Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5 about a bird, Yellow Feathered Bird, has the syllables right and creates a surreal destination for this creature that already flies and could go further and farther than we know.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and rating, they are greatly appreciated. Blessings...............

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem for the contest. I really like the picture & your color scheme.

Your 2nd line has 8 syllables--universe has 3 syllables. You will be disqualified if it remains like this.

Your poem makes an interesting statement.

Best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review, rating and best wishes. Blessings..................

Comment from innerworlds

Excellent

The artwork is lovely and sets the mood of freedom to fly beyond our limitations.
The well chosen words reaffirm that theme.
The word "universe" sets up the last line beautifully, since we cannot see with human eyes the limits of space. And so the bird becomes a spirit, flying onward into an eternity we are not yet able to understand.
Well, that's my interpretation, anyway.
Regardless, I really like this poem, so richly written in only eleven words.
Thanks for sharing!
Randi

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review, rating and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. You interpretation is spot on my friend. Blessings.......................

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very beautiful in just a few words it came to life and i can picture in my mind how high these birds to fly. i love the artwork and i felt you did amazing job thank you for sharing your work

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings................Portia