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against a perfect blue sky

a tanka

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Comment from frogbook
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This is very powerful with these few words. You have captured the horror of the moment and the normalicy of the day prior to that.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review. I remember how incredibly blue the sky was that morning. I was in my cabin in the woods, no electricity and listening to this tragic news on the little battery radio., judetser
Comment from sandy montgomery
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I liked this entry for its message conveyed in so few words. Powerful in its simplicity. I remember that perfect blue sky.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review sandy. Yes, the sky was so beautifully blue that morning. I was alone in my cabin in the vermont woods and only had a radio. Cheers, j
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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I still remember what I was doing when the towers were hit. I think a lot of people will remember. I love Japanese poetry and I am enjoying your succinct poems. Good job!

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review. I will always remember how bright blue the sky was that morning. With the illustration, I wanted it to be just like that day. Something beautiful shaken by horror. Cheers, j
Comment from CammyCards
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Very good expression of what the world felt watching and afterwards for many year, as the recent 15 year anniversary was celebrated. Your choice of words accurately describes the images that still turn my stomach and wrench the heart. Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your nice work.
CammyCards

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
    Thanks for that perfect picture, many reviewers have said how apt it was bacause then the poem was so shocking, just like that day.I just remember the beautiful blue sky that morning, not realizing what lay ahead. j
Comment from mbagby23
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A every loving poem in memory of a day many will not forget. I still remember what and where I was on that day. Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review. I was at my cabin in the woods with only a little radio. I thought America was under attack.I always remember how brilliantly blue the sky was that morning. America changed forever on that day, cheers, j
Comment from Kelly2
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That was very unexpected, based on the beautiful white flowers against a blue sky.
Then again, what happened 15 years ago was just as unexpected. I believe your choice of artwork is very clever.

Your words seem carefully chosen and work very well.

Great work. Good luck!

Kelly

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review. I will always remember how blue the sky was that day and then those rolling grey clouds. Thanks for the insightful review. America changed that day. Cheers, j
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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This is a great presentation--love the image, the format--good syllable count, the colors, & your awesome message. Your last line sums it up well.

Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
    Thanks for the review. I will always remember how blue the sky wason that day. I was at my cabin in the woods of Vermont and had only my radio. I heard about the first crash and figured it was just a small plane, then I heard the second one and then I got scared. My friend, bless, came to get me because she knew that I was alone. America's way of life changed on that single day. Cheers, j