Unspeakable
We will never forget what happened on 9/115 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an excellent entry for the Naani contest and I wish you much luck in it with this poem. We will all remember that day and pray that we get through Sunday without another heartache. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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This is an excellent entry for the Naani contest and I wish you much luck in it with this poem. We will all remember that day and pray that we get through Sunday without another heartache. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Many thanks for the kind comments.
Comment from RodG
Your naani captures the essence of that horrible moment when the towers fell.
The image of "flesh and glass colliding" is graphic and provocative.
My daughter was attending NYU at the time and she says what she recalls most is the "shroud of dust" that lingered for days. Very well done in only 4 lines.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Your naani captures the essence of that horrible moment when the towers fell.
The image of "flesh and glass colliding" is graphic and provocative.
My daughter was attending NYU at the time and she says what she recalls most is the "shroud of dust" that lingered for days. Very well done in only 4 lines.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your sentiments.
Comment from Cynthia1
You have treated this topic with dignity and quiet remembrance. I think your line, "creating a shroud of dust" is especially effective. The color you have chosen for the background is very appropriate. All requirements for the naani contest seem to have been met. Good luck in the contest.
Cynthia1
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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You have treated this topic with dignity and quiet remembrance. I think your line, "creating a shroud of dust" is especially effective. The color you have chosen for the background is very appropriate. All requirements for the naani contest seem to have been met. Good luck in the contest.
Cynthia1
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for the great review!
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on the naani of the falling of the twin towers, I had a cousin die when those towers fell he worked in the first tower that went down. good luck on this and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Nicely done on the naani of the falling of the twin towers, I had a cousin die when those towers fell he worked in the first tower that went down. good luck on this and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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So sorry for the loss of your cousin. It was a horrific tragedy. I appreciate your kind review. Thank you.
Comment from tfawcus
A graphic reminder of this great tragedy. I was a bit fazed by the change in tense between lines one and two. Perhaps 'as two towers fall' and 'the world mourns' might be worth considering for consistency throughout the poem. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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A graphic reminder of this great tragedy. I was a bit fazed by the change in tense between lines one and two. Perhaps 'as two towers fall' and 'the world mourns' might be worth considering for consistency throughout the poem. Just a thought.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Thanks for the helpful suggestions!
