Favorite Short Stories, Vol. 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "A Cockroach Named Harriet"an eclectic fiction collection, old and new
28 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
Your story definitely gave me a laugh! I'm so glad you told me to read it. I liked the part about all doctors treating bugs. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Your story definitely gave me a laugh! I'm so glad you told me to read it. I liked the part about all doctors treating bugs. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
Comment from CALLAHANMR
This is a delightful, tongue-in-cheek, fabrication.At least, I doubt you ever owned a smart cockroach, I've had many cockroaches as temporary residents,, but none ever wanted to stay around after the spray. No way to treat a pet, Good luck in the contest.
Roger
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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This is a delightful, tongue-in-cheek, fabrication.At least, I doubt you ever owned a smart cockroach, I've had many cockroaches as temporary residents,, but none ever wanted to stay around after the spray. No way to treat a pet, Good luck in the contest.
Roger
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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LOL - no I never owned a smart one, but I sure have seen more of them than I'd like! LOL - yes, that's a terrible way to treat one's pet! Hahahahaha.
Thanks very much.
Comment from Judy Couch
This is hilarious. You have quite an imagination. I especially liked the part about the cockroach birthday party. How long do those things live?
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This is hilarious. You have quite an imagination. I especially liked the part about the cockroach birthday party. How long do those things live?
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from write hand blue
I had a little laugh at this one, a cockroach for a pet. How novel.
This is most most inventive and, ~I LOVE IT~
You describe how you feed and look after your Harriet. And as for going to the vet with one of these, well... LOL.
You deserve to win. Nicely written and most creative. Good luck with Harriet in the contest...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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I had a little laugh at this one, a cockroach for a pet. How novel.
This is most most inventive and, ~I LOVE IT~
You describe how you feed and look after your Harriet. And as for going to the vet with one of these, well... LOL.
You deserve to win. Nicely written and most creative. Good luck with Harriet in the contest...
~Mel~
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Wow, Mel, what an incredibly generous review! I am seriously honored - thank you very much! I had a ball writing this one. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)
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Good luck. Sometimes you feel confident and enjoy a creation. I have that with 'Necrospirella etc etc.' My latest contest entry for the horror contest. But in the cold light of day, I must awake, and glimpse reality. LOL. ~Mel~
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LOL - ummmm, errrrrr...I suppose I should not worry, but these things DO happen - not YOUR little worms perhaps, but...(LOL) you happened on a fear that I am positive will resonate with MOST! (YIKES!)
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If it's 'YIKES' then my jobs well done. Heh! Heh!
Comment from Alex Rosel
A few cliches sprinkle this piece, and it's all telling rather than showing - that's not so important in a short story, though - but I like your inventive approach. A cockroach? For a pet? The very idea brought a smile to my face.
Of course, I do take Harriet out of her bowl sometimes--even cockroaches need exercise. But I always supervise. - Lovely couple of sentences. These widened my smile.
Harriet's friends and family were jitter-bugging all over the place. Her uncle owns a cockroach band - Ha, ha!
And Prissy is a different cat since that party--a little stand-offish. - As if cats weren't stand-offish to start with ;-)
Mind you, you will have to wash the dishes afterwards anyway, but hey, it beats wasting food. - A great concluding sentence.
I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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A few cliches sprinkle this piece, and it's all telling rather than showing - that's not so important in a short story, though - but I like your inventive approach. A cockroach? For a pet? The very idea brought a smile to my face.
Of course, I do take Harriet out of her bowl sometimes--even cockroaches need exercise. But I always supervise. - Lovely couple of sentences. These widened my smile.
Harriet's friends and family were jitter-bugging all over the place. Her uncle owns a cockroach band - Ha, ha!
And Prissy is a different cat since that party--a little stand-offish. - As if cats weren't stand-offish to start with ;-)
Mind you, you will have to wash the dishes afterwards anyway, but hey, it beats wasting food. - A great concluding sentence.
I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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LOL - yes, it is telling, and that's okay - I've written more than one that's pure dialogue - LOL. It all depends, yes? I'm so glad you liked it. I had a ball writing it. (Oh, and I LOVE cliches, as horrifying as they CAN be when used by inexperienced writers. But in humor or satire, sometimes they just work, don't you agree? Hahahahaha!)
What a great review! You've been so kind, and made me smile big-time. Thank you very much.
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Yes, cliches can definitely work in humor and satire. When I employ them in this role, I try to put a twist on them, maybe slightly mis-quoting, especially so for satire ;-)
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A cockroach in the band is worth two in the bush ;-)
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Hahahahaha!
Comment from kathleenspalding
Haha! Welcome to Harriet's apartment, LOL! Very cute and creative story with a refreshing lack of SPAG. Thank you! You should have a good chance in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Haha! Welcome to Harriet's apartment, LOL! Very cute and creative story with a refreshing lack of SPAG. Thank you! You should have a good chance in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much! I had a ball writing it. :))
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You're welcome.
Comment from oliver818
What a cool little story, I love the use of bug related expressions. I had a nice giggle over that one. Very well written, and very satisfying in spite of the short length. Good luck for the competition!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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What a cool little story, I love the use of bug related expressions. I had a nice giggle over that one. Very well written, and very satisfying in spite of the short length. Good luck for the competition!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Oh, I am thrilled! I'm so glad you enjoyed this - I had a few giggles writing it too. :)) Thank you very much!
Comment from Heather Knight
This is hilarious, if I hadn't been invigilating an exam I would have laughed out loud. But I wouldn't like to have a cockroach as a pet, that's for sure.
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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This is hilarious, if I hadn't been invigilating an exam I would have laughed out loud. But I wouldn't like to have a cockroach as a pet, that's for sure.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Now why wouldn't you want a cockroach for a pet after all the nice things I told you about Harriet? (LOL!!!)
What a kind and generous review - thank you - I'm so pleased you liked it!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
OMG Dawn, this is just too cute. It is certainly the winner in my book. Too funny. Say hi to Harriet for me!
ome of them were pretty stubborn about leaving; tried to hide in my cupboards. (trying to hide).
Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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OMG Dawn, this is just too cute. It is certainly the winner in my book. Too funny. Say hi to Harriet for me!
ome of them were pretty stubborn about leaving; tried to hide in my cupboards. (trying to hide).
Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 30-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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Thanks, Deb. :))
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Oh dear, I am so far behind I will never catch up! Please forgive the cut & paste!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi dawn,
Well that was a breath of fresh air for this competition! LOL Quite humorous and goof un all in. very well written and I might be tempted tog et one myself.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Hi dawn,
Well that was a breath of fresh air for this competition! LOL Quite humorous and goof un all in. very well written and I might be tempted tog et one myself.
All the best
G
Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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LOL. If you do, be sure to tell him/her tat family and friends aren't welcome. LOL. Thanks, Garith - glad you liked it.
