On The Backroad
Perhaps, a better way to go52 total reviews
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I wish I had a six left to give. This is such a fantastic poem. I love it. It is heartwarming advice in poetic form. You have created a lovely piece here that we all should heed and learn from. Your rhyme and flow is all there. It is perfection!
Great job. Absolutely!
Wendy
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I wish I had a six left to give. This is such a fantastic poem. I love it. It is heartwarming advice in poetic form. You have created a lovely piece here that we all should heed and learn from. Your rhyme and flow is all there. It is perfection!
Great job. Absolutely!
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from ElPoetry001
You have drawn an irresistible road map that introduces all to Nature.
If one never travels this path, life becomes a race to become financially secure; then to travel and find Nature.
A costly mistake, if one is too lame to hike the paths and walk through a shallow stream.
Thanks for the reminder.
As the philosopher says: "... too soon old too late smart."
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You have drawn an irresistible road map that introduces all to Nature.
If one never travels this path, life becomes a race to become financially secure; then to travel and find Nature.
A costly mistake, if one is too lame to hike the paths and walk through a shallow stream.
Thanks for the reminder.
As the philosopher says: "... too soon old too late smart."
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from dragonpoet
These abab quatrains remind us the volunteering and helping other helps us make their and our lives better.
I think you can erase the Y between the first and second stanzas.
Keep writing. Happy New Year.
dp
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These abab quatrains remind us the volunteering and helping other helps us make their and our lives better.
I think you can erase the Y between the first and second stanzas.
Keep writing. Happy New Year.
dp
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
You would think so wouldn't you, Jay?
I mean concerning there being a more fulfilling way to live one's life, as you stated in your authors notes.
Responding to those who review your poetry might be a good place to start.
Have a Happy New Year...
~Dean
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You would think so wouldn't you, Jay?
I mean concerning there being a more fulfilling way to live one's life, as you stated in your authors notes.
Responding to those who review your poetry might be a good place to start.
Have a Happy New Year...
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
Jaybird, this wisdom is from a life well lived I believe.
Thank you for it...I get more joy from the giving than the getting...serving each other in love is my motto..I teach children and our theme is Do unto others as you want them to do to you...it makes each child stop and think.
God bless.
Happy New Year
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Jaybird, this wisdom is from a life well lived I believe.
Thank you for it...I get more joy from the giving than the getting...serving each other in love is my motto..I teach children and our theme is Do unto others as you want them to do to you...it makes each child stop and think.
God bless.
Happy New Year
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from rjuselius
this is an extremely profound piece of poetry dear jaybird! The paths we take reveal how our lives will shake. indeed if I had six stars left I would certainly give you one.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
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this is an extremely profound piece of poetry dear jaybird! The paths we take reveal how our lives will shake. indeed if I had six stars left I would certainly give you one.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from Ogden
I guess you have a point there, especially for folks with no particular ambition. If you don't care about the destination, why try to get there so fast?
However, it cannot be denied that scenic roads tend to be more pleasant, and can be more rewarding than time saved on the freeway. Many writers and philosophers like Henry Thoreau, at Walden Pond, and whoever wrote "Stop and Smell the Roses," have agreed with you, but got there first.
On the other hand, think of all the altruistic deeds you admire, that "successful," driven people of good will, are capable of performing.
But, I think it's possible that your way might be workable for a newbie - on a day-to-day basis.
Happy New Year, and many more, Jay!
Don
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I guess you have a point there, especially for folks with no particular ambition. If you don't care about the destination, why try to get there so fast?
However, it cannot be denied that scenic roads tend to be more pleasant, and can be more rewarding than time saved on the freeway. Many writers and philosophers like Henry Thoreau, at Walden Pond, and whoever wrote "Stop and Smell the Roses," have agreed with you, but got there first.
On the other hand, think of all the altruistic deeds you admire, that "successful," driven people of good will, are capable of performing.
But, I think it's possible that your way might be workable for a newbie - on a day-to-day basis.
Happy New Year, and many more, Jay!
Don
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi JayBird1. Good advice from your pom and maybe if we all travelled the backroads life would be alot simpler Your meter and rhyme ensured this to be good read. Cheers Christine
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Hi JayBird1. Good advice from your pom and maybe if we all travelled the backroads life would be alot simpler Your meter and rhyme ensured this to be good read. Cheers Christine
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
Comment from Kay Crown
There is depth and wisdom in this poem which is very pleasant on the ears and has a delightful cadence and rhythm. The poem itself, has an atmosphere of journeys and travel. My favorite lines are:
But, life should never be a race,
place your ego back in bed.
I like the connotations hidden in the poem, that leading a quiet life without seeking honor, ultimately pays off.
Somehow this poem gives validation to those among us who are more introvert in nature.
A great poem and thanks for sharing, Jaybird1.
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There is depth and wisdom in this poem which is very pleasant on the ears and has a delightful cadence and rhythm. The poem itself, has an atmosphere of journeys and travel. My favorite lines are:
But, life should never be a race,
place your ego back in bed.
I like the connotations hidden in the poem, that leading a quiet life without seeking honor, ultimately pays off.
Somehow this poem gives validation to those among us who are more introvert in nature.
A great poem and thanks for sharing, Jaybird1.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2018
Comment from LIJ Red
I left the main road, dropped out of the race, and in the end it made little difference except I would probably never have reached 74, which seems to be a trifle...people race, automatically, I think. Even when trying to catch a fish. Sports breed this foolishness...excellent poem. Good advice.
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I left the main road, dropped out of the race, and in the end it made little difference except I would probably never have reached 74, which seems to be a trifle...people race, automatically, I think. Even when trying to catch a fish. Sports breed this foolishness...excellent poem. Good advice.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2018
