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Unrequited Love

Cute 5-7-5

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Comment from BeasPeas
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This is an amusing 5-7-5. Love the end rhymes and, you know, it could have gone another way with a similar rhyme and a bird landing. I'm glad you kept the poem cute and funny. A good entry for the content. Marilyn

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2016


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Comment from jlsavell
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Don and Vicki, this is truly cute. The picture is adorable and matches the sentiment perfectly. Bravo My son had a bird poop on his head atca zoo! ...jimi

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016


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Comment from liz burgoyne
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You met the requirements of the 5-7-5 with your hilarious poem. Growing up my sister was afraid of our budgie. I had forgotten about that wild story until I read your poem!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from Marykelly
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Unrequited love is the title of this poem so I gather the message is that like the parakeet on the head the uninvited and perhaps unwanted intruder into personal space is not always welcome even though the intruder expects to be welcome. Coming on too strong can be more intimidating than inviting.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from Steve Blair
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I enjoyed this work. I have a granddaughter who lives a long way away. I am watching her grow up through images. Touched a cord. This particular photo perfectly matches your poem. Well done. Write on.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from okanaganbell
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Really really cute. I enjoyed the short read along with the picture, that was obviously the inspiration. I LIKE IT. The only tiny suggestion to you would have been to; eliminate the 'you' in the last line and added a small word before 'bit' to strengthen the connection of the end word; bit. Like tad, bad, wit or tid....but that's just sayin' because 'I' kind of lost the flow in the words there, just a 'bit'... Good job.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from sage17611
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This is a nicely written poem for this writing prompt. The picture is really cute and elevates the words. Good job with the syllable count, congratulations on your second place win.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from barkingdog
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haha
I think the parakeet just wanted in the picture. See how he's staring at the camera?
Priceless picture and you captured the mood in your 5/7/5.
Your poem has excellent end rhyming and perfect syllable count.
Good luck in the contest.
:) e

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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Comment from ruzu27
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This is a very nice 5-7-5 poem and it goes so perfectly well with the picture you have chosen. This humorous poem can hardly remain unseen.
Thank you so much for sharing with us.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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    You are welcome
Comment from susan18
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Funny little poem with great illustration, too.
Good rhyme and choice of words.
Reminds me of my mother's evil little bird who loved to dive-bomb visitors!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016


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