Reality
Aging 7-7-723 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
I think many people out there long for their youthful appearance again and wish that image in the mirror was a younger person that they see
3 lines says it all
dip
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I think many people out there long for their youthful appearance again and wish that image in the mirror was a younger person that they see
3 lines says it all
dip
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
Comment from joannakruk
Why do we feel the need to abhor the natural aging process. Why don't we treat the wrinkles like character marks? Why do we criticise the unavoidable change. Why do we consider spending exhorbant sums of money on surgery to reverse nature? Our beauty lies within. Let's not forget this. Great piece. Well done
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Why do we feel the need to abhor the natural aging process. Why don't we treat the wrinkles like character marks? Why do we criticise the unavoidable change. Why do we consider spending exhorbant sums of money on surgery to reverse nature? Our beauty lies within. Let's not forget this. Great piece. Well done
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
Comment from rockinm76233
enjoyed your poem and the message it carries. Sometimes the mirror can be cruel but usually it's just truthful, much to our regrets. Enjoyed the read and the reflections.
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enjoyed your poem and the message it carries. Sometimes the mirror can be cruel but usually it's just truthful, much to our regrets. Enjoyed the read and the reflections.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
Comment from Pantygynt
This looks fine to me as long as I appreciate you may be pronouncing cruel as a single syllable. I don't but will fight to the death for your right to do so, whatever the dictionaries may say. You have the end rhyme required in lines one and two and alliteration on the B. Contrary to common belief alliteration can be said to be present when words are closely connected. They do not have to be adjacent. The philosophy seems sound enough to me but you are stretching most of the requirements. There could be argument over the syllable count and the alliteration and the rhyme is only over two lines. So what I am getting at is that there may be entries that fit the parameters more closely and you could lose out because of that.
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This looks fine to me as long as I appreciate you may be pronouncing cruel as a single syllable. I don't but will fight to the death for your right to do so, whatever the dictionaries may say. You have the end rhyme required in lines one and two and alliteration on the B. Contrary to common belief alliteration can be said to be present when words are closely connected. They do not have to be adjacent. The philosophy seems sound enough to me but you are stretching most of the requirements. There could be argument over the syllable count and the alliteration and the rhyme is only over two lines. So what I am getting at is that there may be entries that fit the parameters more closely and you could lose out because of that.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
Comment from EricBrady
Oh yes, the dreaded gravity and time that takes its toll on the body, mind and soul. Perfect little 7-7-7 poem on that dreaded aging. Great presentation and I love the chosen artwork, so perfect for your poem. Mirror, mirror on the wall who still looks younger than them all. Best wishes in the contest.
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Oh yes, the dreaded gravity and time that takes its toll on the body, mind and soul. Perfect little 7-7-7 poem on that dreaded aging. Great presentation and I love the chosen artwork, so perfect for your poem. Mirror, mirror on the wall who still looks younger than them all. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
Comment from RoostyNester
Yes...it sometimes hurts to look into the mirror when you have gotten old. But I do still believe there is even beauty in age. If you live a life of humor and laughter, it will transfer to the face you see in the mirror. Hatred and jealousy will destroy looks faster than the aging does. Your poem was very insightful. I liked it.
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Yes...it sometimes hurts to look into the mirror when you have gotten old. But I do still believe there is even beauty in age. If you live a life of humor and laughter, it will transfer to the face you see in the mirror. Hatred and jealousy will destroy looks faster than the aging does. Your poem was very insightful. I liked it.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
Comment from winnona
A very well written contest entry. Very realistic words. Time is very cruel. Especially if your mind is still very active and your body is wearing out. I think you did well completing the challenge of the contest.
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A very well written contest entry. Very realistic words. Time is very cruel. Especially if your mind is still very active and your body is wearing out. I think you did well completing the challenge of the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
Comment from Bill O'Bier
You have created some strong images. Your words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork fits well. Thanks for sharing this piece. Good luck in this contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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You have created some strong images. Your words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork fits well. Thanks for sharing this piece. Good luck in this contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Entry requires three lines in average words, a philosophical first-person statement about being old, seven syllables, alliteration and at least one rhyme, no animation, no soundtrack, and great philosophy.
Your entry has good syllable count, average words, one rhyme, and plain presentation.
Your entry could use one more alliterated word.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Entry requires three lines in average words, a philosophical first-person statement about being old, seven syllables, alliteration and at least one rhyme, no animation, no soundtrack, and great philosophy.
Your entry has good syllable count, average words, one rhyme, and plain presentation.
Your entry could use one more alliterated word.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Thank you. I have changed the last line to read "gravity and time deceive"
Comment from Joan E.
You followed the contest's guidelines to the letter and created a thought-provoking poem. The artwork you selected reinforces your theme well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
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You followed the contest's guidelines to the letter and created a thought-provoking poem. The artwork you selected reinforces your theme well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
