haiku (gentle winds whisper)
nature haiku contest entry20 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
This is very cool. It is so subtle, but took me into the woods immediately. I lived up north for many years and I always thought the pines would whisper secrets when I walked in the forest.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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This is very cool. It is so subtle, but took me into the woods immediately. I lived up north for many years and I always thought the pines would whisper secrets when I walked in the forest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Thank you again Spiritual Echo for another awesome review.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from LanceHill
Very nice Steven. Very few words with a huge description. I love that picture. It would be better if I was in it on a boat with rod and real in hand. Have a great one. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Very nice Steven. Very few words with a huge description. I love that picture. It would be better if I was in it on a boat with rod and real in hand. Have a great one. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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What? A boat? On a lake? LOL! I would love nothing more cuz. thank you for the awesome review.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is truly a lovely contest entry. The construction is flawless as you keep to the syllable and line count restrictions without detracting from the pristine imagery of the first two lines. The satori is stunning. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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This is truly a lovely contest entry. The construction is flawless as you keep to the syllable and line count restrictions without detracting from the pristine imagery of the first two lines. The satori is stunning. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you Mystic for the awesome review. I am looking forward to the cooler weather.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Steve. Excellent images portrayed so nicely in this haiku. You have a great satori to wrap it up, too. Good luck to you in the competition. I think you have a solid winner here. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi, Steve. Excellent images portrayed so nicely in this haiku. You have a great satori to wrap it up, too. Good luck to you in the competition. I think you have a solid winner here. Bob
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you Bob for the excellent review. I came in 3rd, tough competition in this one lol.
God bless!
Steve
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Congrats on third! That's better than zip. Steve. :) Good job. Bob
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I agree! thank you Bob
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Neonewman, this is a very good entry into the Nature Haiku writing prompt contest. I can see why you placed. The picture you have attached is beautiful and the words you have written are very descriptive and clever. I really enjoyed this read. ~DD
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Neonewman, this is a very good entry into the Nature Haiku writing prompt contest. I can see why you placed. The picture you have attached is beautiful and the words you have written are very descriptive and clever. I really enjoyed this read. ~DD
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you DD, I really enjoy crafting these little pieces.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Lulube
Great photo I must say
Good imagery with the whispering and great summing up last line.
The seduction can really get the imagination going.
Good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Great photo I must say
Good imagery with the whispering and great summing up last line.
The seduction can really get the imagination going.
Good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you Lulube, I am pleased this piece is so well received.
God bless!
Steve
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welcome
lulube
Comment from BeasPeas
Nicely presented nature haiku with autumnal colors. I like the
use of seduction throughout and the whispering of sweet
nothings. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Nicely presented nature haiku with autumnal colors. I like the
use of seduction throughout and the whispering of sweet
nothings. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review Marilyn. I am so ready for fall!
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Leineco
There are (to my taste) three outstanding entries in this contest - yours
is one of them!
I love the slyness of your satori! The opening imagery engages our senses,
but the closing line triggers our imagination. Silly humans think it's all about
impressing US - but we are just peeping-toms watching nature's endless
dance while being wooed!
Wonderfully done :-)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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There are (to my taste) three outstanding entries in this contest - yours
is one of them!
I love the slyness of your satori! The opening imagery engages our senses,
but the closing line triggers our imagination. Silly humans think it's all about
impressing US - but we are just peeping-toms watching nature's endless
dance while being wooed!
Wonderfully done :-)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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I love your perception of this piece Leineco. Thank you for the detailed review. I do feel as if nature can be seductive at times.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Excellent poem. All the more beautiful, for writing the carefully chosen words, in a nature Haiku. I love the sentiment, and the placement of the words couldn't be better. Thank you for stating the rules of a nature Haiku. Wonderful imagery. Thanks for sharing your talent with me.
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Excellent poem. All the more beautiful, for writing the carefully chosen words, in a nature Haiku. I love the sentiment, and the placement of the words couldn't be better. Thank you for stating the rules of a nature Haiku. Wonderful imagery. Thanks for sharing your talent with me.
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you Jesse for the awesome review, i can't wait for fall to arrive.
God bless!
Steve
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Yes, fall will be beautiful, yet I am still enjoying the summer. I am fortunate to live where it's nice weather for most of the year. Take care.
Jesse
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Steve
= Excellent nature haiku entry.
= I believe you captured the essence of the coming season.
= Great artwork to complement. Good luck!
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Publishing VIA ... Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi, Steve
= Excellent nature haiku entry.
= I believe you captured the essence of the coming season.
= Great artwork to complement. Good luck!
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Publishing VIA ... Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi Jax, thank you for the wonderful review my friend. I am ready for cooler weather.
God bless!
Steve
