Comment from Felicity moon

Excellent

I really liked this it touched me I think it brought out some truth into what your saying well for me anyway i want to write like that i cant wait to start

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

Swing your blade cutting precise into the darkness over the land. Laborers are few and battles are fierce. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.

Comment from SmilingTurtle

Excellent

I felt as if I was reading the Bible on fast forwarded, but with the readers requests in mind. I enjoyed the reversal of the parts of speech. Good poem.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

I always wondered about these items I wrote whether they were poens. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.

Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello again
These are so 'energetic': they need to be chanted. Such a rhythm to them. "plenty free parks" is a bit mundane, but the rest is righteous.
I am sure you inspire others.
I wish you well with your writing.
Cheers
phill

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

I will hold that thought of free parks more intended as a geature of welcome. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.

Comment from Bruno Thomas

Excellent

I really like this. You ask God to give you something special. It is the reveal that makes it. I enjoyed the line blazing is my flame to aid right deeds. Good write, Cheers Brian

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018

Glad aspects of this write was found appealing to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.

Comment from johnwilson

Good

I found this hard to read although the significance came through at the end. Perhaps try to reread it aloud to yourself. I know that's when I can spot things that are hard to understand. Your particular use of "I" and "to be" in the middle of lines made it harder to read.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018

Thanks for the heads up. I do suffer with my writes using comments as yours to make revision for a smoother read. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed views.

Comment from Shanbreen

Excellent

This poem is written in a manner that is a bit hard for me to understand. But the eventual meaning does filter through once your comments are read. I must say, however, that as a long free-style poem it does have a good flow, and for that alone, you deserve 5 stars.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018

I do have problem in my expressions, grammar and probably other aspects in my works. This is why statements like your give me new aspects to view about them. Glad at least the flow accredited an appealing response. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.

Comment from Old Soldier

Excellent

Ok I was a bit confused but read it 2x more and some of the other reviews. I get it. So keep writing and reading and reviewing.
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 Comment Written 26-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018

No there seems to be a slight bridge gap between what I think is.stated and its actual . I will take a closer view of this write for improvement to aid. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks the aspects of living that evil turns back righteousness and bad aspects against good unfold a challenge to God and God's reality is evidently common to all, ever, everywhere; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2018

Things in the head not making apparently the paper correctly. I will have to reviews certain parts to see if adjustments might better its conveyance. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Your title and artwork selection establish the mood for your poem well. I admired your tercets plus random rhymes and your comparing yourself to a "bird" and a "lamp". Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Glad this write was pleasing in some aspects. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.

Comment from apky

Excellent

This is just what I needed to get my weekend going.

I love reading poems like this, poems that give me so much and have meaning
for me to take away with me, have and keep.

So thaks for a wonder poem poem like yours.

Thanks you for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Glad features in this write was found appealing to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts about this work.