It's All in the Cards
Aging leaves much to be desired26 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
You did a wonderful job writing what was required. I read your poem a few times. I can relate to your theme. I assume the last line refers to death. While memory loss refers to growing older.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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You did a wonderful job writing what was required. I read your poem a few times. I can relate to your theme. I assume the last line refers to death. While memory loss refers to growing older.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Thank you. Actually, the last line was meant to suggest the best of luck. The ace of spaces is the highest card and is considered a good luck charm. There are other interpretations, however, and I am afraid that one is "the death card." Without being able to add notes this is confusing. Thank you for your nice review.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This poem has the correct syllable count (7-7-7) to meet the criteria for this contest. I like this one very much. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Thank you for sharing. This poem has the correct syllable count (7-7-7) to meet the criteria for this contest. I like this one very much. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Pantygynt
All the contest requirements seem to have been met. All that pretence. No wonder you want to draw the death card. The blue pills might make it all worth while again.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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All the contest requirements seem to have been met. All that pretence. No wonder you want to draw the death card. The blue pills might make it all worth while again.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Oh my, not the death card- the good luck charm....Double meaning here, I guess... Gee
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you're not that old then lol.
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Right!!!
Comment from rockinm76233
Enjoyed your words it reminds me of what my dad use to say, he said, "Old age ain't for sisseys" How right he was. But, I'm still kicking and determined to do my best as long a I can.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Enjoyed your words it reminds me of what my dad use to say, he said, "Old age ain't for sisseys" How right he was. But, I'm still kicking and determined to do my best as long a I can.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Me, too! Good luck...and thanks for the review.
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You bet.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
I know I'm aging, but I'm enjoying the process. Nice use of brief words for this contest. The arrangement with the artwork is great. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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I know I'm aging, but I'm enjoying the process. Nice use of brief words for this contest. The arrangement with the artwork is great. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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So am, I ! Wouldn't be writing poetry if that wasn't the case- you, too it seems. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Entry requires three lines in average words, a philosophical first-person statement about being old, seven syllables, alliteration and at least one rhyme, no animation, no soundtrack, and great philosophy.
Your entry has complied with all requirements but the statement is not clear.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Entry requires three lines in average words, a philosophical first-person statement about being old, seven syllables, alliteration and at least one rhyme, no animation, no soundtrack, and great philosophy.
Your entry has complied with all requirements but the statement is not clear.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from alleewin
I like your poem. I like that all of the verses rhyme. I especially like the line that says
'I pretend through life's charades.'
You have met all of the requirements so ...Good Luck.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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I like your poem. I like that all of the verses rhyme. I especially like the line that says
'I pretend through life's charades.'
You have met all of the requirements so ...Good Luck.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the review and your good wishes.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes. Sadly a lot of elderly folks have very little to look forward to, especially those who are cast off by their own families and placed in nursing homes and retirement communities. I do volunteer work through my church visiting area nursing homes and these shut-ins, just to give them someone to talk to, and to show them that someone still cares.
Granted, some need around the clock care, but many do not.
Best of luck to you in the 7/7/7 poetry contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Yes. Sadly a lot of elderly folks have very little to look forward to, especially those who are cast off by their own families and placed in nursing homes and retirement communities. I do volunteer work through my church visiting area nursing homes and these shut-ins, just to give them someone to talk to, and to show them that someone still cares.
Granted, some need around the clock care, but many do not.
Best of luck to you in the 7/7/7 poetry contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Thank you. Yes, we should all be more mindful of the needs of others, especially the elderly.
Comment from JanPerry
Good work, as four stars represent. I like the last line "praying for the ace of spades." Memory has been shortened to fit the seven syllable criteria.
"I pretend through life's charades" What charades would that be? You are opening up questions with this one.
Okay, thanks.
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Good work, as four stars represent. I like the last line "praying for the ace of spades." Memory has been shortened to fit the seven syllable criteria.
"I pretend through life's charades" What charades would that be? You are opening up questions with this one.
Okay, thanks.
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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O.K>
Comment from William Ross
Great job on the 7.7.7. on aging, good rhyme on all the lines, I like the praying for the ace of spades. Best of luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Great job on the 7.7.7. on aging, good rhyme on all the lines, I like the praying for the ace of spades. Best of luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016
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Nice review. Thank you for the positive comments.
