Cool Travels
Last word each line rhymes.3 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi tollyfaye,
You have a great idea here for the 2-10-2 contest. Your title "Cool Travels" is emphasized by the cool way in which you have presented each line ... different fonts, different colours ... cool! :) I like your play on words with "hair bands" ... clever. The end of each line rhymes ... hip/lip/trip.
I count 11 syllables in your second line. If you remove "thy" you'll have 10 syllables. Hopefully not to late to change it. Good luck in the contest!
Connie
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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Hi tollyfaye,
You have a great idea here for the 2-10-2 contest. Your title "Cool Travels" is emphasized by the cool way in which you have presented each line ... different fonts, different colours ... cool! :) I like your play on words with "hair bands" ... clever. The end of each line rhymes ... hip/lip/trip.
I count 11 syllables in your second line. If you remove "thy" you'll have 10 syllables. Hopefully not to late to change it. Good luck in the contest!
Connie
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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oops if I messed up the syllables. Thanks for telling me, I need to check it. I kept counting coffee as only one. I think I need to drink more of it.
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LOL ... it happens to us all from time to time. :)
Comment from Heidi M
Love it! Your rhymes are great, they make sense, and are pertinent to the topic of Cool Travels. The changes in font, color, and size grab the reader's attention and make it that much more interesting and pleasing to look at.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Love it! Your rhymes are great, they make sense, and are pertinent to the topic of Cool Travels. The changes in font, color, and size grab the reader's attention and make it that much more interesting and pleasing to look at.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Thank you. I am new here and it says to include a picture, but I just wanted it to be about words. So I am very glad you liked it!
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Welcome to FS! Glad you are here!
Comment from Alex Rosel
Obviously a bit of fun. And there's nothing wrong with that, reading (and writing) should be about entertainment. Well, I enjoyed reading this. You brightened my day. Thank you!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Obviously a bit of fun. And there's nothing wrong with that, reading (and writing) should be about entertainment. Well, I enjoyed reading this. You brightened my day. Thank you!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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well, it is too hard to be deep and meaningful all the time! Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed it.
