Pete the Pigeon
A baby bird who refused to fly his cardboard condo...26 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
How do you do it? I don't mean write, I KNOW how you do that - well! What I mean is, how on earth do you have so many nonfiction stories that read like pure fiction? Good golly, Molly! (Hahahahahahaa! LOVE the "Oh for Pete's sake!" Among others...)
Just a couple of small grammar glitches - REALLY? do I really have to try to find them? I will have to read it again. I was having too much fun to stop and make notes, dagburnit! (or somethin' like that...) This is not short, you know (but very funny) LOL.
But here's a correction that isn't really necessary, but I like MINE BETTER. (LOL)
tent sleeping = sleeping in a tent (I mean, come on, with all you have written, two extra little words, Mary? "in" & "a" - sheesh)
By the way, what's 'gorilla glue'?
Alright, okay, I'm stalling...(*grumble, grumble*) In no particular order (just as I find them again...)
1) sentence fragment - "Pete flapping but this time engaged and focused." Try Pete (was) flapping
2) "...cinder block to the head (shot) - get rid of "shot" please
There are a couple of others - go look for them yourself. You're spoiling my vibe. (*smirk*)
Okay, seriously, as IF you can't figure out which ones aren't right...
Here's a six anyway. Don't get used to it. I have to spread them around...
Nobody writes like you do. (But then again, who has the MATERIAL to work with?) Hahahahahaha!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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How do you do it? I don't mean write, I KNOW how you do that - well! What I mean is, how on earth do you have so many nonfiction stories that read like pure fiction? Good golly, Molly! (Hahahahahahaa! LOVE the "Oh for Pete's sake!" Among others...)
Just a couple of small grammar glitches - REALLY? do I really have to try to find them? I will have to read it again. I was having too much fun to stop and make notes, dagburnit! (or somethin' like that...) This is not short, you know (but very funny) LOL.
But here's a correction that isn't really necessary, but I like MINE BETTER. (LOL)
tent sleeping = sleeping in a tent (I mean, come on, with all you have written, two extra little words, Mary? "in" & "a" - sheesh)
By the way, what's 'gorilla glue'?
Alright, okay, I'm stalling...(*grumble, grumble*) In no particular order (just as I find them again...)
1) sentence fragment - "Pete flapping but this time engaged and focused." Try Pete (was) flapping
2) "...cinder block to the head (shot) - get rid of "shot" please
There are a couple of others - go look for them yourself. You're spoiling my vibe. (*smirk*)
Okay, seriously, as IF you can't figure out which ones aren't right...
Here's a six anyway. Don't get used to it. I have to spread them around...
Nobody writes like you do. (But then again, who has the MATERIAL to work with?) Hahahahahaha!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Haha, thank you Ms. Dawn, for the extensive review. I very much appreciate your keen eyes on this piece. I have made the recommended changes and yes, I like yours better too. :) I made a few other changes as I incorporated yours, so hopefully I got the ones that you noticed (passively-aggressively moved to passive-aggressively) I must have been having flashbacks of the cinder block incident and didn't realize I was overdoing the 'ely's! Thank you my love, and like I said, I wasn't sure it was a six so wouldn't be offended at all. I love that your reading me :) Gorilla Glue is a super duper adhering glue that is pretty amazing.
As for the non-fiction...I'm a magnet for awkward and bizarre. I have no other way to put it. If it weren't for the videos, no one would believe it, right?
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Haha, thank you Ms. Dawn, for the extensive review. I very much appreciate your keen eyes on this piece. I have made the recommended changes and yes, I like yours better too. :) I made a few other changes as I incorporated yours, so hopefully I got the ones that you noticed (passively-aggressively moved to passive-aggressively) I must have been having flashbacks of the cinder block incident and didn't realize I was overdoing the 'ely's! Thank you my love, and like I said, I wasn't sure it was a six so wouldn't be offended at all. I love that your reading me :) Gorilla Glue is a super duper adhering glue that is pretty amazing.
As for the non-fiction...I'm a magnet for awkward and bizarre. I have no other way to put it. If it weren't for the videos, no one would believe it, right?
Comment from alleewin
This is the the funniest story I have read for a long time. I was in hysterics. I will most likely break out with laughter every time someone says the word "pigeon". I will picture you in the water retention field, patterning a pigeons behavior when you are wearing your 'expecting a royal invitation,' accessories.
I am glad the wolfhound's owner was found.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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This is the the funniest story I have read for a long time. I was in hysterics. I will most likely break out with laughter every time someone says the word "pigeon". I will picture you in the water retention field, patterning a pigeons behavior when you are wearing your 'expecting a royal invitation,' accessories.
I am glad the wolfhound's owner was found.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Alleewin, for your RR&R, fabulous SIX, and for the follow! I loved reading your review.
Welcome to FanStory 😁
Comment from robina1978
Nice videos that complement your story perfectly. I see it is non-fiction, but assume you don't have this syndrome, that I never heard of. I loved the part mainly about the dove and your other animals.
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Nice videos that complement your story perfectly. I see it is non-fiction, but assume you don't have this syndrome, that I never heard of. I loved the part mainly about the dove and your other animals.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Robina. I very much appreciate your RR&R and comments. No, there is nothing such as the syndrome described, but I definitely received the tendency from my dad!
Have a great evening!
Comment from Douglas Paul
Imagine her angst when (an) lost and hungry (80 pound) wolfhound happened upon our campsite, sporting bloodied paws and a disposition as sweet as carrot cake. = (a) - (80-pound)
Very cute story told with your usual sense of humor. I enjoyed this one. The video of Pete riding on your head is really funny
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Imagine her angst when (an) lost and hungry (80 pound) wolfhound happened upon our campsite, sporting bloodied paws and a disposition as sweet as carrot cake. = (a) - (80-pound)
Very cute story told with your usual sense of humor. I enjoyed this one. The video of Pete riding on your head is really funny
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Thank you for catching the nits, Paul. I believe i have corrected them. I appreciate your keen eye, as well as your RR&R!
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Glad to be able to help
Comment from barkingdog
Pigeon Pete's eventual success made up for the 'brick' incident (horrid woman!).
I watched the videos. Pete was more interested in strolling the grounds or grooming himself on your head. Fat fellow--your Pete.
I hope he met a Mrs. and had more little Petes and Petites.
Great syndrome. More people should have it. The world would be a better place.
:) e
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Pigeon Pete's eventual success made up for the 'brick' incident (horrid woman!).
I watched the videos. Pete was more interested in strolling the grounds or grooming himself on your head. Fat fellow--your Pete.
I hope he met a Mrs. and had more little Petes and Petites.
Great syndrome. More people should have it. The world would be a better place.
:) e
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Hi Ellen, thank you for your wonderful RR&R, and comments! I hoped the same for Pete...
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I have a six, now you have a six.
Excellent story, excellently written, no problems noted.
Laughed my butt off then had to call my daughter who did the same thing as I was trying to make it through even just one paragraph before breaking down in hysterical laughter.
this is the best I have read in a long while.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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I have a six, now you have a six.
Excellent story, excellently written, no problems noted.
Laughed my butt off then had to call my daughter who did the same thing as I was trying to make it through even just one paragraph before breaking down in hysterical laughter.
this is the best I have read in a long while.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Thank you Barb, for your RR&R and for that wonderful SIX!! You had me laughing at the thought of you cracking up while reading it to your daughter...that is good stuff right there! Thank you for sharing 😀
