Treasure Hunt
naani contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very nice Naani paints a happy mental picture with very few words. Flows well. Excellent choice of artwork. I would recommend this poem to anyone.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Very nice Naani paints a happy mental picture with very few words. Flows well. Excellent choice of artwork. I would recommend this poem to anyone.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much for the lovely review
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You're welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
In this naani, Treasure Hunt, you use its twenty-four syllables to take us back or remind us of the great thrill that discovery brings and how we react to it even now. Nice.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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In this naani, Treasure Hunt, you use its twenty-four syllables to take us back or remind us of the great thrill that discovery brings and how we react to it even now. Nice.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you for really "getting" my little naani. I really appreciate your review.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I really like the picture you have chosen. It adds a sense of nostalgia to
your well written poem. Hidden treasure in beach combing - I still love
doing this while walking on the beach. Nicely done and best of luck in
the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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I really like the picture you have chosen. It adds a sense of nostalgia to
your well written poem. Hidden treasure in beach combing - I still love
doing this while walking on the beach. Nicely done and best of luck in
the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much for this really well written review.
Comment from Jackarrie
I love this naani, well writtrn and your syllables count is in keeping with the rules of the contest. The image is fabulous with the young beachcombers. I wish you the best of luck in the contest Mary
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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I love this naani, well writtrn and your syllables count is in keeping with the rules of the contest. The image is fabulous with the young beachcombers. I wish you the best of luck in the contest Mary
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the lovely comments
Comment from rama devi
Nice short poem capturing a moment. It is true to form as per contest directives, though the contest rules are incomplete. A naani, which the rules mention means, "an expression of one and all," is meant to be universally applicable--like an aphorism. Your post is specific to a scene on the beach and is not really universally applicable, so is not a good naani, though it is a fine short poem on its own.
The contest description lacks clarity on this, so I am not deducting a star, but just thought you'd want to know what a real naani is.
Good luck.
Warm Regards,
rd
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Nice short poem capturing a moment. It is true to form as per contest directives, though the contest rules are incomplete. A naani, which the rules mention means, "an expression of one and all," is meant to be universally applicable--like an aphorism. Your post is specific to a scene on the beach and is not really universally applicable, so is not a good naani, though it is a fine short poem on its own.
The contest description lacks clarity on this, so I am not deducting a star, but just thought you'd want to know what a real naani is.
Good luck.
Warm Regards,
rd
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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My Dear Friend, I could not agree with you more. This is not a perfect naani, but yet I wanted to catch moment. Possibly, I should have made it a haiku. But the spirit of life and capturing a moment, I just could not resist. Thank you
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It definitely captured the moment! :-)
Don't worry--most voters will not know about naanis...so this could place. :)
Warmly, rd
Comment from DonandVicki
A cute poem that all grandparents can relate to. A very well chosen artwork that you used to enhance your poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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A cute poem that all grandparents can relate to. A very well chosen artwork that you used to enhance your poem. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from susan18
Very sweet poem with lovely illustration.
Brings us back to childhood pleasures with a few apt images!
I liked "icy blue waves"--I can both see and feel them!
Good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Very sweet poem with lovely illustration.
Brings us back to childhood pleasures with a few apt images!
I liked "icy blue waves"--I can both see and feel them!
Good luck!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Format is good.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You describe the scene at the beach
with the children and their "rainbow pails" very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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-Nice image and presentation.
-Format is good.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You describe the scene at the beach
with the children and their "rainbow pails" very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Thank you, I took your suggestion, and made the image larger. Now the font is another matter. LOL None the less, I agree with you. I always appreciate constructive comments as yours.
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You are very welcome. I noticed the change and it looks very good. I am glad the comments were appreciated. Do you use Advanced Editor? It is easy to work with.
Good luck; you have a good entry.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet,
I'm counting 24 syllables. Beach days are almost over for another summer. But I've searched for sand dollars this month. I took my daughter and granddaughter down to New River Beach at low tide, and we found 8 of them, still alive of course. No, we didn't take them with us. I tossed them out farther as the tide was coming in. They are a beautiful keepsake when just the shell. Lots of fun looking for them too. Aptly named. And I like your conclusion, "Hidden treasure". Good alliteration with "seek sand dollars". And I like "rainbow pails". Very nice. Thanks for sharing.
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Hi Mystery Poet,
I'm counting 24 syllables. Beach days are almost over for another summer. But I've searched for sand dollars this month. I took my daughter and granddaughter down to New River Beach at low tide, and we found 8 of them, still alive of course. No, we didn't take them with us. I tossed them out farther as the tide was coming in. They are a beautiful keepsake when just the shell. Lots of fun looking for them too. Aptly named. And I like your conclusion, "Hidden treasure". Good alliteration with "seek sand dollars". And I like "rainbow pails". Very nice. Thanks for sharing.
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 31-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Thank you for the wonderful and well thought out review.
