To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Grassroots"Poems by Michael
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Comment from CEO2020
Your title caught my attention. Your presentation held it. Your poem made it worth while reading. I believe you captured the mind of an addict with insight to the situations and feelings that lead to addiction. That is what I saw in the poem.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Your title caught my attention. Your presentation held it. Your poem made it worth while reading. I believe you captured the mind of an addict with insight to the situations and feelings that lead to addiction. That is what I saw in the poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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why thank you...you're too kind....-smile-
glad you enjoyed this with me. love Michael
Comment from Ulla
I've tried hard to review you, and many times at that, but more often than not I haven't understood a thing you were trying to say, so I skipped. But this time I do get something out of it. I suppose it's a question of getting used to your style. I quite liked this. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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I've tried hard to review you, and many times at that, but more often than not I haven't understood a thing you were trying to say, so I skipped. But this time I do get something out of it. I suppose it's a question of getting used to your style. I quite liked this. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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thanks....?
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem, I really enjoyed it's imagery, flow and Rythm. I especially enjoyed the ending but the whole thing was great. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Nice poem, I really enjoyed it's imagery, flow and Rythm. I especially enjoyed the ending but the whole thing was great. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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well alright...-smile-...good to hear...have a great night. love michael
Comment from frierajac
Sounds like your off at a gallop. Or maybe the bandana is choking you as you
venture out... and the oxygen is rarified. I would like to see "misanthrope", although I know the charm of
the threat inherent in this is due to its not conforming to rhyme, just prosody
or say a certain beat.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Sounds like your off at a gallop. Or maybe the bandana is choking you as you
venture out... and the oxygen is rarified. I would like to see "misanthrope", although I know the charm of
the threat inherent in this is due to its not conforming to rhyme, just prosody
or say a certain beat.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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it does...? hm...you mean like thunder...manly right...?
yea yea Clint Eastwood in in...Josey Wales...yea man I'm with ya now. wha...you see...now why'd you have to go and say that say that.... maam....take it back...no now take it back...I dont need your oxygen... get my drift. Oh Oh you're one of them "Rhymers" I'll bet you count syllables in spare time too dont ya....well I guess we all get our kicks where we can. Honestly ...myself...I never read anything counting syllables...you know normally...nor do I do that -handtwirl-...thing you do. with the bum bumps and yada yadas until you want to jump off a bridge....aha...so thankfully for God sake and sanity some of us maam...naturally born musically inclined...okay...-smile-...so relax....love Michael
Comment from Bollie
Your poetry is so interesting because you write like no one else here. Most of your poems that I've read are very profound and beautiful; However this poem, despite it's incredible word usage is a series of abstract lines to me. I can't mentally connect one stanza to the next, there like a collection of short poems.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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Your poetry is so interesting because you write like no one else here. Most of your poems that I've read are very profound and beautiful; However this poem, despite it's incredible word usage is a series of abstract lines to me. I can't mentally connect one stanza to the next, there like a collection of short poems.
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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so what do you think...i'm going to change it to suit you...?
I assure you this is one of the best poems I've ever written. and that I lose respect for folk who dirty my welcome mat. I would not this to you...come to your place to down grade...please pass my next time. good evening-
Comment from Kingsland
This poem uses words in an unusual way to get to its point, but I liked that. Being different is a good thing, as this is not a cookie cutter poem. It is very original and well-written. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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This poem uses words in an unusual way to get to its point, but I liked that. Being different is a good thing, as this is not a cookie cutter poem. It is very original and well-written. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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hey John...-smile-
thanks man....no cookie cutter aint me. Appreciate you stopping by this morning. i'm late gotta run. love michael
Comment from RGstar
I didn't find this easy to navigate as your last two, so had to work harder to see the connection, but what I did see was the hard hitting bullets of words depicting the area of concentration. The family with a cowboy tag which sits out the words hard and true in the direction of its target. Almost as in song itself, the words are familiar with the style and genre of that western beat.
Once again, if one works hard, your vision is magic.
have a good day, my friend.
RGstar
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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I didn't find this easy to navigate as your last two, so had to work harder to see the connection, but what I did see was the hard hitting bullets of words depicting the area of concentration. The family with a cowboy tag which sits out the words hard and true in the direction of its target. Almost as in song itself, the words are familiar with the style and genre of that western beat.
Once again, if one works hard, your vision is magic.
have a good day, my friend.
RGstar
Comment Written 20-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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Hey Star...-smile-
yea...this is about a lil' more...complicated and yet simply truth. its about the girl in picture, heaven framed. its about a love unending, a priceless pearl dependable. ah you will always love your child Roy...no matter what. I love what I hold most dear, close to chest carried heartbeat...and I've never allowed "others" to make me feel ashamed of myself for it. why would I...? ah thank you Bro...always my pleasure to hear from you. love Michael
Comment from Slythytove2
I don't usually involve accompanying graphics and computer extras which are becoming more and more popular. I feel that this is a site for the use of words not computers. But I did listen to your offering. It did not add or detract from what you wrote which was excellent again. I'm getting to like your stuff, now that I understand how you're talking a little better. From your picture one might think you were fresh out of Choate but you're an older "stoner" aren't you? As per your first and last stanzas.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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I don't usually involve accompanying graphics and computer extras which are becoming more and more popular. I feel that this is a site for the use of words not computers. But I did listen to your offering. It did not add or detract from what you wrote which was excellent again. I'm getting to like your stuff, now that I understand how you're talking a little better. From your picture one might think you were fresh out of Choate but you're an older "stoner" aren't you? As per your first and last stanzas.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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well...I was kinda born here...I mean my um intellect had limited experience to "others" who were in love with words made beautiful...even more...words arranged to sip as music that made the reader feel beautiful long after read. I grew reading the best I'd ever read...I wasn't the first to use music and image to dress expression more eloquent...but it impressed me...and encouraged a broader depth a ah eagerness to reach farther than I thought before...why...I've thought about it. I think when I first came there were "some" who blinded me with brilliance...ah Jesus I cant remember.."Blue"...something blue...he's from Scotland...I found him on accident the other day...but man...-headshake-...that dude can teach....the poem I read stopped me in my tracks with understanding theres way more mountain to climb. anyway...I'm sorry I dont have his full name...but you find him...you'll know it...and look at his reviews...written by the best...impressed. I suppose the reason why was to impress who impressed me. its a confirmation of sorts I would imagine. anyway...ha...-headtilt-...stoner...? ahh well there were days when Ozzy was even afraid of me...aha...no...I had a love affair with prescription heaven for a while....and I smoke an occasional doobie....but I've long since left the needle and spoon to the more sophisticated with control...I started mainlining that shit straight to forehead...-headshake-...had to let it go. ahhha...I was forty some years old in that picture...just graduated high school....the whole world was my oyster...I dont know how to change to be honest with you, I didn't put that one on....I have dozens of poems I've recorded also...but I'm only half way there. Why do you want to see me Sly...whats going on there man...aha...ah well I will eventually....I'm pretty sure I'm still perfect...haha...thanks man. love Michael-
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I'd love to see you sometime if you ever get down Florida way. You and whom ever have a free night in Stuart if you're heading south or taking someone to Orlando and aren't into swimming there. No all I wanted to relate was that I have gone from not caring for your work to actually appreciating it when you make a post. I don't do that often, but your presentations were unique and intrigued me.Why can't I understand what this guy is saying?... Then I started breaking the sections up into what I called "flash cards" which was a syncranistic approach and it worked. Well it worked on that one. Lately, like this cowboy rodeo one"Grassroots" I realized there was even another level. These are the things this old and has been mind stays up nights working on. Thanks man-
your bud- Chuck
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pleased to meet you Chuck...and thanks for the invite....if I ever get back to me...maybe one day. -smile-...have a great night-
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Hey I think a lot of the best ideas come by getting back to grassroots. I'm someone who does not like a bunker mentality and does not like groupthink. Your poem delivers an interesting message. The words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork and music is tops. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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Hey I think a lot of the best ideas come by getting back to grassroots. I'm someone who does not like a bunker mentality and does not like groupthink. Your poem delivers an interesting message. The words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork and music is tops. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 19-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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hm....thanks Bill...I didn't realize grassroots was one word....its been a while since I've been home. but I have now reestablished the bond betwixt the two thanks to you....love Michael
Comment from Dawn Munro
"...pregnant weight skips my stone..." Got it all but this, Mike.
Brilliant, as usual, and I sure hope it's nowhere close to you or anyone you love.
Very moving - tragic, really. Blessings.
Dawn
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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"...pregnant weight skips my stone..." Got it all but this, Mike.
Brilliant, as usual, and I sure hope it's nowhere close to you or anyone you love.
Very moving - tragic, really. Blessings.
Dawn
Comment Written 19-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
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monkey on my back...that lives and breathes alive. out weighing all I compare against....pregnant skips my stone deep water drink. um tragic...hm...only if prayers aren't answered, wishes dont breathe...and God ordained isn't meant to be. tragic...if Jesus Christ didn't show us transformed life....but He did...still does. and I have faith I'm loved enough. ...-smile-...thanks Dawn. love Michael
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Oh Michael, thank you - your reply is a poem itself...very beautiful!
