Honeybee
5-7-5 insect9 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Bees are so cute and I love honey, I like the insect you chose. Good job with the syllable count. You meet the requirement of the contest.
The poem doesn't have the flow of connected lines. Each line stands alone and unconnected grammatically and in context.
Also, there is a comma after honeybee. Why?
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Hello,
Bees are so cute and I love honey, I like the insect you chose. Good job with the syllable count. You meet the requirement of the contest.
The poem doesn't have the flow of connected lines. Each line stands alone and unconnected grammatically and in context.
Also, there is a comma after honeybee. Why?
Comment Written 06-Sep-2016
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing your fine poem. You could probably get a job promoting honey as you were able to make me see and even taste that wonderful, golden, glob of sugar. Great job, and good luck in the contest. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Thanks for sharing your fine poem. You could probably get a job promoting honey as you were able to make me see and even taste that wonderful, golden, glob of sugar. Great job, and good luck in the contest. :-)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Thank you
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good 5-7-5 poem you have penned. I like that you used such great wording that a picture was not necessary to know what you were talking about. Good luck in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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This is a very good 5-7-5 poem you have penned. I like that you used such great wording that a picture was not necessary to know what you were talking about. Good luck in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thank you Teri and for the six stars. I don't get many of those
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I truly enjoyed this work~ hugs, Teri
Comment from Bollie
Real cute, a nice poem for the 5-7-5 poetry contest. You made really great use out of every word and syllable. Really nice job, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Real cute, a nice poem for the 5-7-5 poetry contest. You made really great use out of every word and syllable. Really nice job, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from Gladys2013
Literally short, sweet and to the point . Very nicely written and so much can be taken from just a few lines. I like how you tied everything together from pollen to honey at the end. well done
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Literally short, sweet and to the point . Very nicely written and so much can be taken from just a few lines. I like how you tied everything together from pollen to honey at the end. well done
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from lancellot
Very nice, and good choice for the background color. This 5-7-5 feels like a Haiku when you read the summation ending. Good idea to do it that way, even if you didn't have to. Voters like the added degree.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Very nice, and good choice for the background color. This 5-7-5 feels like a Haiku when you read the summation ending. Good idea to do it that way, even if you didn't have to. Voters like the added degree.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your review
Comment from helenedeeds
I like this well enough but I find it lacking. I found myself seeking to know the answer that is never going to be answered. It's very pretty.
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I like this well enough but I find it lacking. I found myself seeking to know the answer that is never going to be answered. It's very pretty.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from prettybluebirds
Exceptional. good to see you writing again. This is a really cute poem. Hope your HUN had a happy birthday. Best of luck in the contest. Love, Auntie
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Exceptional. good to see you writing again. This is a really cute poem. Hope your HUN had a happy birthday. Best of luck in the contest. Love, Auntie
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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One more celebration to go. Thanks Auntie. Love ya
Comment from tfawcus
I liked the idea of the honeybee for your response to this 5-7-5 challenge. I wondered if, however, it is the bees' infatuation with nectar that causes the pollination, with the honey being a later result. Just a thought. Perhaps I am misinterpreting your intention.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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I liked the idea of the honeybee for your response to this 5-7-5 challenge. I wondered if, however, it is the bees' infatuation with nectar that causes the pollination, with the honey being a later result. Just a thought. Perhaps I am misinterpreting your intention.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thank you for your review. I have edited the last line to read "euphoric honey"
