammar, but I do have a concern for your tense consistences.
Since you don't punctuate homo sapiens with the possessive I take this as the plural form. (You do punctuate Mother Nature's with the possessive.) Therefore, shouldn't it be hearts of stone?
Apart from that, I enjoyed reading this. Good luck with the competition :-)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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A nice entry for the Cinquain on Nature contest. And, of course, it's very topical. I know poetry often plays fast and loose with grammar, but I do have a concern for your tense consistences.
Since you don't punctuate homo sapiens with the possessive I take this as the plural form. (You do punctuate Mother Nature's with the possessive.) Therefore, shouldn't it be hearts of stone?
Apart from that, I enjoyed reading this. Good luck with the competition :-)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading and with attention !zanya
Comment from tfawcus
It seems that hominoids are not as sapient as their names suggest. Their wholescale destruction of habitat must eventually lead to their extinction, just as it is currently leading to the extinction of so many other species. Your poem says it well.
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It seems that hominoids are not as sapient as their names suggest. Their wholescale destruction of habitat must eventually lead to their extinction, just as it is currently leading to the extinction of so many other species. Your poem says it well.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from KyColonel Randal
This five-line Cinquain has a nature theme and two syllables for the first line, four syllables in the second line, six syllables in the third line, eight syllables in the fourth line, and two syllables in the last line. This poem should meet the requirements set forth in the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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This five-line Cinquain has a nature theme and two syllables for the first line, four syllables in the second line, six syllables in the third line, eight syllables in the fourth line, and two syllables in the last line. This poem should meet the requirements set forth in the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
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thanks for reading zanya
Comment from buschejm
Nice poem. It fits the Cinquain contest requirements with 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllable requirements. If you think about the words you wrote it conjures up a better picture of pollution than the picture. If you're hearts not of stone it makes you think about the sad state of affairs with our environment. Thanks for the words.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Nice poem. It fits the Cinquain contest requirements with 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllable requirements. If you think about the words you wrote it conjures up a better picture of pollution than the picture. If you're hearts not of stone it makes you think about the sad state of affairs with our environment. Thanks for the words.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thanks again for 6 twinkling stars - an honour zanya
Comment from GabbyLew
I like this poem. I can appreciate the structure, the sound of the words used, the rhythm of the stressed and unstressed syllables.
One thing to consider, for "Homo Sapiens heart", technically an apostrophe should be present in "Sapiens" or "heart" should be pluralized. Just a thought
Thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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I like this poem. I can appreciate the structure, the sound of the words used, the rhythm of the stressed and unstressed syllables.
One thing to consider, for "Homo Sapiens heart", technically an apostrophe should be present in "Sapiens" or "heart" should be pluralized. Just a thought
Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Yes I thought about that spelling and went searching for an answer and found an answer online which shows that no apostrophe is needed - can one believe what one reads on line !zanya
